VN Ren'Py NTR'ed by My Friend [v0.3.0] [NTR.ai]

[jarngaffel]

The BJ scene for 0.5 was amazing but a just few personal thoughts:

1. Scripting during the BJ scene uses the suffix -God a little too much. Almost feels like every line had it and I thought it was repeating. Don't really need to have one every sentence imo, it can be intense enough.

2. During both cum sequences it felt more like a fluid stimulation than actual cum. Maybe for Cristine tomake it look a little more like squirting and for the actual cum to have something more white and viscous.

3. The story sequence into first penetration scene felt a little forced imo, doesnt feel very believable to be in the toilet and have your dick sat on unconsciously by someone. I really liked the animation but I personally felt like it dissipates some of the tension and conflict of her initially fantasizing about the penetration.

As a corruption enthusiast, a scenario off the top of my head that plays with this tension: she walks into the toilet - vulnerable from her dream and Blake walks in right after and grinds against and teases her. She relents and starts giving him an assjob which ends up with him blowing his load all over her back. He's not done yet (not like Alan) and tries a just the tip move before Alan knocks on the door and they quieten down - they're not so brazen yet. Blake then tells her to go to his room and she still hasn't had her answer from her dream from the bed yet.

Just what I think but ultimately its your vision.

 

[NTR.ai]

The BJ scene for 0.5 was amazing but a just few personal thoughts:

1. Scripting during the BJ scene uses the suffix -God a little too much. Almost feels like every line had it and I thought it was repeating. Don't really need to have one every sentence imo, it can be intense enough.

2. During both cum sequences it felt more like a fluid stimulation than actual cum. Maybe for Cristine tomake it look a little more like squirting and for the actual cum to have something more white and viscous.

3. The story sequence into first penetration scene felt a little forced imo, doesnt feel very believable to be in the toilet and have your dick sat on unconsciously by someone. I really liked the animation but I personally felt like it dissipates some of the tension and conflict of her initially fantasizing about the penetration.

As a corruption enthusiast, a scenario off the top of my head that plays with this tension: she walks into the toilet - vulnerable from her dream and Blake walks in right after and grinds against and teases her. She relents and starts giving him an assjob which ends up with him blowing his load all over her back. He's not done yet (not like Alan) and tries a just the tip move before Alan knocks on the door and they quieten down - they're not so brazen yet. Blake then tells her to go to his room and she still hasn't had her answer from her dream from the bed yet.

Just what I think but ultimately its your vision.

1. Sorry, but did you play v0.5.0 or v0.5.1? I refined a lot of the dialogues in v0.5.1, so I’m just curious if the changes feel like an improvement to you.
2. About the semen part—the reason why the FMC agrees to take it in her mouth is because she doesn’t want it getting on her body. So ideally, most of it shouldn’t be dripping out.
3. As for Blake's behavior—I designed it this way to maintain a more believable relationship dynamic early on. I didn’t want him to come across as too much of a jerk from the start, so their friendship would feel more genuine. Of course, once he starts actively trying to sleep with Cristine, that dynamic changes completely. But in the beginning, I wanted to keep him from being too aggressive or forceful.

Thanks again for the feedback! Just a small note—sometimes the design choices aren’t just for logic, tension, or eroticism, but also for pacing and character development. I hope that makes sense!

 

[ItsNotUs]

1. Sorry, but did you play v0.5.0 or v0.5.1? I refined a lot of the dialogues in v0.5.1, so I’m just curious if the changes feel like an improvement to you.
2. About the semen part—the reason why the FMC agrees to take it in her mouth is because she doesn’t want it getting on her body. So ideally, most of it shouldn’t be dripping out.
3. As for Blake's behavior—I designed it this way to maintain a more believable relationship dynamic early on. I didn’t want him to come across as too much of a jerk from the start, so their friendship would feel more genuine. Of course, once he starts actively trying to sleep with Cristine, that dynamic changes completely. But in the beginning, I wanted to keep him from being too aggressive or forceful.

Thanks again for the feedback! Just a small note—sometimes the design choices aren’t just for logic, tension, or eroticism, but also for pacing and character development. I hope that makes sense!

 

[NTR.ai]

To be honest, all you're doing now is making your ignorance and inability to respond logically even more obvious...

 

[ItsNotUs]

To be honest, all you're doing now is making your ignorance and inability to respond logically even more obvious...

Yes, my logic is not compatible with yours!
Cristine shouldn't swallow cum in one place so as not to stain body! Lol In real life, some girls are so squeamish that they can't even think about cum getting into their mouths! But go on!

 

[NTR.ai]

Yes, my logic is not compatible with yours!
Cristine shouldn't swallow cum in one place so as not to stain body! Lol In real life, some girls are so squeamish that they can't even think about cum getting into their mouths! But go on!

Yeah, yeah, funny how the saint keeps tripping over his own logic.

They argue with me, I don’t argue with them!

 

[ItsNotUs]

Yeah, yeah, funny how the saint keeps tripping over his own logic.

I just laughed, you wrote to me - what's wrong?