- Thread starter SuckylittleD
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Gonna leave my review here in the forum so other ppl can see it here:
It has great potential. It looks rough because of early stage but i like the design of the characters and premise.
Honestly i was expecting more office/company stuff due to its name but i take it.
I would have loved that the characters would have shown more of their characteristics in the start before we went deeper into the mcs story.
Like showing some of their quirks, behaviors - making us interested and invested into the girls. So far we dont know anything about them.
The story already feels heavy so early. The +18 scenes are also a bit fast. I could understand that the short haired blond girl maybe knows the mc already and wanted to confirm something but the "blue/green" haired one felt really rushed, no real build up, nothing that would justify her actions in the bath room.
Still I already like this game and gonna keep following it development.
It has great potential. It looks rough because of early stage but i like the design of the characters and premise.
Honestly i was expecting more office/company stuff due to its name but i take it.
I would have loved that the characters would have shown more of their characteristics in the start before we went deeper into the mcs story.
Like showing some of their quirks, behaviors - making us interested and invested into the girls. So far we dont know anything about them.
The story already feels heavy so early. The +18 scenes are also a bit fast. I could understand that the short haired blond girl maybe knows the mc already and wanted to confirm something but the "blue/green" haired one felt really rushed, no real build up, nothing that would justify her actions in the bath room.
Still I already like this game and gonna keep following it development.
Dude your game is really weird cause some scenes and story are not making sense at all and the sex scene with the lis are pretty bad this game could have really good potential if it goes in the right direction and the right plot cause it's really confusing and also the current story is pretty bad I can't even understand the current plot and chole is the best li as per I have seen and make the mc more dominant pls and also give appropriate storys to every lis rather than directly pushing them
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I guess the French are the only ones to blame for the laws that are made in Quebec.
It's like not wanting to speak Spanish because you don't like the laws of Mexico.
The premise is fantastic here, but the English definitely needs some proofreading. The frame to frame transitions are also too abrupt in my opinion. When I click forward to the next scene or line of dialogue I prefer it if the appearing image fades out while the new image fades in. Not sure how difficult of a change that would be, I just think it would add to the quality of the final product.
Some additional small lines of dialogue could be added as well, example being when Judy bumps into the MC instead of saying "no why would I?" the MC could instead say "No, why would I? You bumped into me when I was just standing here" or something along that effect. It would be nice to also have more scenes with the girls before the whole impostor sister bit just so that they're more fleshed out as character development is concerned when the first bit of major plot takes place. Completely unnecessary, just something I think would increase interest in the story.
Some additional small lines of dialogue could be added as well, example being when Judy bumps into the MC instead of saying "no why would I?" the MC could instead say "No, why would I? You bumped into me when I was just standing here" or something along that effect. It would be nice to also have more scenes with the girls before the whole impostor sister bit just so that they're more fleshed out as character development is concerned when the first bit of major plot takes place. Completely unnecessary, just something I think would increase interest in the story.
I have just recently tried this game and even if the premise for it is good, the story has too many gaps.
Everyone seems to know the MC, but he isn't told anything about anyone, even by themselves, some of the interactions are happening too fast like with Lana "Hello new guy, want to fuck before going to our sponsor house, tho we haven't even talked before?" or with Joseph "Hello i'm back, you are the new guy, want a hug? Ey I'll take care of the girl trying to kill you even if she says I'm here to do the same thing to you and have been missing for a year and a half... and we don't event talk about it next time we meet".
Can't really appreciate the story like that, IMHO.
Everyone seems to know the MC, but he isn't told anything about anyone, even by themselves, some of the interactions are happening too fast like with Lana "Hello new guy, want to fuck before going to our sponsor house, tho we haven't even talked before?" or with Joseph "Hello i'm back, you are the new guy, want a hug? Ey I'll take care of the girl trying to kill you even if she says I'm here to do the same thing to you and have been missing for a year and a half... and we don't event talk about it next time we meet".
Can't really appreciate the story like that, IMHO.
It took me some time to find the creator's homepage in patreon of this game, and I'm sorry to see you give up on this game's development so soon. When I found it from a translation forum, I felt that this game had a vast potential for development. The storyline that was laid out from the beginning gave people a sense of the game's grand story framework, although the descriptions in the story were naive and boring due to non-native language factors.
The framework of a story is like the skeleton of a person, which, once formed, is difficult to change. The narration of a story is like muscle, which, although important, can still be strengthened through exercise. The rhythm of a story is like blood, which controls the progression of the entire story.
In fact, I played both the author's old and new works twice. If we only look at the framework of the story, the beginning of the first part is like reading a classic fantasy novel, similar to The Lord of the Rings or The Count of Monte Cristo, but it is a child who is narrating this story to me. The beginning of the second part is like some types of comic books that are now ubiquitous, stories that exist only for sexual intercourse, and the pictures are not very attractive. The narrator has only grown from a child to a primary school student.
I will keep this work on my computer and bookmark your homepage, hoping to see this work reappear under your work one day.
By the way, you really should add a link to your creator page in the game's main menu. It took me at least an hour to find your homepage, which turned off many people who wanted to support you. At the same time, I'm surprised that you haven't added channels for supporters and fans to contact you. This makes it difficult for people to trust you, especially considering your previous abandonment of this game.
The framework of a story is like the skeleton of a person, which, once formed, is difficult to change. The narration of a story is like muscle, which, although important, can still be strengthened through exercise. The rhythm of a story is like blood, which controls the progression of the entire story.
In fact, I played both the author's old and new works twice. If we only look at the framework of the story, the beginning of the first part is like reading a classic fantasy novel, similar to The Lord of the Rings or The Count of Monte Cristo, but it is a child who is narrating this story to me. The beginning of the second part is like some types of comic books that are now ubiquitous, stories that exist only for sexual intercourse, and the pictures are not very attractive. The narrator has only grown from a child to a primary school student.
I will keep this work on my computer and bookmark your homepage, hoping to see this work reappear under your work one day.
By the way, you really should add a link to your creator page in the game's main menu. It took me at least an hour to find your homepage, which turned off many people who wanted to support you. At the same time, I'm surprised that you haven't added channels for supporters and fans to contact you. This makes it difficult for people to trust you, especially considering your previous abandonment of this game.
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this got reworked after like 3 updates and the dev is working on another game as well? what is going on?
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Hmm...still no mention if this title will have a harem path. But I noticed the Romance tag is mentioned twice in the gene section...
(Though, this dev's other title has a harem path.
)
Regards.
(Though, this dev's other title has a harem path.
)Regards.
NL_Corporation-0.11.30-pc.zip
27.11.2024, 18:46:48
2.2 GB
well i'll wait for the rebooted version to reach the previous version level...
27.11.2024, 18:46:48
2.2 GB
well i'll wait for the rebooted version to reach the previous version level...