VN RPGM Abandoned Pathetic Demon [v0.3C] [Mack''U]

[GadorDev]

I've played many 2d games a lot of hentai games and this game shows potential.

1. The art of the game is really great and congratulations to the artist.

2. The battle system is well worked, I have seen this system to be used in other Hentai Games.

3. For a first version of the game this is very good 4 h-scenes is really good, I hope you continue with this amount of active content.

Really congratulations.

The only thing I would like you to have in the game is the possibility of reviewing scenes with new dialogs, which would be great for the fap on duty.

GOOD JOB

 

[Mack''U]

I've played many 2d games a lot of hentai games and this game shows potential.

1. The art of the game is really great and congratulations to the artist.

2. The battle system is well worked, I have seen this system to be used in other Hentai Games.

3. For a first version of the game this is very good 4 h-scenes is really good, I hope you continue with this amount of active content.

Really congratulations.

The only thing I would like you to have in the game is the possibility of reviewing scenes with new dialogs, which would be great for the fap on duty.

View attachment 308418 GOOD JOB

Thanks for the review, really appreciate that!

As for the reviewing scenes with new dialogs part, I haven't considered it yet since I'm going to focus on making 100% new content for the moment but a lot of girls will get more than 1scene so I hope it can make up for this!
I should probably think about putting a gallery to at least see the scenes that were already seen though.

 

[GadorDev]

Thanks for the review, really appreciate that!

As for the reviewing scenes with new dialogs part, I haven't considered it yet since I'm going to focus on making 100% new content for the moment but a lot of girls will get more than 1scene so I hope it can make up for this!
I should probably think about putting a gallery to at least see the scenes that were already seen though.

I understand. Type puts a gallery is good but also make the player walk through the city and go to the girl to review the scene as well and something to have, that extend the life of the game.
But the content as I said is really great the amount of scenes for a first version of the game, if I had 4 scenes every month you create a game with a lot of content for the players of course thinking about new scenes is not so easy and this it depends on the artist and his time.

 

[Mack''U]

I understand. Type puts a gallery is good but also make the player walk through the city and go to the girl to review the scene as well and something to have, that extend the life of the game.
But the content as I said is really great the amount of scenes for a first version of the game, if I had 4 scenes every month you create a game with a lot of content for the players of course thinking about new scenes is not so easy and this it depends on the artist and his time.

Yup, I plan on making releases with as much content as possible! And who knows maybe, in the future, if I see that a girl is very popular but don't have many scenes I'll make a variation of her scene with new text and some alternate outfit! In the end, it will only depend on what people want.

 

[GadorDev]

Yup, I plan on making releases with as much content as possible! And who knows maybe, in the future, if I see that a girl is very popular but don't have many scenes I'll make a variation of her scene with new text and some alternate outfit! In the end, it will only depend on what people want.

I'm looking forward to the next version. And I'll always try to review your game so you always know how your work is going, and my friend hope you succeed with your game.

 

[Scrapman]

Hey Dev, nice demo.

I'd definitely back the game if I had the money (Which I don't have right now, sadly).

I just wanted to ask, will there be girl dominant sex scenes or will it always be consensual? I think some endurance battles would be pretty cool to see implemented if the girl's dominant and tries to make you come before she does, or you hold out for a certain ammount of time.

Anyway, looking foward for more!

 

[Mack''U]

Hey Dev, nice demo.

I'd definitely back the game if I had the money (Which I don't have right now, sadly).

I just wanted to ask, will there be girl dominant sex scenes or will it always be consensual? I think some endurance battles would be pretty cool to see implemented if the girl's dominant and tries to make you come before she does, or you hold out for a certain ammount of time.

Anyway, looking foward for more!

Thanks, I appreciate the thought, it's fine if you can't!
Yes, there will be some dominant girls, and I can even say that the next arc will have some! And for what you called endurance battles I actually already have something similar planned that will probably come soon (either next update or the one after.) so it looks like you are lucky on this!

 

[popober]

This was awesome. Art style could be a little less "pastel" or something, but that's only because I find seeing "details" on a character's skin/physique quite hot. The writing is good, but without burying everything in incoherent drama; it seems to be able to manage a decent balance of a more serious attempt at writing a porn story.

Speaking of the writing, there were indeed quite a bit of simple mistakes remaining so you did got gypped by that "proofreader" you hired. Nothing too painful, quite understandable mistakes in fact, so it wasn't grating. I'd offer my services to correct them, but I'm a lazy little shit.

I also wish just including the word "Bhuta" in the group's name is enough, as I wanted to name mine the "Bhuta-gumi" for lols, but I don't know diddly about programming.

Can't wait for the next update!

 

[Mack''U]

This was awesome. Art style could be a little less "pastel" or something, but that's only because I find seeing on a character's skin/physique quite hot. The writing is good, but without burying everything in incoherent drama; it seems to be able to manage a decent balance of a more serious attempt at writing a porn story.

Speaking of the writing, there were indeed quite a bit of simple mistakes remaining so you did got gypped by that "proofreader" you hired. Nothing too painful, quite understandable mistakes in fact, so it wasn't grating. I'd offer my services to correct them, but I'm a lazy little shit.

I also wish just including the word "Bhuta" in the group's name is enough, as I wanted to name mine the "Bhuta-gumi" for lols, but I don't know diddly about programming.

Can't wait for the next update!

Thank you for the words of encouragement, I'll do my best to keep improving the art!

Don't worry about the proofreading it's fine! I should get a new proofreader for the update that comes after this one, but thanks for the thought!

Oh the Buhta thingy isn't that important so whatever you put is fine, there is just a little dialogue difference if you but "Buhta" or not but that's about it!

 

[Luis Nope]

Good looking, interested to see how will it progress?

 

[awqsrem man]

I suggest you put a plaque looking thing like biology room here , also close to the other rooms as well.

 

[Mack''U]

I suggest you put a plaque looking thing like biology room here , also close to the other rooms as well. View attachment 312178

Oh, I like the idea of having plaques to help the player making their marks! It would indeed be easier for the player to remember which place is where without needing to go inside every time, I'll think about it, thanks! (Probably not next update tho, since I already have a lot of things planned but yeah!)

 

[Zatrian]

What's about an update?

 

[Mack''U]

What's about an update?

Heya! I've written a dev post a little while ago on my patreon (If you haven't seen it yet this one is public:

You must be registered to see the links

) and will probably post another one soon. The next patch should come either during the few last days of the month or the first week of the coming month.
Since I'm working on the game alone I prefer to take a bit more time to release an update and make sure it has decent content instead of forcing a release with little content (which is why I've set my patreon payment to "per major updates" and not "per month".)
But I'll do my best to grow accustomed with the game making process as time goes and be able to do monthly updates with enough content! I'm sorry for making everyone wait, I will do my best to make it as worthwhile as I can!

Edit2: Things didn't go as good as planned and the patch came out today (19th, the public version coming the 29th.)

 

[Scrapman]

New update is out. 10$ patreon build.

 

[Mack''U]

OP post updated with the new public build!

Edit: By the way, I forgot to mention it but the proofreading will come next update using the patreon money! I'm going to sleep for now so have fun while I'm sleeping!

 

[Deleted member 492881]

infinite potential but needs like 3 years to get actual content

 

[Mack''U]

infinite potential but needs like 3 years to get actual content

Yeah sorry, this update took a bit of time to come, the next ones should come faster tho. I wanted to make sure I built a more solid base so I took some extra time to slightly revisit some of the art and add a few things but now I can fully focus on what’s next so this should make things easier.

 

[kirigayakazuto]

any full save?

 

[Deleted member 492881]

Yeah sorry, this update took a bit of time to come, the next ones should come faster tho. I wanted to make sure I built a more solid base so I took some extra time to slightly revisit some of the art and add a few things but now I can fully focus on what’s next so this should make things easier.

ooof don't worry Im just saying its an amazing game but with a small team it will be a long wait