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It isn't only with slang expressions. In general, readers will notice when a writer keeps repeating him or herself. Unless your goal is to draw attention to the repetition, it is better to avoid it altogether."You do you" ... a slang expression is good when introduced occasionally, but you are overdoing it. When it is noticable that you are reusing the same slang expression repeatedly, it's too much. Less is more (ack! I just illustrated the point)
I can't remember which VN it is now but the MC keeps trying to sound romantic and repeats the same thing so man damn times "I want, no, need" I was going to make it into a drinking game and take a shot everytime he said it but felt like my liver wouldn't make it.It isn't only with slang expressions. In general, readers will notice when a writer keeps repeating him or herself. Unless your goal is to draw attention to the repetition, it is better to avoid it altogether.
Yeah I think you can skip her. I cba to go back and redo as that's effort so I've just given it a miss for now.Can you skip the slut LI?
Wasn't a wall rant, questions were asked repeatedly so I gave lots of detail.soo you made a huge wall to bring up a old version story line which yes was a miss for many cuz of NTR which you went on a nonsensical rant for no good reason just because of the underlying connotation that because she is a nympho automatically means a undertone of ntr must still be there because your small brain says that nympho=slut...well lemme edjumacatya a little, nympho or nymphomaniac/nymphomania is quite literally just a over abundance of sexual desire, this does not mean in any shape or form that they fuck everything on two or more. That is the current, past and literal definition of nymphomaniac/mania assigned to it in the late 1820s. The adult industry makes everything 100* worse then it actually is because well it sells and it looks damn good on camera or in games in this case.
I do agree with that last part, no fucking way am I eatin a freshly creamed girl nor am I snowballin a girl who just ate a load![]()
This is how many so far 3 chapters and we are on part two of Chapter 3 and we do not know how many we will end with besides the dev.I'd like to inquire how many chapters in this VN
If you're asking how much content it has, my answer is a hell-of-a-lot more than I expected.I'd like to inquire how many chapters in this VN
Maybe just don't play this game? You've got beef with like half the cast, not everything is for every person.Only played the first few episodes so far but wondering to avoid li's do I need to intentionally not gain points or just turn them down at sex scenes and collect points for friendship/story arc? Im not interested in a girl that loves another man, can I still help her with her parents and avoid a relationship? Watching her cry over Peter and chasing her is not for me.
Similar with Wendy, not interested in a internet slut and is Rin going to be the standard BI girl? kissing Elaine and enjoying it, groping krystals tits, already making me think about going back and ditching her too. Finally is Elaine's story better now or should I be running too the hills still? thx.
Just turn them away at the beginning when given the choice and late game you won't get the story arcs but once on a path I think most you can do is just skip certain sex scenes.Only played the first few episodes so far but wondering to avoid li's do I need to intentionally not gain points or just turn them down at sex scenes and collect points for friendship/story arc? Im not interested in a girl that loves another man, can I still help her with her parents and avoid a relationship? Watching her cry over Peter and chasing her is not for me.
Similar with Wendy, not interested in a internet slut and is Rin going to be the standard BI girl? kissing Elaine and enjoying it, groping krystals tits, already making me think about going back and ditching her too. Finally is Elaine's story better now or should I be running too the hills still? thx.
(english is my 3rd language)Decently written?.... How much of the story is Dev re-writing here?
Let me help, with this! (and I am English as a second language).
- Li had a history of being raped years in the past, (its Yawn x 2000, but that's what the dev went with)
- The perpetrator of that rape stopped when he moved overseas to attend to his rich family's business interests, a couple of years ago. Since then Li has been somewhat shocked over the traumatic change from extreme (being raped/blackmailed consistently) to 'normal'.
- This dramatic change caused her to flail in terms of romance and sexual activeness as she adjusted to her new 'normal' and learned what it meant to NOT BE in the abusive/blackmail situation
- She is finally starting to normalize, in the sense that she feels ready to become emotionally available, when she meets the MC and is starting to develop some base feelings for MC beyond the lust/sexual release that had been prevalent in her life previously.
- At this point, the Rich Rapest (who had spent several years away), has recently returned to the city and seeing the girl on the street (by random chance, or by intentionally trying to find his favorite 'toy'), the rarest tries to coerce the Li to go with him so they can resume the 'old blackmail'.
- Li, shocked and unsure of how to deal with what she sees as the return of a trauma she thought past, is stunned and in a stupor. Such that she doesn't fight back, and is led along.
- MC, jumps in, causing Li to have a crisis moment where she must choose to finally free herself mentally, or become chained by her past.
- With the MC as her emotional support she breaks out of her 'mind trap' and fights back, declaring "Never again!" which is a kick and punch.
- Her and the MC defeat the Rich Rapest, and are drawn closer by the event, which strengthens their bond and helps form a real loving connection as opposed to a causal romantic one.
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This is how I, as a drunk Frenchman, who is English Second language, would solve the issue...
Lyk4n - you are free to use this without crediting me![]()
As a secondary point (and what I was originally choosing to comment on)
It seems like the Dev is trying to find the exact line of "what is ntr/ish/acceptable" and what crosses that line.
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