VN Ren'Py NTR'ed by My Friend [v0.3.0] [NTR.ai]

[jarngaffel]

The BJ scene for 0.5 was amazing but a just few personal thoughts:

1. Scripting during the BJ scene uses the suffix -God a little too much. Almost feels like every line had it and I thought it was repeating. Don't really need to have one every sentence imo, it can be intense enough.

2. During both cum sequences it felt more like a fluid stimulation than actual cum. Maybe for Cristine tomake it look a little more like squirting and for the actual cum to have something more white and viscous.

3. The story sequence into first penetration scene felt a little forced imo, doesnt feel very believable to be in the toilet and have your dick sat on unconsciously by someone. I really liked the animation but I personally felt like it dissipates some of the tension and conflict of her initially fantasizing about the penetration.

As a corruption enthusiast, a scenario off the top of my head that plays with this tension: she walks into the toilet - vulnerable from her dream and Blake walks in right after and grinds against and teases her. She relents and starts giving him an assjob which ends up with him blowing his load all over her back. He's not done yet (not like Alan) and tries a just the tip move before Alan knocks on the door and they quieten down - they're not so brazen yet. Blake then tells her to go to his room and she still hasn't had her answer from her dream from the bed yet.

Just what I think but ultimately its your vision.

 

[NTR.ai]

The BJ scene for 0.5 was amazing but a just few personal thoughts:

1. Scripting during the BJ scene uses the suffix -God a little too much. Almost feels like every line had it and I thought it was repeating. Don't really need to have one every sentence imo, it can be intense enough.

2. During both cum sequences it felt more like a fluid stimulation than actual cum. Maybe for Cristine tomake it look a little more like squirting and for the actual cum to have something more white and viscous.

3. The story sequence into first penetration scene felt a little forced imo, doesnt feel very believable to be in the toilet and have your dick sat on unconsciously by someone. I really liked the animation but I personally felt like it dissipates some of the tension and conflict of her initially fantasizing about the penetration.

As a corruption enthusiast, a scenario off the top of my head that plays with this tension: she walks into the toilet - vulnerable from her dream and Blake walks in right after and grinds against and teases her. She relents and starts giving him an assjob which ends up with him blowing his load all over her back. He's not done yet (not like Alan) and tries a just the tip move before Alan knocks on the door and they quieten down - they're not so brazen yet. Blake then tells her to go to his room and she still hasn't had her answer from her dream from the bed yet.

Just what I think but ultimately its your vision.

1. Sorry, but did you play v0.5.0 or v0.5.1? I refined a lot of the dialogues in v0.5.1, so I’m just curious if the changes feel like an improvement to you.
2. About the semen part—the reason why the FMC agrees to take it in her mouth is because she doesn’t want it getting on her body. So ideally, most of it shouldn’t be dripping out.
3. As for Blake's behavior—I designed it this way to maintain a more believable relationship dynamic early on. I didn’t want him to come across as too much of a jerk from the start, so their friendship would feel more genuine. Of course, once he starts actively trying to sleep with Cristine, that dynamic changes completely. But in the beginning, I wanted to keep him from being too aggressive or forceful.

Thanks again for the feedback! Just a small note—sometimes the design choices aren’t just for logic, tension, or eroticism, but also for pacing and character development. I hope that makes sense!

 

[ItsNotUs]

1. Sorry, but did you play v0.5.0 or v0.5.1? I refined a lot of the dialogues in v0.5.1, so I’m just curious if the changes feel like an improvement to you.
2. About the semen part—the reason why the FMC agrees to take it in her mouth is because she doesn’t want it getting on her body. So ideally, most of it shouldn’t be dripping out.
3. As for Blake's behavior—I designed it this way to maintain a more believable relationship dynamic early on. I didn’t want him to come across as too much of a jerk from the start, so their friendship would feel more genuine. Of course, once he starts actively trying to sleep with Cristine, that dynamic changes completely. But in the beginning, I wanted to keep him from being too aggressive or forceful.

Thanks again for the feedback! Just a small note—sometimes the design choices aren’t just for logic, tension, or eroticism, but also for pacing and character development. I hope that makes sense!

 

[NTR.ai]

To be honest, all you're doing now is making your ignorance and inability to respond logically even more obvious...

 

[ItsNotUs]

To be honest, all you're doing now is making your ignorance and inability to respond logically even more obvious...

Yes, my logic is not compatible with yours!
Cristine shouldn't swallow cum in one place so as not to stain body! Lol In real life, some girls are so squeamish that they can't even think about cum getting into their mouths! But go on!

 

[NTR.ai]

Yes, my logic is not compatible with yours!
Cristine shouldn't swallow cum in one place so as not to stain body! Lol In real life, some girls are so squeamish that they can't even think about cum getting into their mouths! But go on!

Yeah, yeah, funny how the saint keeps tripping over his own logic.

They argue with me, I don’t argue with them!

 

[ItsNotUs]

Yeah, yeah, funny how the saint keeps tripping over his own logic.

I just laughed, you wrote to me - what's wrong?

 

[NTR.ai]

I just laughed, you wrote to me - what's wrong?

I just typed, you argued with me - what's wrong?

 

[jarngaffel]

1. Sorry, but did you play v0.5.0 or v0.5.1? I refined a lot of the dialogues in v0.5.1, so I’m just curious if the changes feel like an improvement to you.
2. About the semen part—the reason why the FMC agrees to take it in her mouth is because she doesn’t want it getting on her body. So ideally, most of it shouldn’t be dripping out.
3. As for Blake's behavior—I designed it this way to maintain a more believable relationship dynamic early on. I didn’t want him to come across as too much of a jerk from the start, so their friendship would feel more genuine. Of course, once he starts actively trying to sleep with Cristine, that dynamic changes completely. But in the beginning, I wanted to keep him from being too aggressive or forceful.

Thanks again for the feedback! Just a small note—sometimes the design choices aren’t just for logic, tension, or eroticism, but also for pacing and character development. I hope that makes sense!

I mean I don't know about the drama, just writing what I feel lol

1. Yea just played 0.5.1 and it feels much better but God still gets used alot. Nothing wrong with it but it gets repetitive.

3. In terms of pacing so far it feels ok until the bathroom scene as it does not feel like shes willing to go that way yet and the way it happens isn't really believable. Considering she hasn't sized or touched Blake's member at all, has not had any direct sexual interaction with Blake yet and she just casually slips in this gargantuan dick casually not knowing Blake is sitting there in the bathroom then not doing anything about it is kinda... a leap and a half in hentai logic. Thats also why JAVs have alot of teasing to make the NTR more believable.

Only giving my feedback because I felt like there would have been a good teasing animation to move this pacing into the BJ scene and -then- eventually into the bathroom scene where she can't resist getting off once shes tasted a little of what Blake has to offer. Saying all this cause Ive been liking your stuff, just food for thought.

 

[NTR.ai]

I mean I don't know about the drama, just writing what I feel lol

1. Yea just played 0.5.1 and it feels much better but God still gets used alot. Nothing wrong with it but it gets repetitive.

3. In terms of pacing so far it feels ok until the bathroom scene as it does not feel like shes willing to go that way yet and the way it happens isn't really believable. Considering she hasn't sized or touched Blake's member at all, has not had any direct sexual interaction with Blake yet and she just casually slips in this gargantuan dick casually not knowing Blake is sitting there in the bathroom then not doing anything about it is kinda... a leap and a half in hentai logic. Thats also why JAVs have alot of teasing to make the NTR more believable.

Only giving my feedback because I felt like there would have been a good teasing animation to move this pacing into the BJ scene and -then- eventually into the bathroom scene where she can't resist getting off once shes tasted a little of what Blake has to offer. Saying all this cause Ive been liking your stuff, just food for thought.

1. Oh, got it—sorry about that! I’ll be more mindful next time.
2. I see what you’re getting at, and I appreciate the perspective. Just to clarify, though—some JAV actually do start with direct penetration and build the emotional tension afterward. I’m not saying that to justify my approach, but just to explain where I was coming from in designing the scene. I totally get that the pacing feels different from what most NTR games do. It’s true—I’ve just gotten a bit worn out by the typical slow-burn and wanted to try something a little different.

And don’t worry—I know you’re giving feedback in good faith, not like a certain self-proclaimed saint out there, haha. I really do appreciate it. I wasn’t offended at all, and I hope nothing I said came off the wrong way either. I just wanted to give you a bit of insight so you’d know the choices weren’t made at random. I’m sorry if it didn’t quite land for you, but I genuinely did put thought into it and tried to make it meaningful.

 

[ItsNotUs]

I just typed, you argued with me - what's wrong?

To be honest, all you're doing now is making your ignorance and inability to respond logically even more obvious...
Is this called just typed?
Lol
Well then I typed it too - what's wrong?

 

[NTR.ai]

To be honest, all you're doing now is making your ignorance and inability to respond logically even more obvious...
Is this called just typed?
Lol
Well then I typed it too - what's wrong?

Yeah, yeah, whatever you say, making an argument again, funny.