@Luxee
I noticed one spot that seems a bit off. The one spot where the MC and Emily are talking about Elly and Emily states to the MC that it's not like he hasn't done the whole incest thing before. So that means that she knows about him and his sister but later when talking to Jenna and Elly asks her if she is going to tell her mother about her and the MC's relationship but she acts like Emily doesn't already know about their relationship.
I noticed one spot that seems a bit off. The one spot where the MC and Emily are talking about Elly and Emily states to the MC that it's not like he hasn't done the whole incest thing before. So that means that she knows about him and his sister but later when talking to Jenna and Elly asks her if she is going to tell her mother about her and the MC's relationship but she acts like Emily doesn't already know about their relationship.