VN Ren'Py NTR'ed by My Friend [v0.4.2] [NTR.ai]

[elbro]

The VN is interesting to me so far. I don't know how many updates it has, but looking through the folders, the game doesn't have many renders.

I think that's why the transitions between scenes are noticeably fast. A little more detail between scenes, especially the bathroom scene, would be better for the player. Being too direct isn't so good for telling a story.

Another thing: Blake is the antagonist, and as such, he's fine, but so far, his personality seems like a joke. Perhaps a little more character development would help his image.

I hope the game's creator continues with this project and has fun making it; it'll improve along the way.

 

[NTR.ai]

The VN is interesting to me so far. I don't know how many updates it has, but looking through the folders, the game doesn't have many renders.

I think that's why the transitions between scenes are noticeably fast. A little more detail between scenes, especially the bathroom scene, would be better for the player. Being too direct isn't so good for telling a story.

Another thing: Blake is the antagonist, and as such, he's fine, but so far, his personality seems like a joke. Perhaps a little more character development would help his image.

I hope the game's creator continues with this project and has fun making it; it'll improve along the way.

Sorry, but the transitions scenes are about the one suggested by another member?

Now, pertaining to the animation: You absolutely don't have to sync reading speed and animations, but merely specific lines and animations. What I intended with my suggestion was essentially the following: Every animation so far loops endlessly. However, as soon as the line "She shifts instinctively, trying to pull away again [...]" comes up, you could end the endless loop and transition into a small animation where she attempts to more slowly lift her hips (to show the struggle) only to fall right back, only that his one does NOT loop. This means that it's quite literally a clip of a few seconds that ends after it has been played once. This then allows you to continue with still frames rather than animations without making the transition as abrupt as it is now (or continue with another animation for the thrusts; both are valid options). Furthermore, it more closely connects the text with the visuals. No need to anticipate reading speeds or anything futile like that.

If possible, could you elaborate a bit more on why you feel Blake's personality comes across as a joke? I’d love to understand your perspective better. Also, is there anything specific you’d like to see more of in terms of his character development?

Thanks for taking the time to share your feedback!

 

[damdadwa]

I know some people want to get into the action right away and I understand that. But this was too fast for me IMO. Could have played more of the mystery part with slower build up. It was going the right direction until that bathroom scene. Im loving the story so far but if it was meant to be short then i get it but I dont see where you can go from here they basically fucked already unless this was some type of dream.

If I were writing this game, I would delete that scene and keep it for a future scene. Instead they could do a massage part 2 where Male MC comes back and catches them massaging but she has her top off or something. Slower build up to make a longer game unless you want this to be short.

They went from almost touching her pussy through her shorts to penetration...

Playing this for free so appreciate any content anyways. Keep up the good work.

 

[elbro]

If possible, could you elaborate a bit more on why you feel Blake's personality comes across as a joke? I’d love to understand your perspective better. Also, is there anything specific you’d like to see more of in terms of his character development?

Thanks for taking the time to share your feedback!

He has a more stoner face that no one would take seriously, he seems very mocking.

It reminds me of the boy from Scary Movie


Blake as an antagonist, that's fine. Even if the idea is for him to be stoner and carefree, even immoral, Blake should have some notable trait that makes the protagonist feel insecure.

For example, a good contrast would be for the protagonist to work hard to earn money, but his friend works little but earns the same or more. Inviting them to dinner would be a good idea, and if you want to include a post-celebration scene, like the protagonist drinking a lot and passing out (NTR moment).

Another scenario is for him to bring different girls home, which could lead to Cristina seeing him having sex and sparking her curiosity.

You could have Blake have hobbies that catch Cristina's attention, like being a Big Brother. Although he's very laid-back, he'd like to be a father at some point. She's a teacher, so taking care of others could be something she enjoys.