I'm pretty new to the site, but I have to give the creator credit for making a game with black women in it. Definitely an under-represented group in many of the games here, which surprises me considering the proportions of the models in most of the games I've played.
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OK, I figured since it was a one ten thousandth version, I could get through it reasonably quickly. Yup.
Some thoughts:
- I like it. Nice pleasant characters. Careful that James doesn't come off too much like a jerk, though.
- Agreed with previous comments about lighting. Either play at midnight with no lights or turn the monitor brightness way up - both bad options
- I'm not a big fan of 4th wall commentary. I think it interrupts immersion. Just my 2 cents on that one.
- On the phone conversation, I think you could go with the names, we know they're texting (or use italics or something). Just felt a little odd seeing "Phone" as the header
- Set up is good. Logical motivation for going after Miranda.
- I like plus sizes, so Miranda is fine with me. Not sure yet about muscled Sarah, hope she's not a cardboard cutout dominant. No reason fitness can't be feminine.
Very short, but a nice start.
Some thoughts:
- I like it. Nice pleasant characters. Careful that James doesn't come off too much like a jerk, though.
- Agreed with previous comments about lighting. Either play at midnight with no lights or turn the monitor brightness way up - both bad options
- I'm not a big fan of 4th wall commentary. I think it interrupts immersion. Just my 2 cents on that one.
- On the phone conversation, I think you could go with the names, we know they're texting (or use italics or something). Just felt a little odd seeing "Phone" as the header
- Set up is good. Logical motivation for going after Miranda.
- I like plus sizes, so Miranda is fine with me. Not sure yet about muscled Sarah, hope she's not a cardboard cutout dominant. No reason fitness can't be feminine.
Very short, but a nice start.
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Thanks
I'm not a fan of huge muscles, just a little, and considering how muscles usually look when they are added to these games I think I was pretty tame lol
You aren't the only one to mention lighting, need to take a better look at that.
I'll also take another look at the bed renders with Miranda to see if I can spot whats wrong and fix that as well
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Thanks for checking it out, I know these low number versions usually annoy people due to lack of content
James isn't meant to come off as a jerk so I'll definitely keep an eye on that when it comes to writing
Lighting has been brought up by other people, I know that's a definite issue that needs to be looked at
I was worried it wouldn't be obvious on the phone who was talking, clearly just me being a fucking moron, ill fix that next version lol
Glad the set up seems believable since I've never wrote a story before
Sarah is 100% not a typical dom, she's just a little catty, she will for the most part be acting feminine with a little bite to her that's all
Again thanks for the feedback!
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Nah, you're not being a moron, just being careful. Trust me, as tough as the renders and modeling may seem, writing is 10 times tougher. There are plenty of games out here that have awful stories, but pretty pictures.
Best advice for writers: never fall in love with anything you've written. There's always a chance it can be improved.
For example, the whole talking to the player thing, it's cute once or twice, but if it's done throughout the game, it could seriously distract from getting "into" the characters.
There are a couple of typos in there, as well ("here" instead of "hear", for example), which you can touch up in your next release.
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The 4th wall breaking wont be in there much, I know that stuff is distracting, it just made me chuckle at the time when I wrote it
Thankfully I'm not overly attached to my work, yet lol To early for in development for that just now
I'll go back over the script, the 'here' instead 'hear' slipped past even after checking it so many times, there probably a lot more than I realized thanks
Thankfully I'm not overly attached to my work, yet lol To early for in development for that just now
I'll go back over the script, the 'here' instead 'hear' slipped past even after checking it so many times, there probably a lot more than I realized thanks
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Actually, that's the max size Daz lets you set it without any custom content lol
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Well, I for one like it a lot the mom IS supersized but still very sexy, so I wouldn't really change that. The daughter could use some more *oomph* in her assets to look a little more like her mom but not by much. Also, I agree with some of the others, I am very, very happy this is more ebony and it's not the standard white women (sometimes only) that I have only have seen/played before.
The only thing I would change is the start screen image- I originally thought this was actually a femdom because the daughter was sticking her tongue out and pointing at the MC's dick like she was laughing at it. Other than that this is a great game and I'll definitely watch it.
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Thanks for checking out the game
I'll think about making a new menu image if that's the feel people are getting, it was honestly just supposed to be silly and funny, not imply any kind of femdom content
Can you go after the girl in the 4th 5th 6th and 7th screenshot or are you forced to go after thunder tits?
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'thunder tits' lol She is the main goal of the game, that's how I have been writing it, but there will be a kind of relationship with Sarah.
Depending on how people respond to the characters with more content added this might change
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I have not played the game, however I had a few thoughts when looking at the preview pictures. I decided to spoiler them due to being negative. If you like your ladies like those in the game more power to you, just not my thing.
ps. I think the site could use some new tags. big ass and big tits do not always fit.
balloon tits, tank ass, thunder thighs, flapjack titties, cylindrical pudding hanging from a stick
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ps. I think the site could use some new tags. big ass and big tits do not always fit.
balloon tits, tank ass, thunder thighs, flapjack titties, cylindrical pudding hanging from a stick
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Very nice! Good writing so far (believable dialogues, good set up) and I like the girls (chocolate...mmmmmmm), looking forward to see the next versions
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oh no ! , some people aren't liking the up sized women.... i hope not all get excluded
who knows ... you might attract more people with such preference,
you know what .... if you can change the banner to have one of those girls or all of them .... that would be better .... you might get the attention of people with said preference.
I also vote on focusing on the girls more than the guy since these are the "stars of the show"
I share the same preference as you do DEV ! , hopefully you stick to it with some characters and not change them all :c
who knows ... you might attract more people with such preference,
you know what .... if you can change the banner to have one of those girls or all of them .... that would be better .... you might get the attention of people with said preference.
I also vote on focusing on the girls more than the guy since these are the "stars of the show"