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JazzPourer

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To be fair I'm a pretty fast reader, so you probably should not use me as a benchmark. I'd say for the average joe it's about 25-30 mins of content.




Yeah, its definitely the effects stuff. Renpy is old af and it's not optimized in the slightest so even the bare minimum in terms of effects causes friction. Not the glitchy text, the normal conversation ones. You know the typewriter/fade effect you made? It looks great, but any fast reader is going to click faster than the engine can keep up with, making that 0.1s delay I mentioned.
I get it! Some people like text effects, but others find them annoying. I'll keep tweaking my style according to what I like. Thanks again for your feedback!
 

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Thanks for your feedback. Are there any parts of the translation that are problematic?
If possible, I'd like to note them down for future adjustments.

I did use some translators to help speed up the translation process. It took me about two weeks to translate version 0.1,
which I think is still within an acceptable range.
I spotted a few obvious errors during my quick playthrough, but did not think much of it to jot down. Personally I'm more of a big picture overall feel kind of player, so I do not really pay attention too much to editorial errors unless they reach a point of being unintelligible.

I'll keep track of them in the next version if possible. =)
 
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The characters' new outfits and adventures are something to look forward to.



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Three days left, and I'm looking forward to sharing the content of this update with you!



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By sponsoring $10, you can receive the countdown wallpaper version in the Discord group!



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Just a reminder, the official release will include English, Chinese, and Russian versions, and there will be separate versions for Android and PC.


(P.S. Russian versions is struggling, Patience XD)
 

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A very interesting start. I'm a fan of Detective stories but I haven't really found any detective avns that I actually like. I especially like Sherlock Holmes and it seems this game is going for a modern Sherlock with some of the old school elements (clothes and dialogue). This was a bit jaring for me at first as I was wondering why the MC is dressed like he wants to beg me for more porridge.

The renders are pretty good and the story so far has certainly captured my interest. I haven't gotten enough time with the Lis to have an opinion on them yet. My concerns so far are:


It feels (to me) as though the Dev hasn't decided the MC's personality yet. Is he angry and traumatized by his parents murder, is he detached from people because he doesn't know how to socialize and incredibly arrogant or is he a sociopath?

At the start he's told that one of his teammates is dead and he doesn't care in the slightest. Refers to her as "dead weight". That's a bit extreme and makes he seem like he doesn't value human life.

In the scene with the girl on the train he seems politely detached but concerned about her being harassed by the guy. He seems like he wouldn't have any friends but the game quickly introduces multiple past and current friends and he seems to reconnect with them fairly easily.


Sex/lewd scenes are very important to me in an avn so I hope we wont have to wait too long for that.
I know the next update is about to drop. Looking forward to it.

Good luck to the Dev.
 
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Russian version :(



There have been some challenges with the Russian translation version, but it will be released in a few days. Please be patient.

As I am not a native English speaker, I discovered some minor issues in the English text quite late. I will release an updated version in the future to fix these minor issues.

Thank you all for your patience.

and please

Enjoy!



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Some people have already mentioned this, but just so the dev is aware it effects multiple people: I didnt make it past the first little flashback bit due to all the clicking and delays.

I thought I would just remove all the pausing/fading/movement myself but, by the way its coded, it appears to be too much work right now. I read quite quickly and require the full text displayed in a single click, otherwise its far too slow and I get bored waiting for a game to keep up with my reading speed.
 

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wondering, you mentioned that the text effects in Ren'Py are a bit annoying. Could it be because I added some special effects to express the text that caused the issue?
I have poor eyesight and dyslexia. I have difficulty reading the standard text. Some of the text affects make the games unplayable. I've not played yours, but font, size, and color changes are bad. But if you're planning it, adding text to cut scenes that automatically advance is impossible to read for me. I know I'm not the only one, but not sure how many readers have this problem. So, this is just letting you know while you're asking and think about your design.

Regardless, I wish you luck with you're game.

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Some people have already mentioned this, but just so the dev is aware it effects multiple people: I didnt make it past the first little flashback bit due to all the clicking and delays.

I thought I would just remove all the pausing/fading/movement myself but, by the way its coded, it appears to be too much work right now. I read quite quickly and require the full text displayed in a single click, otherwise its far too slow and I get bored waiting for a game to keep up with my reading speed.
Yeah, it's everywhere and with different values so it takes quite a bit of effort to get rid of it all. It serves no purpose at all in the end. Unless you count slowing everything to a crawl. It's going to be just as bad as another game I had to edit recently. That one had over 1000 {w} in the dialogue, 1000+ extra clicks just to try and read the thing. This one could end up being worse though with the constant change of cps. They are trying to hard to make it flashy and the only thing it does is take the player out of the story.
 

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JazzPourer Hello. Love the concept of the game and love the lis too... and there is also harem. Just please tell me there'll be pregnancy for the girls in the future(or in the epilogue/ending). I am asking cuz it's a romance involved harem game so MC starting a family with all the girls he loves in the later will come out beautifully.
 

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Peculiar writing in this one, but eye-catching. The MC is unfortunately pretty irritating and oddly enough the reason for this seems to be completely understood by the person making the game. His faults are manifested as their own annoying character that everyone hates at the beginning of the game. The MC even one-ups this annoying character in his own mind before reminding himself how annoying that is, but it's not written in a self-aware way. It's more like, "if you are a smug douchebag know-it-all, you need to be as good as me to pull it off."

This could end up working if the main character goes through some growth but that doesn't seem to be the point at all. His (and the writer's) understanding of himself seems to be genuinely held and regarded as good.
 
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Peculiar writing in this one, but eye-catching. The MC is unfortunately pretty irritating and oddly enough the reason for this seems to be completely understood by the person making the game. His faults are manifested as their own annoying character that everyone hates at the beginning of the game. The MC even one-ups this annoying character in his own mind before reminding himself how annoying that is, but it's not written in a self-aware way. It's more like, "if you are a smug douchebag know-it-all, you need to be as good as me to pull it off."

This could end up working if the main character goes through some growth but that doesn't seem to be the point at all. His (and the writer's) understanding of himself seems to be genuinely held and regarded as good.
Good all mcs do not need need to be goody two shoes. I like this kind of mc and hope he goes more of his smugness
 
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