VN Ren'Py NL Corporation Reboot [v0.01] [SuckylittleD]

3.80 star(s) 4 Votes

SuckylittleD

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Overview:
You’re the MC, fresh out of university with no job and nowhere to live. Feeling like there’s no way out, you decide to end your misery, but just as you’re about to go through with it, a guy shows up and stops you. He offers you a shot at a new life, helping you land a job at his company and even giving you a place to stay in a shared house. That’s where everything starts to change.​

Thread Updated: 2024-12-11
Release Date: 2024-12-11
Developer: SuckylittleD
Censored: No
Version: 0.01
OS: Windows, Linux, Mac, Android
Language: English
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TsubameYui

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Nov 2, 2022
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Honestly, your grasp on English is pretty solid for a non-native speaker. You seem to have some trouble with things like tense, punctuation, singular/plural words, and articles(a, an, the, etc.). These are all very common problems for non-native English speakers.

One thing that really stands out, that's easy to fix, is your lack of proper spacing. There should always be a space after any punctuation.
 

TsubameYui

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Nov 2, 2022
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Just finished playing through. As I said before, the English is nowhere near as bad as your warning implied it would be. The overview is pretty vague, so I wasn't expecting much story-wise. However, I was pleasantly surprised that the plot seems quite a bit deeper than I expected. Would have liked to see a bit more of the girls, as they're very cute so far. Bit disappointed at the lack of any lewd content. Some future tags would be nice. So far it seems like a harem setup, but I'd love some confirmation so I don't get my hopes up.

If you'd like, I can proofread the script for you, free of charge. Should only take me about an hour to clean it up nicely. Send me a DM if you're interested. Reading over my corrections could help you with your goal of improving your English.
 

Tyrranus

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May 4, 2017
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1.5gb for that? brother you gonna need to get yer file size optimized or youll be over 5gb before the first plot point...

Aside from that it wasn't too bad of a start but yeah your english is pretty bad.
Even beyond the language issue, the dialogue was a bit on the childish side.

Over all needs polish and proofreading by an english native speaker but there is a solid start here
 

YogSothoth1982

Formerly 'BlasKyau'
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One thing that really stands out, that's easy to fix, is your lack of proper spacing. There should always be a space after any punctuation.
I would say that this is true in basically all languages, it isn't something unique to English.
 

DeUglyOne

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Sep 1, 2017
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Yet another 5 star review that reads like an AI shill.
Another dev trying to boost his own rating?
 
3.80 star(s) 4 Votes