noahsombrero
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- Aug 9, 2023
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Good points overall. The destructive end you envision is another wrong thing. Porn is all about satisfying certain people's need to see wrong things, destructive things. I guess we can't fault porn for that.I love Vivian's inner dialog. And I want something different from a story as well written but typical for the genre. I want an explosive destructive end. All the stories I have been following have characters doing the most immoral wrong headed things and yet all the dilemma's they run into seem anti-climate considering the profound mental and physical damage they caused themselves or others. I want a violent resolution or a profoundly life altering situation for our protagonist. Frankly she needs to end up in a whored-out lifestyle, owned and/or passed around and/or Hutch needs some sort of powerfull revenge to shake the story up. That would makes it different. Maybe even neo-noir like. Then Vivian's inner dialog would get really fascinating rather then just pro-forma-"I do the wrong things",why do I do the wrong things?", "I wont do the wrong thing again" and then "I can't help myself" and she does it -whatever- again. She just digs the hole deeper not in a journey self discovery but of self destruction for herself or those around her.
Like OJ, Husband could have stormed into that bedroom after shooting the lock off the door and shot them both. We see in rl how that turned out for OJ. Sure he displayed a satisfying passion for us, but it was still wrong. He did get away with it, but even then the cost for him was large. The thing is, even OJ knew that if he had lost his wife's love, there is nothing at all he could do about it, except forget her. Not satisfying, kill her.
The solution for Wife doing wrong things is not that she should sink into doing worse things. One good solution for her would be to turn the the wrong thing into a right thing, like work out a long term viable loving relationship with Boss. Or she could do whatever it takes to reconcile with Husband. Both of which we see as acceptable and even common irl. Not that either of those are very likely in this story, I think. I don't really see a good ending likely for either Husband or Wife sad to say.
The different thing that porn could give us here would be a decent believable good ending where the wrong stuff actually ends and good things ensue. So different. But then, porn would not be satisfying its function for those who need to see wrong things.
Too bad love stories are for girls. There is even an entire literary genre devoted to that, the Romance Novel. A woman's fantasy. What we have here is a man's fantasy. And n'er the twain shall meet. Except, somehow, men and women do manage to live together and make babies irl. Maybe some of us are less inclined to fantasy than others. Real sex with a really loved partner can be sufficient.
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