Photographer's Delight - WIP Game Discussion

[Mephist]

Well, in all honesty I can't wait to see what the game is gonna be. I know it might take a while before we see anything

 

[CandyMan29]

sounds interesting.

 

[♥♦ Xander Salvatore ♣♠]

Just remembered we have two really small attempts at writing a book will post them after work see if the partial writing is any good

Also V said he found some books about writing on the dev hub.. So will be looking at those

 

[redknight00]

Just remembered we have two really small attempts at writing a book will post them after work see if the partial writing is any good

Also V said he found some books about writing on the dev hub.. So will be looking at those

I recommend checking How to Draw Comics the Marvel Way by Stan Lee and John Buscema, while it's about comics it also has some very good pointers on general visuals, like perspective, image composition, heroic posing and camera angles.

 

[DarthSeduction]

I recommend checking How to Draw Comics the Marvel Way by Stan Lee and John Buscema, while it's about comics it also has some very good pointers on general visuals, like perspective, image composition, heroic posing and camera angles.

That's actually a very good tip. The two things I study most are film and comic composition for how I design and write scenes.

 

[redknight00]

That's actually a very good tip. The two things I study most are film and comic composition for how I design and write scenes.

I'm not a creator (yet), but I like reading and watching videos about this sort of stuff, it helps me understand why I like some stuff and hate others, and indeed comics have a lot in common with VNs, since they both rely on images and short texts to convey feelings and actions.

On the films side there's also a lot to learn like narrative structure, pacing and the use of music to create the atmosphere, that one maybe too advanced for beginners, but the results are incredible when a soundtrack is done right.

 

[Kane Salvatore]

Just remembered we have two really small attempts at writing a book will post them after work see if the partial writing is any good

this is my 'attempt' at a book.. made two versions of it at the time.. not that hard since it's really really small..

 

[♥♦ Xander Salvatore ♣♠]

mines on paper ..

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all i have written.. but i do have character sketches, a hand drawn map and some other miscellaneous info gathered for the 'book' the '-----' is since 5 spaces don't work

 

[DarthSeduction]

mines on paper ..

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all i have written.. but i do have character sketches, a hand drawn map and some other miscellaneous info gathered for the 'book'

I suggest you take the lead in the writing department. Your dialogue and narration are far less wooden.

 

[Kane Salvatore]

'Aspiring Artist/Writer' is part of his sig for that reason

 

[redknight00]

Alright I'm gonna try to use my high school writing knowledge:
V needs to pay a little more attention to pauses and pacing in the sentences, my teacher used to say when you read aloud and have to breath then you should put a break. Or looking at the verbs, each one has a sentence around it and each should be separated by a break or a conjunction.
(and I probably got some wrong term because English is not my first language)

X the only big flaw I saw was the overuse of 'said', try using synonymous or other techniques to identify the speaker, like describe how he said or what he is doing.

 

[♥♦ Xander Salvatore ♣♠]

i agree and @Vincidon does as well (off getting food).. reason we didn't get far in those 'attempts'.. though V wants to revisit mine at some point for dark themed fantasy game.. i kind of want to see his continued as well at some point.. tbh if someone wants to take those off our hands go ahead

 

[DarthSeduction]

Alright I'm gonna try to use my high school writing knowledge:
V needs to pay a little more attention to pauses and pacing in the sentences, my teacher used to say when you read aloud and have to breath then you should put a break. Or looking at the verbs, each one has a sentence around it and each should be separated by a break or a conjunction.
(and I probably got some wrong term because English is not my first language)

X the only big flaw I saw was the overuse of 'said', try using synonymous or other techniques to identify the speaker, like describe how he said or what he is doing.

It does get obvious though, when you avoid said too much. The focus shouldn't be so much on getting rid of said, but making sure to use the time in between sentences to be descriptive, make gestures and expressions known. Add a sigh or a characterization like "he said, dejectedly." The last thing you want to do is water down things other than said by overusing them to use said less.

That said(lol), you shouldn't have too much of that in a porn game anyways, because you're gonna have a name and or an image on screen to show who's talking. Instead you'll show us with the art how they're saying it, as well as using font and formatting to make things clear. Italics and bold for emphasis where needed. Capitalization for shouting. Etc.

 

[♥♦ Xander Salvatore ♣♠]

will have to revisit mine even if just to make that little bit better

 

[Kane Salvatore]

First idea we started in high school, a fantasy world mixing elements of The Witcher, Assassin's Creed, Elder Scrolls, Dungeons & Dragons, Final Fantasy, Legend of the Dragoon, books by Robert Jordan and Terry Goodkind and some others.. That is still on paper with a hand drawn map.. Rough idea was a group of mercenaries that deal with any abnormalities in the world that normal armed forces cannot handle

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all i have written.. but i do have character sketches, a hand drawn map and some other miscellaneous info gathered for the 'book' the '-----' is since 5 spaces don't work

Second idea came around in our brief time in college.. A huge Sci-Fi Fantasy idea mostly involving mixing ships\tech from Halo, Dead Space, Stargate and cannot think of the rest atm not at my computer, all the info for this one is in text files and images.. Rough idea was sort of like the Turbines from Iron Blood Orphans (show wasn't even around at the time ), other then a heavy incest element and immortality serums..

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though.. don't want to post that one

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[♥♦ Xander Salvatore ♣♠]

More 'it's a huge jumbled mess of text files and images and is not ready to be posted' tbh, we'll work on that see about posting a few bits here and there

Considering opening a Patreon with 'creating art and short stories' none of it sexual.. Under a different group name to get some sort of cash flow so maybe we can cut our work hours to part time.. But doubt its a good idea..

 

[♥♦ Xander Salvatore ♣♠]

On to Sisterly Lust stuff.. Will have to play the recent update but I read in the thread the school counselor is pulling Rachel away from the MC maybe I can use that for our short story.. And Jennifer from DmD having a imo 'shitty' first time can also pull her into our story..

Hmmm... Does it matter who the MC of the cameo story is?

 

[Kane Salvatore]

More 'it's a huge jumbled mess of text files and images and is not ready to be posted' tbh, we'll work on that see about posting a few bits here and there

Considering opening a Patreon with 'creating art and short stories' none of it sexual.. Under a different group name to get some sort of cash flow so maybe we can cut our work hours to part time.. But doubt its a good idea..

'huge jumbled' is an understatement

i like that patreon idea but idk if we should tbh

On to Sisterly Lust stuff.. Will have to play the recent update but I read in the thread the school counselor is pulling Rachel away from the MC maybe I can use that for our short story.. And Jennifer from DmD having a imo 'shitty' first time can also pull her into our story..

Hmmm... Does it matter who the MC of the cameo story is?

was thinking our main games antagonist could be the MC but not sure

 

[DarthSeduction]

Shouldn't matter. The most recent update is pulling rachel away, but not in a sexual way. She's just a cunt.

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[♥♦ Xander Salvatore ♣♠]

updated the character sheets on the OP.. added hair colors IF the sheets go into the game will be filed down mostly there for reference atm... also any help with writing a good overview would be appreciated