- Thread starter Studio69
- Start date
- Dec 22, 2019
- 7
- 6
- Jun 8, 2018
- 350
- 560
Perhaps you shouldnt left huge clipstudio file in assets folder :-D
Otherwise it was a bit short, but nice.
- Sep 4, 2017
- 116
- 211
I already gave you a review, but gonna post here also. I love it, it's a great little game for what it is. Now for some advice/ideas/whatever you wanna call it.
1. Not sure it possible, but maybe make the colors more in line. The guys penis went from brown to purple and a few other shades of color. Pretty sure the girl did also.
2. Ties into 1, but it would be nice to have a feature to change the guys color. Same art, just a reskin that the player can pick at the start of the game.
3. She goes pretty fast from freaking out about your boner to becoming a submissive little slut. Would be nice if it was a longer transition from one to the other. Could also add more options, like hand job, titjob, eating her pussy etc.
4. The game seems to lock up after she has her nipples done. Would be nice if you had a logic loop, that lets you keep going on that last day or something, if you don't plan to add more.
5. Actually you should add more, i really like your game.
6. Fix the art for after she has her nipples done for both bars and hops.
7. Maybe a feature to change her hair style also and maybe her clothes. Can pick out some outfits to make her look like a slut or school girl, maybe some cosplay or some rope play?
8. Thanks again for making this neat little game.
1. Not sure it possible, but maybe make the colors more in line. The guys penis went from brown to purple and a few other shades of color. Pretty sure the girl did also.
2. Ties into 1, but it would be nice to have a feature to change the guys color. Same art, just a reskin that the player can pick at the start of the game.
3. She goes pretty fast from freaking out about your boner to becoming a submissive little slut. Would be nice if it was a longer transition from one to the other. Could also add more options, like hand job, titjob, eating her pussy etc.
4. The game seems to lock up after she has her nipples done. Would be nice if you had a logic loop, that lets you keep going on that last day or something, if you don't plan to add more.
5. Actually you should add more, i really like your game.
6. Fix the art for after she has her nipples done for both bars and hops.
7. Maybe a feature to change her hair style also and maybe her clothes. Can pick out some outfits to make her look like a slut or school girl, maybe some cosplay or some rope play?
8. Thanks again for making this neat little game.
- Jan 13, 2018
- 131
- 60
i keep getting stuck on the day after she gets piercings, no options or text appear and whenever i try to save the screen goes black.
im using the android version.
im using the android version.
Last edited:
- Jun 8, 2018
- 350
- 560
- Mar 18, 2019
- 8
- 7
the first thing i thought when i saw Domani was the Damane from Wheel of Time and got super excited.
Last edited:
Good art and I love the style of the background, it adds a nice touch that helps the game stand out.
Now, as others have pointed, she becomes an obedient slut quite early and without much effort. This development is not illogical with the introduction that clearly hints that she's hungry for the D, but gameplay-wise, it feels like that you don't need to corrupt her at all. There's no challenge.
Then, it depends if you aim at producing more content for the game with a long-term goal, or if you want to tell a much shorter story. Both are fine, by the way. But since trainers and corruption are my niche, I couldn't encourage you more to go wild with Project Domani.
(By the way, thanks to covid, I'm free if you want to discuss about the game. I've mostly been working on chara development on the past few months.)
Now, as others have pointed, she becomes an obedient slut quite early and without much effort. This development is not illogical with the introduction that clearly hints that she's hungry for the D, but gameplay-wise, it feels like that you don't need to corrupt her at all. There's no challenge.
Then, it depends if you aim at producing more content for the game with a long-term goal, or if you want to tell a much shorter story. Both are fine, by the way. But since trainers and corruption are my niche, I couldn't encourage you more to go wild with Project Domani.
(By the way, thanks to covid, I'm free if you want to discuss about the game. I've mostly been working on chara development on the past few months.)
Dont know if anyone else is having this problem but the android version is zoomed in on my screen
- Oct 17, 2017
- 1,456
- 3,487
Feedback:
Point 1: For a short project, this is pretty good. Snappy, decent progression. I don't really need much more from this one. I think it's best if you move on to your second idea, and perhaps to try something more ambitious.
Point 2: The biggest issue I have is motive. I get the main character and why he's a blank slate that way. It makes their romance a bit stale because he's such an empty. However, what concerns me is her. Yeah, she's looking for sex and to explore. But, why now? What changed to prompt this?
In writing terms, the element that is lacking is an "Inciting Incident". That is, some kind of change in the status quo that prompts this. A simple example is this. Imagine that the setup was the same. Main character and his friend. She's over hanging out. He's attracted to her but stopped, because she's his friend. She's digging around and finds...
...A porn magazine. Not just any porn magazine, but one featuring a naked girl bound up and gagged. She's too stunned to move or talk. The player thinks that she's freaked out and thinks that he's weird...
...Then, wordlessly, she takes out her phone and takes him to a writing website, where she reveals that she's been writing BDSM fan-fiction about a girl who gets taken as a sex slave. You two talk a bit more, and she shyly asks you if you want to perhaps try it out. But, then asks for you to go slowly because she's not only new to this...but is totally a virgin.
Point 3: There needs to be not only more motive, but more conflict. He likes her. She likes him. He likes kinky sex. She likes kinky sex. He has her try kinky sex. She likes it. Etc Etc.
He isn't worried that he'll ruin their friendship? She's not worried that he'll see her in a new light? She's not shy or reluctant about things? Maybe, the two of them want different things out of the relationship.
Drama is a story's lifeblood. It's what keeps it going, keeps it thrilling. A good erotic story is one where the conflict is revolved BY sex. He's worried about ruining their friendship, but through sex realizes that just being friends isn't what he wants. She's worried he won't see her the same way, but through sex realizes she likes it when he sees her as a fucktoy. Through sex, she realizes she likes pleasure more then modesty. Perhaps, through sex, he realizes he wants her as more then a booty call...or she realizes that she'd rather be trained as a fucktoy then be his girlfriend.
Point 4: This should produce interesting scenes. You have them exploring sexuality together and you have what? Kissing, blowjobs, fucking?
Think of all of the possibilities of the scenario. The two of them sitting on a couch together watching porn, while you see her body slowly start to wiggle. The two of them learning together how to do a rope harness. The two of them hanging out like normal, but he has her gagged and on a leash the entire time...while she's left to imagine the moment he fucks her.
Perhaps the entire thing ends when he returns to his apartment, and sees that she tied herself to the bed, gagged and blindfolded herself, and wrote "I love you" on her stomach.
Consider the possibilities! What are the sex scenes that your premise lets you make that other premises don't? What makes your game SPECIAL.
RECAP:
1. Try something new next time.
2. Add an inciting incident that is the change in situation that causes the story
3. Consider fully the motive of your protagonists, and why they are behaving they are in the situation they are.
4. Add conflicts that the characters have and must overcome that prevent them from getting what they want.
5. Use your Genre, (Sexuality and Romance) to resolve those conflicts.
6. Use the unique setting and situation you develop in order to produce erotic scenes that are unique to your game and take full advantage of the premise.
Studio69
Point 1: For a short project, this is pretty good. Snappy, decent progression. I don't really need much more from this one. I think it's best if you move on to your second idea, and perhaps to try something more ambitious.
Point 2: The biggest issue I have is motive. I get the main character and why he's a blank slate that way. It makes their romance a bit stale because he's such an empty. However, what concerns me is her. Yeah, she's looking for sex and to explore. But, why now? What changed to prompt this?
In writing terms, the element that is lacking is an "Inciting Incident". That is, some kind of change in the status quo that prompts this. A simple example is this. Imagine that the setup was the same. Main character and his friend. She's over hanging out. He's attracted to her but stopped, because she's his friend. She's digging around and finds...
...A porn magazine. Not just any porn magazine, but one featuring a naked girl bound up and gagged. She's too stunned to move or talk. The player thinks that she's freaked out and thinks that he's weird...
...Then, wordlessly, she takes out her phone and takes him to a writing website, where she reveals that she's been writing BDSM fan-fiction about a girl who gets taken as a sex slave. You two talk a bit more, and she shyly asks you if you want to perhaps try it out. But, then asks for you to go slowly because she's not only new to this...but is totally a virgin.
Point 3: There needs to be not only more motive, but more conflict. He likes her. She likes him. He likes kinky sex. She likes kinky sex. He has her try kinky sex. She likes it. Etc Etc.
He isn't worried that he'll ruin their friendship? She's not worried that he'll see her in a new light? She's not shy or reluctant about things? Maybe, the two of them want different things out of the relationship.
Drama is a story's lifeblood. It's what keeps it going, keeps it thrilling. A good erotic story is one where the conflict is revolved BY sex. He's worried about ruining their friendship, but through sex realizes that just being friends isn't what he wants. She's worried he won't see her the same way, but through sex realizes she likes it when he sees her as a fucktoy. Through sex, she realizes she likes pleasure more then modesty. Perhaps, through sex, he realizes he wants her as more then a booty call...or she realizes that she'd rather be trained as a fucktoy then be his girlfriend.
Point 4: This should produce interesting scenes. You have them exploring sexuality together and you have what? Kissing, blowjobs, fucking?
Think of all of the possibilities of the scenario. The two of them sitting on a couch together watching porn, while you see her body slowly start to wiggle. The two of them learning together how to do a rope harness. The two of them hanging out like normal, but he has her gagged and on a leash the entire time...while she's left to imagine the moment he fucks her.
Perhaps the entire thing ends when he returns to his apartment, and sees that she tied herself to the bed, gagged and blindfolded herself, and wrote "I love you" on her stomach.
Consider the possibilities! What are the sex scenes that your premise lets you make that other premises don't? What makes your game SPECIAL.
RECAP:
1. Try something new next time.
2. Add an inciting incident that is the change in situation that causes the story
3. Consider fully the motive of your protagonists, and why they are behaving they are in the situation they are.
4. Add conflicts that the characters have and must overcome that prevent them from getting what they want.
5. Use your Genre, (Sexuality and Romance) to resolve those conflicts.
6. Use the unique setting and situation you develop in order to produce erotic scenes that are unique to your game and take full advantage of the premise.
Studio69
- Jan 19, 2018
- 17
- 176
just downloaded and played this the other day and gotta say this is great for a short game, the arts great, the concept is perfect for a quick game to fap to as opposed to more complex trainers and while id love more content all this really needs is a fix so it loops instead of just freezing up after the nipple piercings
Thanks for this. I like your game. like the art style and girl is cute as can be. I'd say cream pies and cumshots. all kinds of anal training. insertions of various toys and items. bdsm. tie her up. whoop that ass. tie up dem big ol titties. some fisting. maybe invite in the basketball team...
Short but sweet. Would definitely love to see it continue but I'm curious as to where you'll take it.
- Oct 17, 2017
- 1,456
- 3,487