Just played through the updated version, made a quick list of bugs for
SharkoonMan attached in a txt file.
Glad to see he's written a lot more, it was entertaining for 3/4 of the way through. Though, the part near the end seemed to take a hard turn for the NTR out of nowhere, and was somewhat jarring given the tone of the rest of the story (the stuff with Logan and his GF). Particularly because it wasn't condition based, it happens regardless. It would make more sense if it checked for example,
if not $wentswinger and (hooked up with logangf), then logan comes to your house alone, etc.
It breaks the whole feel of the story to suddenly have the gf doing stuff behind your back, when you have no choices to affect it.
I do appreciate the dev implementing my suggestion of a the $wentprem fork during the outdoors sex, that flows very naturally and is very fitting to alter future conversations with the gf.