VN Ren'Py Our Red String [Ch. 12 Full] [Eva Kiss]

[dolfe67]

The real truth is that many things in this game will not be cannon. I suspect many peers here are far too certain of too many cannon facts in this game. Threesome Axel/Lena/Cherry is NOT cannon. The middle-aged professor who likes to be peed on is NOT cannon. Maybe Gillian's being Mike's girlfriend or for instance Seymour being Lena's Dad will be options but not cannon. Just like we have come to realize in this update that Lena's past love life is anything BUT cannon. I mean she can be a very free wild girl as well as almost nunnish (I mean two boyfriends at 22 ???).
I mean can we even consider Airwolf 2 is Cannon to Airwolf 1 ? Isn't it better to leave it at Hawke not finding his brother ? Just like GoT should have stopped at season 7 ? (I'm talking to Stan fans here)

True and that's something I don't quite like in this game, changing character's backgrounds depending on your choices throughout the game. It explains why Lena can act like a slut (she's always been one) but I'm not convinced

 

[fatpussy123]

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During this week I've been splitting work between art and writing, as usual.
I've finished all the drawings needed for a major scene and they've been sent to the colorist. During this stage I'm also structuring how the scene will play out, and lately I've been using storyboards to plan things out, as scenes become more complex. Before, coming up with the structure and choosing which images to use to illustrate it was simpler, but now I take some time to think things through and I end up shuffling the order and flow of the scene until I find something that I'm happy with. I can't share those in a public post due to Patreon's guidelines, but I will in a private post if you guys are interested in seeing some bts stuff.
As I mentioned in my

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, writing is quite challenging, especially the in-between scenes that connect the major plot points. These are specially important in this update, since I'm trying to create an atmosphere that feels fresh, fun and natural and that immerses you in a summer vacation with friends. This becomes especially difficult and tedious when a single scene can have so many variations depending on how you've developed the different relationships. Often times I get the feeling I'm not managing to convincingly create dialogue that flows naturally and scenes that evoke that cozy, familiar feeling, having to chop up every dialogue in different possibilities, accounting for the various reactions characters should display and generally coming up with interesting and well-written situations that don't feel a drag to read or feel inconsistent.
I wonder if you guys got that feeling with the last update, or you're finding it satisfying enough. In this last chapter, which scenes if any were your favourites? Did you enjoy a setpiece over the rest or did a particular interaction stood out to you? What did you find missing, anddo you have any suggestions to tackle this issue and make interactions more interesting? I'm interested in hearing your thoughts and opinions; in the meanwhile I'm doing my best to craft evocative and coherent moments. Hopefully I'm doing a good enough job!

What does EK mean by patreons guidelines? Do they really not allow publicly showing BTS progress

 

[EscapeEvade]

What does EK mean by patreons guidelines? Do they really not allow publicly showing BTS progress

I *think* she means that if something is NSFW it can't be a public post.

 

[Andrea9999]

Did you finished the cuck path in the end or what happened?

I know I started it, because I got to a point (using URM as a cheat) where I managed to get ian_cuck = true by having Ian ask Lena if his cock was the best during a handjob and Lena and Ian never had real sex, though Lena did actually ask him to do a photoshoot of her. In this play, Lena is really mean to Stan; she is like an awful monster to him. The frustrating/puzzling thing about this play is that I would often get a signal of "gallery unlocked!", but I had no idea to what sexual interlude the game was referring. Finally they got to the beach....Wade had a bad trip....and the game ended. This was version 12.2 ALPHA. I believe there is a subsequent one out there.
So I think I am still in the "started cuck" path. I never got to see Ian watching Lena have sex with others. Ian has had sex with no one. Lena has sex with Mike (I think Jack too). I am wondering if I missed a number of branches. Oh, also, while at the beach, Louise began texting Ian. This play was very different from the previous ones I played. This Lena is like some alien to me; the way she treats Stan. But I was hoping to see if it would cause an interesting Lena/Louise interaction.
I will be away for a while. When I get back I will try the latest version released and see how it goes.

 

[yellowteeth]

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During this week I've been splitting work between art and writing, as usual.
I've finished all the drawings needed for a major scene and they've been sent to the colorist. During this stage I'm also structuring how the scene will play out, and lately I've been using storyboards to plan things out, as scenes become more complex. Before, coming up with the structure and choosing which images to use to illustrate it was simpler, but now I take some time to think things through and I end up shuffling the order and flow of the scene until I find something that I'm happy with. I can't share those in a public post due to Patreon's guidelines, but I will in a private post if you guys are interested in seeing some bts stuff.
As I mentioned in my

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, writing is quite challenging, especially the in-between scenes that connect the major plot points. These are specially important in this update, since I'm trying to create an atmosphere that feels fresh, fun and natural and that immerses you in a summer vacation with friends. This becomes especially difficult and tedious when a single scene can have so many variations depending on how you've developed the different relationships. Often times I get the feeling I'm not managing to convincingly create dialogue that flows naturally and scenes that evoke that cozy, familiar feeling, having to chop up every dialogue in different possibilities, accounting for the various reactions characters should display and generally coming up with interesting and well-written situations that don't feel a drag to read or feel inconsistent.
I wonder if you guys got that feeling with the last update, or you're finding it satisfying enough. In this last chapter, which scenes if any were your favourites? Did you enjoy a setpiece over the rest or did a particular interaction stood out to you? What did you find missing, anddo you have any suggestions to tackle this issue and make interactions more interesting? I'm interested in hearing your thoughts and opinions; in the meanwhile I'm doing my best to craft evocative and coherent moments. Hopefully I'm doing a good enough job!

too long didn't read

 

[fatpussy123]

I *think* she means that if something is NSFW it can't be a public post.

Yeah that makes a bit more sense

 

[Andrea9999]

Man, this is one of the most complex(in terms of writing) H games I ever know. On a side note, I wonder if ED ever has a chance? And Seymour is nothing but foreplay, it's quite sad.

It is sad that it is so slow, but the Seymour thing should heat up dramatically.

 

[Andrea9999]

True and that's something I don't quite like in this game, changing character's backgrounds depending on your choices throughout the game. It explains why Lena can act like a slut (she's always been one) but I'm not convinced

I like it because everyone can potentially get their preferences. I just view it as alternate/parallel universes.

 

[BlandChili]

I like the idea of variable backgrounds but it should only apply to the two main characters. I guess cameo characters, unless you're named Jack, need some variability as well.

 

[Blurpee69]

I like the idea of variable backgrounds but it should only apply to the two main characters. I guess cameo characters, unless you're named Jack, need some variability as well.

The perfect example is Jessica. How she develops depends entirely on how Lena behaves before she meets Jess. But Jess is such a side character in ORS that it was really a fun Easter Egg more than anything. It would have been nice to maybe have a Jack that mirrors Ian's behavior in a similar fashion to how Jess mirrors Lena's, but alas...

I don't really mind Lena's backstory being "changed" all the way into chapter 12, as much as some others. If for 11 chapters the player has done nothing but choose the slutiest options available for Lena, it would honestly perhaps make sense that she has maybe possibly always been slutty. Just as much as if she's been faithful to Ian or Holly, or even the likes of Robert, Ivy, or Louise it would make sense that she has a history of being a more faithful lover seeking long term relationships.

 

[Blob]

Is invisible Holly a known bug? Kind of annoying.
nvmd I think the ingame mod was just outdated

 

[iamcomming]

guys, i am in chapter 3 (at the bar with Cindy) and really hate this axel guy, i want stop Cindy and ruin axel's fun. is there opportunity stoping or the story need they have sex?

 

[Gicoo]

guys, i am in chapter 3 (at the bar with Cindy) and really hate this axel guy, i want stop Cindy and ruin axel's fun. is there opportunity stoping or the story need they have sex?

Short answer: We don't know yet. Cindy and Axel work together off-screen and its unknown what exactly occurs and if and how it can be mitigated.

 

[SlowGoesSlow]

If Cindy goes for the caveman cock who would be the best rebound chick for Wade?
I wanna see him happy without Cindy.

 

[Gicoo]

If Cindy goes for the caveman cock who would be the best rebound chick for Wade?
I wanna see him happy without Cindy.

Ivy and Lena discuss it, but they say nothing positive. They may do it just to fuck with Cindy.
Wade is focused on Cindy, he doesn't interact with any other woman, not even Emma (who his bro has a crush on, so he doesn't go after her, either).

 

[SlowGoesSlow]

Ivy and Lena discuss it, but they say nothing positive. They may do it just to fuck with Cindy.
Wade is focused on Cindy, he doesn't interact with any other woman, not even Emma (who his bro has a crush on, so he doesn't go after her, either).

Yeah, it’s a shame.

 

[lucadiadis]

True and that's something I don't quite like in this game, changing character's backgrounds depending on your choices throughout the game. It explains why Lena can act like a slut (she's always been one) but I'm not convinced

On many paths Lena is the opposite of a slut. Actually until the first choice of the date with Robert Lena can only be a sweet artful girl. It's actuazlly on the slut paths that Lena is poorly written and quite uninteresting.

 

[Gicoo]

The question is if Wade will rebound in the first place. That guy is depressed and may not recover from that loss. Especially when his best friend is Perry.

 

[iamcomming]

Short answer: We don't know yet. Cindy and Axel work together off-screen and its unknown what exactly occurs and if and how it can be mitigated.

ah, okay, thanks, i just remember Eva Kiss other game, there Ashley can tell her friend to be careful with Jack and than she wont cheating on her boyfriend, otherway Jack will get her.
hmmm i think i just really dont like these axel/jack type guys so much fun cockblocking these dickheads

 

[lucadiadis]

To be fair, I'm here for the story and the bizarre situations that come out of eva's mind. Although lately I'm more interested in winning the MMA tournament and the book contest, they are goals that appeal more to me.

That's the only reason one of the very few other games I like on this forum is Manila's exciting affection. I skip the -bad - porn scenes and focus on the fight scenes, which are pretty good.