Allow me to interject a bit of reality...
The shower scene, specifically when Alice is thinking about sex with our dishrag MC, is just plain awful in regard to her inner dialog. Was this drivel AI generated? No one on the face of the earth would use such terms in this situation. When the endorphins flow and our mind starts to conjure images of passion, our though process is reduce to simple, focused terms. "...a desperate need flowing through my veins along with the bubbling blood". Those types of descriptions just don't cut it. I'm sorry to be so harsh, but the human brain just doesn't work that way. Minimal words, flashes of powerful images, imagined touches, tastes, smells....You need pithy prose, not purple prose.