Fascorslolen

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I've come to terms with the fact that the writing in this game is not going to set up route paths and kink selection in a satisfying way for many readers. I want to highlight the problems I personally have with this VN, on the off-chance the author will include more reader agency in the future or takes this into account when setting up stories for new games.

I felt hope at the start of this update, when the couple returned home to find their room unoccupied by an elderly glom-on sleeping naked in their bed. A swinging couple arriving home from a night out at the strip club, so amped up that they want to bang each other's brains out for hours? Awesome! The couple also established that Stef won't sleep around behind MC's back... but then in the very next sentence MC says he actually would enjoy walking in on Stef and Arnold banging behind his back and got a massive erection when talking about it. This all but confirms Stef will plan another "shocking" cheating feint in the future, whether the reader is getting sick of them or not. The MC will love this when it happens, whether the reader does or not. Stef will then begin forcing these scenarios regularly, whether the reader wants them to happen or not. Choices abound!

OK, not the biggest deal. Let's get back to that horned up, post strip club sex with the MC and his wife, a rare and welcome surprise!

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...Stef needs to include Arnold...

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...every...

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...single...

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...time.

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Don't Fear The Reaper has cowbell, Perfect Housewife has Arnold.

Writing a sentence or two about how much an MC likes something does not make a reader also like that thing. Stef having the enthusiasm of a Fig Street whore working overtime while fucking the MC (come on...please...oh yeah...it's good...I came...) and then acting like a gorilla on PCP while fucking others (HRRNGGGGAAAAAHHHHFUCKKK *spasms wildly*) is not empowering or arousing to a non-cuck reader, it is emasculating and confusing. Stef can't go a single day without multiple doses of Arnold dick, which is not equally true of the MC (she can seemingly go for weeks without him). The author shoehorns Arnold into basically every single sexual encounter the MC has with his wife, with zero reader input or narrative reason for him being included. I would not be shocked to find out the author is an old guy named Arnold that looks exactly like Arnold. It's getting to be author self-insert levels of comical how often his shriveled, ugly mug pops into a scene unprompted to fuck Stef in this "choice based" VN. A threesome is set up by Stef with another girl later in this update... HOT! But it won't be a threesome, because Stef has also invited Arnold for....reasons, and she will be busy jerking him off in the background while he four-finger fucks her. We all know shots of geezers getting jerked off by our wives while awkwardly watching us fuck a stripper makes every almost-threesome that much hotter, right guys!? Stef was really prioritizing MC's needs there. After all, what fun would a FFM encounter be without including the same 75 year old conman beggar who's been monopolizing MC's wife in 9 out of every 10 scenes throughout the game?

How about an option, one single time in this game, to say Sit down and watch or go away Arnold, I don't like you and I'm fucking my wife alone for the first time in a month right now. How about an option to talk with Stef about not wanting to rub balls with Arnold and bathe in his wild jizz spew each time MC wants to fuck his wife? There are many "see it or skip it" options for scenes with other bulls in this game, but Arnold is guaranteed action if he's within a 20 mile radius of Stef when she's thinking about sex. If Stef will only fuck her husband during group scenes now, how about giving readers the choice to invite Erik over, or the boss, instead of Arnold? I'd even accept the mentally handicapped guy at this point, which is really saying something. Make Arnold sit on his thumbs and watch, or forget about him in his room for a change. Forcing Arnold (or a group of old men if Arnold has taken it upon himself to invite the nursing home to MC's house) into every intimate encounter the MC has with his wife is not the ideal "Perfect Housewife" scenario for a sizable percentage of readers. The author sets up a variety of male and female partners for the couple, but this is really the Arnold and Stef show. Stef is doing all the things an author-controlled, beta-cuck husband who loves geriatric sex with a conman would enjoy, she's not presenting a variety of options that readers might want to experience while share/swinging with their "Perfect Housewife."

If MC wasn't such a dense wimp, it might have dawned on him that Stef probably stopped by Arnold's room while "cleaning up," just like she did last time, and told him to come out naked later that night because she wanted to fuck him. Why else would a "respectful, good guy" walk out naked and rock hard like that as a guest in someone's house? Why else would Stef insist on fucking noisily outside Arnold's door while peeking on him through the keyhole? This game is full of oddly placed NTR-lite inferences, creating a sense of mistrust and tension that belies Stef's motivations. Why is this woman unable to have passionate one-on-one sex with her husband? If she's able, why has she not once wanted to since they began "sharing?" Her actions throughout the game are sheisty, this is just one example. The MC loves being cucked, but readers who don't share the same preference will always be put off by this story because the only thought process MC has is I told her not to do that but she did anyways and now I have an erection so she must have done the right thing! A selfish wife running the show is standard fare for a traditional NTR story, which this author is basically following beat by beat, except for the occasional "remember, I love and respect my husband" from Stef and an "I love being cucked so much I jerked off 8 times in 3 minutes" from MC. The reader is supposed to believe simultaneously that 1. Stef would never do NTR stuff to the MC (reader), and 2. MC (author) and Stef both get really turned on by NTR stuff. Stef is constantly pushing the boundaries of what even cuck-MC is comfortable with. The couple's experimentation process is Stef saying "I would never do <thing> honey," then later tricking MC into thinking <thing> happened because she likes it or her grandpa boyfriend(s) ask for it, with MC inevitably coming around to say "Wow it turns out when you did <thing> against my wishes I got an erection so I'm not even mad about it now!" Then Stef does <thing> with zero MC or reader input for the rest of the story. Later on a new and more depraved <thing #2> is desired by Stef and the process resets.

What a reader wants to see doesn't matter to the author of this story. The reader is forced to adopt the point of view of an emasculated cuck avatar who is tricked into loving whatever NTR-lite <thing> Stef is craving each update. If reader input isn't going to alter a story (outside of "watch this scene? y/n"), included kinks, or character motivations, why write a choice based VN in the first place? This probably would have been fine as a single path graphic novel instead, especially if the author leaned into the NTR setups they love creating but keep backing out of prematurely. Call the novel Stef Craves the Geriatric NTR Guys and Cucky Trusts Her so readers who enjoy choices and kink variety don't waste their time, everyone wins!
I don't understand your contempt!!! however, if you have followed all the dialogues, you will know that Stefany and Oliver have fun, as far as sex between husband and wife is concerned, they don't do it just because at this moment they have become three in the den....
 

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The developer either really cannot come up with a continuation of the story, or is deliberately delaying it. Two or three scenes, but there is no variety of camera angles. The latest update is generally very carelessly done. Damn I'm upset
 

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I don't understand your contempt!!! however, if you have followed all the dialogues, you will know that Stefany and Oliver have fun, as far as sex between husband and wife is concerned, they don't do it just because at this moment they have become three in the den....
Especially for you - don't be lazy to go to page 123 and read adamska
and then blame...
 
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I've come to terms with the fact that the writing in this game is not going to set up route paths and kink selection in a satisfying way for many readers. I want to highlight the problems I personally have with this VN, on the off-chance the author will include more reader agency in the future or takes this into account when setting up stories for new games.

I felt hope at the start of this update, when the couple returned home to find their room unoccupied by an elderly glom-on sleeping naked in their bed. A swinging couple arriving home from a night out at the strip club, so amped up that they want to bang each other's brains out for hours? Awesome! The couple also established that Stef won't sleep around behind MC's back... but then in the very next sentence MC says he actually would enjoy walking in on Stef and Arnold banging behind his back and got a massive erection when talking about it. This all but confirms Stef will plan another "shocking" cheating feint in the future, whether the reader is getting sick of them or not. The MC will love this when it happens, whether the reader does or not. Stef will then begin forcing these scenarios regularly, whether the reader wants them to happen or not. Choices abound!

OK, not the biggest deal. Let's get back to that horned up, post strip club sex with the MC and his wife, a rare and welcome surprise!

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Oh no. I forgot...

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...Stef needs to include Arnold...

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...every...

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...single...

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...time.

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Don't Fear The Reaper has cowbell, Perfect Housewife has Arnold.

Writing a sentence or two about how much an MC likes something does not make a reader also like that thing. Stef having the enthusiasm of a Fig Street whore working overtime while fucking the MC (come on...please...oh yeah...it's good...I came...) and then acting like a gorilla on PCP while fucking others (HRRNGGGGAAAAAHHHHFUCKKK *spasms wildly*) is not empowering or arousing to a non-cuck reader, it is emasculating and confusing. Stef can't go a single day without multiple doses of Arnold dick, which is not equally true of the MC (she can seemingly go for weeks without him). The author shoehorns Arnold into basically every single sexual encounter the MC has with his wife, with zero reader input or narrative reason for him being included. I would not be shocked to find out the author is an old guy named Arnold that looks exactly like Arnold. It's getting to be author self-insert levels of comical how often his shriveled, ugly mug pops into a scene unprompted to fuck Stef in this "choice based" VN. A threesome is set up by Stef with another girl later in this update... HOT! But it won't be a threesome, because Stef has also invited Arnold for....reasons, and she will be busy jerking him off in the background while he four-finger fucks her. We all know shots of geezers getting jerked off by our wives while awkwardly watching us fuck a stripper makes every almost-threesome that much hotter, right guys!? Stef was really prioritizing MC's needs there. After all, what fun would a FFM encounter be without including the same 75 year old conman beggar who's been monopolizing MC's wife in 9 out of every 10 scenes throughout the game?

How about an option, one single time in this game, to say Sit down and watch or go away Arnold, I don't like you and I'm fucking my wife alone for the first time in a month right now. How about an option to talk with Stef about not wanting to rub balls with Arnold and bathe in his wild jizz spew each time MC wants to fuck his wife? There are many "see it or skip it" options for scenes with other bulls in this game, but Arnold is guaranteed action if he's within a 20 mile radius of Stef when she's thinking about sex. If Stef will only fuck her husband during group scenes now, how about giving readers the choice to invite Erik over, or the boss, instead of Arnold? I'd even accept the mentally handicapped guy at this point, which is really saying something. Make Arnold sit on his thumbs and watch, or forget about him in his room for a change. Forcing Arnold (or a group of old men if Arnold has taken it upon himself to invite the nursing home to MC's house) into every intimate encounter the MC has with his wife is not the ideal "Perfect Housewife" scenario for a sizable percentage of readers. The author sets up a variety of male and female partners for the couple, but this is really the Arnold and Stef show. Stef is doing all the things an author-controlled, beta-cuck husband who loves geriatric sex with a conman would enjoy, she's not presenting a variety of options that readers might want to experience while share/swinging with their "Perfect Housewife."

If MC wasn't such a dense wimp, it might have dawned on him that Stef probably stopped by Arnold's room while "cleaning up," just like she did last time, and told him to come out naked later that night because she wanted to fuck him. Why else would a "respectful, good guy" walk out naked and rock hard like that as a guest in someone's house? Why else would Stef insist on fucking noisily outside Arnold's door while peeking on him through the keyhole? This game is full of oddly placed NTR-lite inferences, creating a sense of mistrust and tension that belies Stef's motivations. Why is this woman unable to have passionate one-on-one sex with her husband? If she's able, why has she not once wanted to since they began "sharing?" Her actions throughout the game are sheisty, this is just one example. The MC loves being cucked, but readers who don't share the same preference will always be put off by this story because the only thought process MC has is I told her not to do that but she did anyways and now I have an erection so she must have done the right thing! A selfish wife running the show is standard fare for a traditional NTR story, which this author is basically following beat by beat, except for the occasional "remember, I love and respect my husband" from Stef and an "I love being cucked so much I jerked off 8 times in 3 minutes" from MC. The reader is supposed to believe simultaneously that 1. Stef would never do NTR stuff to the MC (reader), and 2. MC (author) and Stef both get really turned on by NTR stuff. Stef is constantly pushing the boundaries of what even cuck-MC is comfortable with. The couple's experimentation process is Stef saying "I would never do <thing> honey," then later tricking MC into thinking <thing> happened because she likes it or her grandpa boyfriend(s) ask for it, with MC inevitably coming around to say "Wow it turns out when you did <thing> against my wishes I got an erection so I'm not even mad about it now!" Then Stef does <thing> with zero MC or reader input for the rest of the story. Later on a new and more depraved <thing #2> is desired by Stef and the process resets.

What a reader wants to see doesn't matter to the author of this story. The reader is forced to adopt the point of view of an emasculated cuck avatar who is tricked into loving whatever NTR-lite <thing> Stef is craving each update. If reader input isn't going to alter a story (outside of "watch this scene? y/n"), included kinks, or character motivations, why write a choice based VN in the first place? This probably would have been fine as a single path graphic novel instead, especially if the author leaned into the NTR setups they love creating but keep backing out of prematurely. Call the novel Stef Craves the Geriatric NTR Guys and Cucky Trusts Her so readers who enjoy choices and kink variety don't waste their time, everyone wins!
Great post, really in-depth.
To be honest here, he is not so wrong.
I can see his point and somehow I like the criticism.
I prefer well thought critique more than kissing a game developers butt for little effort.
 
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beegemgeege

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I've come to terms with the fact that the writing in this game is not going to set up route paths and kink selection in a satisfying way for many readers. I want to highlight the problems I personally have with this VN, on the off-chance the author will include more reader agency in the future or takes this into account when setting up stories for new games.

I felt hope at the start of this update, when the couple returned home to find their room unoccupied by an elderly glom-on sleeping naked in their bed. A swinging couple arriving home from a night out at the strip club, so amped up that they want to bang each other's brains out for hours? Awesome! The couple also established that Stef won't sleep around behind MC's back... but then in the very next sentence MC says he actually would enjoy walking in on Stef and Arnold banging behind his back and got a massive erection when talking about it. This all but confirms Stef will plan another "shocking" cheating feint in the future, whether the reader is getting sick of them or not. The MC will love this when it happens, whether the reader does or not. Stef will then begin forcing these scenarios regularly, whether the reader wants them to happen or not. Choices abound!

OK, not the biggest deal. Let's get back to that horned up, post strip club sex with the MC and his wife, a rare and welcome surprise!

View attachment 3165251
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Oh no. I forgot...

View attachment 3165254
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...Stef needs to include Arnold...

View attachment 3165256
View attachment 3165257

...every...

View attachment 3165258

...single...

View attachment 3165316

...time.

View attachment 3165283

Don't Fear The Reaper has cowbell, Perfect Housewife has Arnold.

Writing a sentence or two about how much an MC likes something does not make a reader also like that thing. Stef having the enthusiasm of a Fig Street whore working overtime while fucking the MC (come on...please...oh yeah...it's good...I came...) and then acting like a gorilla on PCP while fucking others (HRRNGGGGAAAAAHHHHFUCKKK *spasms wildly*) is not empowering or arousing to a non-cuck reader, it is emasculating and confusing. Stef can't go a single day without multiple doses of Arnold dick, which is not equally true of the MC (she can seemingly go for weeks without him). The author shoehorns Arnold into basically every single sexual encounter the MC has with his wife, with zero reader input or narrative reason for him being included. I would not be shocked to find out the author is an old guy named Arnold that looks exactly like Arnold. It's getting to be author self-insert levels of comical how often his shriveled, ugly mug pops into a scene unprompted to fuck Stef in this "choice based" VN. A threesome is set up by Stef with another girl later in this update... HOT! But it won't be a threesome, because Stef has also invited Arnold for....reasons, and she will be busy jerking him off in the background while he four-finger fucks her. We all know shots of geezers getting jerked off by our wives while awkwardly watching us fuck a stripper makes every almost-threesome that much hotter, right guys!? Stef was really prioritizing MC's needs there. After all, what fun would a FFM encounter be without including the same 75 year old conman beggar who's been monopolizing MC's wife in 9 out of every 10 scenes throughout the game?

How about an option, one single time in this game, to say Sit down and watch or go away Arnold, I don't like you and I'm fucking my wife alone for the first time in a month right now. How about an option to talk with Stef about not wanting to rub balls with Arnold and bathe in his wild jizz spew each time MC wants to fuck his wife? There are many "see it or skip it" options for scenes with other bulls in this game, but Arnold is guaranteed action if he's within a 20 mile radius of Stef when she's thinking about sex. If Stef will only fuck her husband during group scenes now, how about giving readers the choice to invite Erik over, or the boss, instead of Arnold? I'd even accept the mentally handicapped guy at this point, which is really saying something. Make Arnold sit on his thumbs and watch, or forget about him in his room for a change. Forcing Arnold (or a group of old men if Arnold has taken it upon himself to invite the nursing home to MC's house) into every intimate encounter the MC has with his wife is not the ideal "Perfect Housewife" scenario for a sizable percentage of readers. The author sets up a variety of male and female partners for the couple, but this is really the Arnold and Stef show. Stef is doing all the things an author-controlled, beta-cuck husband who loves geriatric sex with a conman would enjoy, she's not presenting a variety of options that readers might want to experience while share/swinging with their "Perfect Housewife."

If MC wasn't such a dense wimp, it might have dawned on him that Stef probably stopped by Arnold's room while "cleaning up," just like she did last time, and told him to come out naked later that night because she wanted to fuck him. Why else would a "respectful, good guy" walk out naked and rock hard like that as a guest in someone's house? Why else would Stef insist on fucking noisily outside Arnold's door while peeking on him through the keyhole? This game is full of oddly placed NTR-lite inferences, creating a sense of mistrust and tension that belies Stef's motivations. Why is this woman unable to have passionate one-on-one sex with her husband? If she's able, why has she not once wanted to since they began "sharing?" Her actions throughout the game are sheisty, this is just one example. The MC loves being cucked, but readers who don't share the same preference will always be put off by this story because the only thought process MC has is I told her not to do that but she did anyways and now I have an erection so she must have done the right thing! A selfish wife running the show is standard fare for a traditional NTR story, which this author is basically following beat by beat, except for the occasional "remember, I love and respect my husband" from Stef and an "I love being cucked so much I jerked off 8 times in 3 minutes" from MC. The reader is supposed to believe simultaneously that 1. Stef would never do NTR stuff to the MC (reader), and 2. MC (author) and Stef both get really turned on by NTR stuff. Stef is constantly pushing the boundaries of what even cuck-MC is comfortable with. The couple's experimentation process is Stef saying "I would never do <thing> honey," then later tricking MC into thinking <thing> happened because she likes it or her grandpa boyfriend(s) ask for it, with MC inevitably coming around to say "Wow it turns out when you did <thing> against my wishes I got an erection so I'm not even mad about it now!" Then Stef does <thing> with zero MC or reader input for the rest of the story. Later on a new and more depraved <thing #2> is desired by Stef and the process resets.

What a reader wants to see doesn't matter to the author of this story. The reader is forced to adopt the point of view of an emasculated cuck avatar who is tricked into loving whatever NTR-lite <thing> Stef is craving each update. If reader input isn't going to alter a story (outside of "watch this scene? y/n"), included kinks, or character motivations, why write a choice based VN in the first place? This probably would have been fine as a single path graphic novel instead, especially if the author leaned into the NTR setups they love creating but keep backing out of prematurely. Call the novel Stef Craves the Geriatric NTR Guys and Cucky Trusts Her so readers who enjoy choices and kink variety don't waste their time, everyone wins!
I agree with most of what I read but I'll admit it was a lot so I stopped half way through. Not sure if these grievances were apart of the paragraphs, but I have some as well: ignoring the fact that the game is called "perfect housewife" (so yes, in THAT way, it makes sense to have cheating with the husband and not without), the reason this game has felt stale the last few updates is because we know she wont cross that line. Good games that garner great attention all have the same thing in common: they follow the taboo, the heat, the lust. They ramp it up at a continuous pace to keep you invested. Now the heat was great in the beginning, and thats because we werent sure how far she'd go. Now that its pretty clear this game wont delve into "cheating cheating", the heat has simmered and wont rise to the bonfire it was until the taboo is put back in play. IF you ignore everything else (broken English, inconsistent writing, some weird animations) and the creator found a way to spice this dish back up, theyd get the attention and support they're after.
 
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SideshowBobNo.2

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I would not be shocked to find out the author is an old guy named Arnold that looks exactly like Arnold.
:LOL:
A threesome is set up by Stef with another girl later in this update... HOT! But it won't be a threesome, because Stef has also invited Arnold for....reasons, and she will be busy jerking him off in the background while he four-finger fucks her.
I agree it was weird that Arnold was there too.
It should have been the couple and the stripper only.
I thought Stef mentioned something like the MC only has fun this time.
We all know shots of geezers getting jerked off by our wives while awkwardly watching us fuck a stripper makes every almost-threesome that much hotter, right guys!?
:LOL:
what fun would a FFM encounter be without including the same 75 year old conman beggar
Poor Arnold has to be there when the couple plays from now on.
How about an option, one single time in this game, to say Sit down and watch or go away Arnold, I don't like you and I'm fucking my wife alone for the first time in a month right now.
The game needs a skip geriatric porn button.
How about an option to talk with Stef about not wanting to rub balls with Arnold and bathe in his wild jizz spew each time MC wants to fuck his wife?
Maybe the MC likes rubbing his balls on old man balls.
Arnold is guaranteed action if he's within a 20 mile radius of Stef when she's thinking about sex.
Arnold has a big antenna, with what he is able to detect Stef's pussy, if necessary.
Make Arnold sit on his thumbs and watch, or forget about him in his room for a change.
Can't do that to poor Arnold, that poor fellow needs some love too.
beta-cuck husband who loves geriatric sex
To each his own.
Why else would a "respectful, good guy" walk out naked and rock hard like that as a guest in someone's house? Why else would Stef insist on fucking noisily outside Arnold's door while peeking on him through the keyhole?
It's a common scene in everyman's life.
An old man standing naked behind a closed door with an erection at night and waiting for a threesome.
Why is this woman unable to have passionate one-on-one sex with her husband?
She can't anymore, because sex with hubby alone is boring.
"I love being cucked so much I jerked off 8 times in 3 minutes"
Could be a new world record.

Please don't stop playing the game, I like your rants and I would miss them.
Right now they are more entertaining than the game to me.
 
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SideshowBobNo.2

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Or even better, let all the guys from the game gather at the MC's house and play "Russian roulette" (group sex) with Stefany. And the MC will only be allowed to watch and masturbate (he likes to do it). After 9 months, find out who made Stefany's baby, he lost. :ROFLMAO:
Maybe Stefany is pregnant already, because of the many visits to the spa.
She was in the pool with all the old guys, they don't had sex with her, but she was inside the water.
Who knows what fluids were swimming inside that pool.

"soaking naked 8 hours a day in an old man gangbang sex lagoon" Quote Adamska
 
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Fascorslolen

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This is the first preview of the next update.

Oliver and Stefany go to Dante's house, and he welcomes them with great pleasure.

In the first image Dante shows Stefany a photo of him and his late wife when they were young.

In the second image Stefany relaxes with a cocktail, after having dinner, and she takes the opportunity to tease Dante, just a little.

Let me know in the comments what you think.

As always, thank you for your support and stay tuned for more preview.

See you soon!
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I've come to terms with the fact that the writing in this game is not going to set up route paths and kink selection in a satisfying way for many readers. I want to highlight the problems I personally have with this VN, on the off-chance the author will include more reader agency in the future or takes this into account when setting up stories for new games.

I felt hope at the start of this update, when the couple returned home to find their room unoccupied by an elderly glom-on sleeping naked in their bed. A swinging couple arriving home from a night out at the strip club, so amped up that they want to bang each other's brains out for hours? Awesome! The couple also established that Stef won't sleep around behind MC's back... but then in the very next sentence MC says he actually would enjoy walking in on Stef and Arnold banging behind his back and got a massive erection when talking about it. This all but confirms Stef will plan another "shocking" cheating feint in the future, whether the reader is getting sick of them or not. The MC will love this when it happens, whether the reader does or not. Stef will then begin forcing these scenarios regularly, whether the reader wants them to happen or not. Choices abound!

OK, not the biggest deal. Let's get back to that horned up, post strip club sex with the MC and his wife, a rare and welcome surprise!

View attachment 3165251
View attachment 3165252

Oh no. I forgot...

View attachment 3165254
View attachment 3165255

...Stef needs to include Arnold...

View attachment 3165256
View attachment 3165257

...every...

View attachment 3165258

...single...

View attachment 3165316

...time.

View attachment 3165283

Don't Fear The Reaper has cowbell, Perfect Housewife has Arnold.

Writing a sentence or two about how much an MC likes something does not make a reader also like that thing. Stef having the enthusiasm of a Fig Street whore working overtime while fucking the MC (come on...please...oh yeah...it's good...I came...) and then acting like a gorilla on PCP while fucking others (HRRNGGGGAAAAAHHHHFUCKKK *spasms wildly*) is not empowering or arousing to a non-cuck reader, it is emasculating and confusing. Stef can't go a single day without multiple doses of Arnold dick, which is not equally true of the MC (she can seemingly go for weeks without him). The author shoehorns Arnold into basically every single sexual encounter the MC has with his wife, with zero reader input or narrative reason for him being included. I would not be shocked to find out the author is an old guy named Arnold that looks exactly like Arnold. It's getting to be author self-insert levels of comical how often his shriveled, ugly mug pops into a scene unprompted to fuck Stef in this "choice based" VN. A threesome is set up by Stef with another girl later in this update... HOT! But it won't be a threesome, because Stef has also invited Arnold for....reasons, and she will be busy jerking him off in the background while he four-finger fucks her. We all know shots of geezers getting jerked off by our wives while awkwardly watching us fuck a stripper makes every almost-threesome that much hotter, right guys!? Stef was really prioritizing MC's needs there. After all, what fun would a FFM encounter be without including the same 75 year old conman beggar who's been monopolizing MC's wife in 9 out of every 10 scenes throughout the game?

How about an option, one single time in this game, to say Sit down and watch or go away Arnold, I don't like you and I'm fucking my wife alone for the first time in a month right now. How about an option to talk with Stef about not wanting to rub balls with Arnold and bathe in his wild jizz spew each time MC wants to fuck his wife? There are many "see it or skip it" options for scenes with other bulls in this game, but Arnold is guaranteed action if he's within a 20 mile radius of Stef when she's thinking about sex. If Stef will only fuck her husband during group scenes now, how about giving readers the choice to invite Erik over, or the boss, instead of Arnold? I'd even accept the mentally handicapped guy at this point, which is really saying something. Make Arnold sit on his thumbs and watch, or forget about him in his room for a change. Forcing Arnold (or a group of old men if Arnold has taken it upon himself to invite the nursing home to MC's house) into every intimate encounter the MC has with his wife is not the ideal "Perfect Housewife" scenario for a sizable percentage of readers. The author sets up a variety of male and female partners for the couple, but this is really the Arnold and Stef show. Stef is doing all the things an author-controlled, beta-cuck husband who loves geriatric sex with a conman would enjoy, she's not presenting a variety of options that readers might want to experience while share/swinging with their "Perfect Housewife."

If MC wasn't such a dense wimp, it might have dawned on him that Stef probably stopped by Arnold's room while "cleaning up," just like she did last time, and told him to come out naked later that night because she wanted to fuck him. Why else would a "respectful, good guy" walk out naked and rock hard like that as a guest in someone's house? Why else would Stef insist on fucking noisily outside Arnold's door while peeking on him through the keyhole? This game is full of oddly placed NTR-lite inferences, creating a sense of mistrust and tension that belies Stef's motivations. Why is this woman unable to have passionate one-on-one sex with her husband? If she's able, why has she not once wanted to since they began "sharing?" Her actions throughout the game are sheisty, this is just one example. The MC loves being cucked, but readers who don't share the same preference will always be put off by this story because the only thought process MC has is I told her not to do that but she did anyways and now I have an erection so she must have done the right thing! A selfish wife running the show is standard fare for a traditional NTR story, which this author is basically following beat by beat, except for the occasional "remember, I love and respect my husband" from Stef and an "I love being cucked so much I jerked off 8 times in 3 minutes" from MC. The reader is supposed to believe simultaneously that 1. Stef would never do NTR stuff to the MC (reader), and 2. MC (author) and Stef both get really turned on by NTR stuff. Stef is constantly pushing the boundaries of what even cuck-MC is comfortable with. The couple's experimentation process is Stef saying "I would never do <thing> honey," then later tricking MC into thinking <thing> happened because she likes it or her grandpa boyfriend(s) ask for it, with MC inevitably coming around to say "Wow it turns out when you did <thing> against my wishes I got an erection so I'm not even mad about it now!" Then Stef does <thing> with zero MC or reader input for the rest of the story. Later on a new and more depraved <thing #2> is desired by Stef and the process resets.

What a reader wants to see doesn't matter to the author of this story. The reader is forced to adopt the point of view of an emasculated cuck avatar who is tricked into loving whatever NTR-lite <thing> Stef is craving each update. If reader input isn't going to alter a story (outside of "watch this scene? y/n"), included kinks, or character motivations, why write a choice based VN in the first place? This probably would have been fine as a single path graphic novel instead, especially if the author leaned into the NTR setups they love creating but keep backing out of prematurely. Call the novel Stef Craves the Geriatric NTR Guys and Cucky Trusts Her so readers who enjoy choices and kink variety don't waste their time, everyone wins!
Sorry, but this is a porn game not a rewrite of "Gone With The Wind" It is very insightful, but if you want to use your talents to write a critique with this much depth, you need to get a job with the Washington Post.
 
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El Buho

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This game has devolved into senseless orgies tbh
You reference "Indecent Wife Hana" as your favorite NTR game. Do you have a favorite that does not use Japanese anime type characters? Btw, do you consider NTR and cuckold stories the same?
 
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