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spellofearth

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The main thing you need to deal with is the grind problem. I was basically just going to work, sleeping, going back to work, sleeping until I could afford the powder. There is nothing else to do in this game outside of corrupting people with the powder. So, as soon as I could afford the powder, I would choose one person and corrupt them. At the end of that content, back to the grind. Rinse and repeat. There's nothing else to really explore, find, or learn about. So, it kinda fails as a sandbox game.
I had an idea to make a change of work on the level of intelligence. But I don't think it will take away the problem of grind. Can you suggest something to avoid it?
Content without powder is already in development plans
 

radical686

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I had an idea to make a change of work on the level of intelligence. But I don't think it will take away the problem of grind. Can you suggest something to avoid it?
Content without powder is already in development plans
Make the powder cheaper but require money to be used for other things. Buy them dinner, or you need to improve your wardrobe to be more attractive. Dima needs a dildo, his girlfriend needs a harness, content where you interact with her. It all happens offline right now. You appear to enlist Elsa's help without having any actual conversation with her. Same with Dima.

Conversations and interactions with everyone right now are kind of facile. Right now you grind to get the powder, but then the corruption is easy. There's no challenge.
 
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A prime example of what shouldn't be a porn game. I will try to give criticism as to why this game does not bode well.

  1. A porn game implies a game with porn, not a game that rewards porn, such as this one.
  2. As a game, it implies gameplay. How is the game played?
The way the "game" works right now is that you spam cafe until you get enough money for corruption powder to get 4-5 porn images in a row and that's it. That wasn't even considered okay back on the NES, much less today.

So this game presents no gameplay, all you do right now is press cafe go to work 10 times to get 200$ to get powder to get 4-5 porn images. At this point anyone will cut out the middle man and just go on pornhub and look directly at the same images without having to go through 100 clicks.

Now a game doesn't need a good story to be good. I've played hundreds of hours of CSGO and it certainly isn't because of the story. That being said, it always helps.
 
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spellofearth

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Make the powder cheaper but require money to be used for other things. Buy them dinner, or you need to improve your wardrobe to be more attractive. Dima needs a dildo, his girlfriend needs a harness, content where you interact with her. It all happens offline right now. You appear to enlist Elsa's help without having any actual conversation with her. Same with Dima.

Conversations and interactions with everyone right now are kind of facile. Right now you grind to get the powder, but then the corruption is easy. There's no challenge.
Thank you for constructive criticism in the next update I will try to make the game more interesting and take your criticism into account.Good luck
 
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bsjfan69

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When I read the intro, I thought that while the English wasn't good, the scene was descriptive and some effort was put into the writing, which is really all you need to stand out in this website. If the rest of the game had been like that, I would say that this game has a lot of potential. But nope. Immediately after the intro you realize just how little effort was put into this game. Bottom of the barrel dialogue, the most generic one liners, so bad you might as well just browse the images folder and have the exact same experience, if not better.

I'm not saying you need to be the next Shakespeare to write porn games, but come on, I've seen more effort put into reviews in this website than what the dev put into writing the text for this game.
 

spellofearth

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When I read the intro, I thought that while the English wasn't good, the scene was descriptive and some effort was put into the writing, which is really all you need to stand out in this website. If the rest of the game had been like that, I would say that this game has a lot of potential. But nope. Immediately after the intro you realize just how little effort was put into this game. Bottom of the barrel dialogue, the most generic one liners, so bad you might as well just browse the images folder and have the exact same experience, if not better.

I'm not saying you need to be the next Shakespeare to write porn games, but come on, I've seen more effort put into reviews in this website than what the dev put into writing the text for this game.
Sorry, in future updates I will try to fill the dialogues. I just do not have enough imagination to write full-fledged stories
 

Dante992

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This is a solid start and better than a lot of stuff that gets uploaded here. Good luck with the development. It might be worth finding someone who is a native English speaker to help you rewrite some passages, whilst you can follow what you're trying to say it is a bit patchy in parts.
 
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spellofearth

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This is a solid start and better than a lot of stuff that gets uploaded here. Good luck with the development. It might be worth finding someone who is a native English speaker to help you rewrite some passages, whilst you can follow what you're trying to say it is a bit patchy in parts.
I will try to make a more correct translation. Thank you very much for your kind words.
 

BillyPC

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I personally find the font used to be difficult to read. You might consider looking into an easier to read font or give the player the choice to change the font.
Just a suggestion
 
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Sorry, in future updates I will try to fill the dialogues. I just do not have enough imagination to write full-fledged stories
The next thing you should do is find a writer then. There are plenty out there (I myself am one, busy though) and you should see if you can get one to partner with you. I feel like you've put some solid effort in, but without a story this type of game won't achieve the type of success that gets many Patreon subs.

Good luck!
 
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