BuuPlays
Just trying the game for the first time. Seems great so far!
Some quick issues:
1. In the first two chapters, you have some instances of characters thinking, but being tagged as saying things. (I.e. "Eliza" instead of "Eliza Thinking")
2. You have Chapter 1, Chapter 2, Chapter 2 title cards. I'm guessing something was injected at a later date, so the title cards were never updated?
3. At 1 or 2 points in the early story, the MC references things that at that point in the story shouldn't be common knowledge from what I can tell. An example, He mentions "It's not easy being a Nephilim" in passing, but then doesn't even mention it to Eliza until later in the 2nd Chapter 2 segment. And she's shocked to hear it then.
4. Again in chapter 3 with Dalen. They go to meet him, never mention anything about Oren, then later Dalen ponders to himself why Oren would have mentored the MC.
5. OK, more inconsistencies the further into the game I get. The two pirates introduce themselves as the daughters of the pirate king, then in Looter's bay, Kira acts shocked that the MC figured out they were the pirate king's daughters? Makes zero sense. More and more of these weird inconsistencies as you go through the game.
Anyway, seems solid so far, keep up the good work!
