If I wanted to read a book or if it was a text-based game then I think I would like this. But only reading this with eventual sexual content is quite boring while you expect to play porn or at least ecchi game.
Usually I find the most interesting approach to the story is to say only what is relevant at the situation and if you need to know background or some other info there could be a library or "event" of some sorts to let player know more about what is happening and why. However, that information isn't forced upon the player and player should understand the situation from simply dialogue or visuals if needed. If you want to show what character thinks, feels, whatever, it is more interesting to see that character's expressions and the thoughts kept short and simple letting the player decide how that character fully feels. Maybe it is a humiliating situation but character for some reason deviantly smiles and lets player decide what is happening or it just shows character smiling, showing some gesture to let you know how exactly that character feels. Also it feels like narrator isn't needed... Maybe I just ignored it too much but after skipping ocasional narrator line I didn't felt like I missed anything at all which is odd if everything narrator is saying is needed.
Overall, I like the art (even if some is questionable like that centaur mentioned by other users but whatever works I guess
) and characters seem interesting. Whole story aspect I think could be done better but it's not bad. And well I'm looking forward to what this game gonna become even if at the moment it isn't my cup of tea because of all the reading.