I don't think you know what that word means
Well now, what do we have here? Finally, a Dev willing to rock the boat a little. This pleases me. It seems that Pandaman has taken the usual shallow demands for fantasy, various worn out kinks and tropes, and given them all the finger. Already I can hear arms flailing about in the water, and that just amuses me even more.
As this is still in early stages of development, I'll be fairly brief and give you time to bring things into focus, but I will say that this one will be staying on my radar. Hell, the very first story board saying "human civilization is a cancer on the world" earned accolades in my book. On first impressions, the artwork is wonderful and carries a nice ambiance for the theme of the story thus far. As you said, it's a slow-burn, but I can understand that, given the character development and the path it's on at the moment. The relationship build between the MC and Maria is rather sweet. Patience is a virtue, and I think this one will be worth the wait.
Aside from obvious placeholders and headers yet to be worked on, there are very few spelling errors in the script thus far as I can tell, but there are grammatical / syntax errors that need to be corrected. Since the game is sort of in draft form, it's understandable, and I'm not going to lash you over it or anything- I'm sure refinement will come. Please do take your time and keep up the good work. You have the modest beginnings of something very interesting here, so don't give in to the demand for rush jobs and impatience of hoi poloi. Tell the story at your own pace.
As this is still in early stages of development, I'll be fairly brief and give you time to bring things into focus, but I will say that this one will be staying on my radar. Hell, the very first story board saying "human civilization is a cancer on the world" earned accolades in my book. On first impressions, the artwork is wonderful and carries a nice ambiance for the theme of the story thus far. As you said, it's a slow-burn, but I can understand that, given the character development and the path it's on at the moment. The relationship build between the MC and Maria is rather sweet. Patience is a virtue, and I think this one will be worth the wait.
Aside from obvious placeholders and headers yet to be worked on, there are very few spelling errors in the script thus far as I can tell, but there are grammatical / syntax errors that need to be corrected. Since the game is sort of in draft form, it's understandable, and I'm not going to lash you over it or anything- I'm sure refinement will come. Please do take your time and keep up the good work. You have the modest beginnings of something very interesting here, so don't give in to the demand for rush jobs and impatience of hoi poloi. Tell the story at your own pace.
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Join my server and you can tell me all the places where I messed up the grammar and spelling - happy to fix when I know what's wrong.Well now, what do we have here? Finally, a Dev willing to rock the boat a little. This pleases me. It seems that Pandaman has taken the usual shallow demands for fantasy, various worn out kinks and tropes, and given them all the finger. Already I can hear arms flailing about in the water, and that just amuses me even more.
As this is still in early stages of development, I'll be fairly brief and give you time to bring things into focus, but I will say that this one will be staying on my radar. Hell, the very first story board saying "human civilization is a cancer on the world" earned accolades in my book. On first impressions, the artwork is wonderful and carries a nice ambiance for the theme of the story thus far. As you said, it's a slow-burn, but I can understand that, given the character development and the path it's on at the moment. The relationship build between the MC and Maria is rather sweet. Patience is a virtue, and I think this one will be worth the wait.
Aside from obvious placeholders and headers yet to be worked on, there are very few spelling errors in the script thus far as I can tell, but there are grammatical / syntax errors that need to be corrected. Since the game is sort of in draft form, it's understandable, and I'm not going to lash you over it or anything- I'm sure refinement will come. Please do take your time and keep up the good work. You have the modest beginnings of something very interesting here, so don't give in to the demand for rush jobs and impatience of hoi poloi. Tell the story at your own pace.
No problem. I don't mess around with discord, but when I have a little more time, I'll proofread the game and make a complete list of corrections for you here. Judging by what I saw, the list will be rather small.Join my server and you can tell me all the places where I messed up the grammar and spelling - happy to fix when I know what's wrong.
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Genre: Wholesome (big noice)
Render: Awesome (anotha big noice)
Will definitely give this one a go.
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I have a feeling that Jacob may not retain his sanity during the expedition. That scene was fantastic, particularly the cutting of eyes back and forth.
Uh...you ever seen how people on F95 fawn over Incest games and their devs, and shower them with money no matter the quality level? How often they make a point of popping into the rare gem games that dare NOT have incest in 'em and make some "ooo...if only there had been incest" comment?
Have you noticed how many devs shoehorn at least one incest character into their game no matter how little sense it makes cuz they know they won't get subs without it? How is that any different from some e-thot who makes sure the camera's always angled down her cleavage?
Naw dude. I'm using it accurately.
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Oh noes people like incest and dare to pay good money for it.....how dare they.....
..let's get the fuck back on-topic....
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This game too hardcore for me, sorry, i can't deal with handholding.
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I'm just gonna keep this short and sweet, just keep doing what you have been doing up till now. The story is beautiful and easy to make readers happy which i guess is the goal here a feel good story. The romance is flawless.
You son of a gun, you pulled it off! I'll happily admit I was skeptical, but like I said in that same comment from before, there's a lot you're doing right here so I waited with my fingers crossed, and you did not disappoint.[...] Lastly, I tried to make Maria's jokes feel a bit forced - see Chapter 2 when it comes out and you'll get some more backstory and character dev. I promise it's intentional.
The romance itself is a bit saccharine for my tastes, but overall I really enjoy it, really wholesome and just a good time. Nice work, I can't wait for more.
As someone who's borderline illiterate when it comes to installing patches, where exactly am I supposed to extract this, and how do I know it's working?
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I just put the ch1.rpy, ch2.rpy, and script.rpy files in every folder that has files of the same type. Lazy way of doing it when you just aren't sure. Might not work immediately, but you should start seeing green text options. Click those for the correct response.
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Yes...more handholding...
..let's get corrupted together....