VN Ren'Py Quean Bee [v0.2.9 Ch.1] [Lockheart]

[Yngling]

That could definitely work, or something like it. I didn't want to make my post too long by going deeply into her too, but yeah just like him she's a little bit too perfect of an innocent street flower too. Narratively (or at least for the narrative I'm creating in my head out of short demo), she definitely needs a 'I can fix her' thing too, something to make her flawed and work as a basis for an arc. Substance abuse specifically would be a good mirror to his drinking problems and could work well as a justification for why she's not allowed or doesn't want to stay in a shelter, and/or another possibility is prostitution which would create a strong justification for the game's core premise of her thinking the solution to all his problems is getting laid. Another that builds out of what's already there is maybe her not at all being honest about just stealing out of hunger too.

Any option may have to find a careful balance though, full damaged goods might make a good story but it is an H-game with user appeal concerns and people generally prefer girls more pure. Fine line between 'I can fix her' and a whore/corruption sim (..unless that is the dev's intended arc?). There's also player choice concerns depending on if dev is going more for blank slate versus an established character too. Having her be more near the early gateway stages of a decent into whatever bad thing may be optimal.

Up to dev ultimately though, we're extrapolating on an extremely short demo and maybe they intend something way different, but yeah there does need to be something imo, a MC needs an arc.

Yeah. I do think substance abuse is a better angle than prostitution.

I also think it's attractive if a person manages to keep at least part of their personality pure even though the world around them is anything but pure.

Whatever it will be, I fully agree the MC needs an arc which seems to be missing at the moment.

 

[MadMansKingdom]

I'm a fan of Lockheart's games so I gave this demo a try. Sorry, just not my thing. Don't get me wrong, it was good story telling and the characters looked great, just hit too many marks I don't care for in an AVN. I'm guessing OTM will be the last AVN I'll be playing from Lockheart. Disappointing because I'm a HUGE fan of that series. I'm sure Lockheart will do great without my support because he is just that damn good!

 

[Bloodguard]

I'm a fan of Lockheart's games so I gave this demo a try. Sorry, just not my thing. Don't get me wrong, it was good story telling and the characters looked great, just hit too many marks I don't care for in an AVN. I'm guessing OTM will be the last AVN I'll be playing from Lockheart. Disappointing because I'm a HUGE fan of that series. I'm sure Lockheart will do great without my support because he is just that damn good!

I hear that. I am huge fan of the Rose Garden Trilogy, but didn't care for Avalon, or Penny for your thoughts.
Seems Lockheart just really wants to make a female MC game and is trying to figure out how to make money with it.
I wish him the best of luck, but my early impression is that I'm just going to end up really wishing the male character was the MC, like I did with Pfyt. I'm just really not a fan of Penny, like at all. She is the biggest reason I didn't care for Avalon.

 

[erika_monaroe]

Wow... what a waste. This game would have been 100x more sexy if the girl got raped on first scene instead of this really childish rescue. wow. I think you can safely remove the tag.

 

[th3n]

Wow... what a waste. This game would have been 100x more sexy if the girl got raped on first scene instead of this really childish rescue. wow. I think you can safely remove the tag.

What tag dude? That's your opinion, i think its perfect!

 

[Deadmanvs1]

I'm not sure why Lockheart did that, either. Perhaps in the future there will be choices of things to click on. BTW, Lockheart won't be continuing this project unless there is positive feedback. He said that there was a lot of resistance to a female MC in the past.

True and I am also doing what I can to get him that support. Not only as a fan, but I truly he has talent in the writing and art.

 

[Deadmanvs1]

Wow... what a waste. This game would have been 100x more sexy if the girl got raped on first scene instead of this really childish rescue. wow. I think you can safely remove the tag.

But then he's not rescuing from the rape, only helping her recover. This is better since now she is determined to help him to repay saving her.

 

[swiver]

I hope that the new F95 tagging system will be implemented as soon as possible, because the combination of the tag female protagonist and netorare does not always mean that we have cuckqueaning

oh yea no didn't mean cuckquean_ that is rare, i was answering bamachine wishing for cuckold content from the F perspective instead of the cuck

why? is there a plan to make more nuanced tags? it would certainly be interesting, confusion is always possible searching for a certain perspective of any two-sided action/fetish, multi-tag search helps with many but not always, the ntr stuff is not clear (but maybe if one uses 3 tags: f/m protag., f/m domination and netrorare it could be better) and it is even more complicated since it involves 3 perspectives, Bull perspective is also difficult to search for

 

[Enlight432]

oh yea no didn't mean cuckquean_ that is rare, i was answering bamachine wishing for cuckold content from the F perspective instead of the cuck

why? is there a plan to make more nuanced tags? it would certainly be interesting, confusion is always possible searching for a certain perspective of any two-sided action/fetish, multi-tag search helps with many but not always, the ntr stuff is not clear (but maybe if one uses 3 tags: f/m protag., f/m domination and netrorare it could be better) and it is even more complicated since it involves 3 perspectives, Bull perspective is also difficult to search for

yes
that is great
https://f95zone.to/threads/new-tag-discussion.168425/

 

[OhGodNotAgain]

Wow... what a waste. This game would have been 100x more sexy if the girl got raped on first scene instead of this really childish rescue. wow. I think you can safely remove the tag.

Go back under your bridge alt account troll.

 

[erika_monaroe]

Go back under your bridge alt account troll.

Noob, Alt Account Trolls dont live under bridges

 

[Jellyluve]

Man, the cuckquean kink is in desperate need of more games (as the main kink). The only real cuckquean game that I have found (and loved) was "What's Mine Is Yours" and that sadly got abandoned.

 

[Idontplay]

Man, the cuckquean kink is in desperate need of more and good games (as the main kink).

Fixed.

The only real cuckquean game that I have found (and loved) was "What's Mine Is Yours" and that sadly got abandoned.

Yeah.

Actually there is also Babysitters (with a final s), it works pretty well, but you have to force a little bit the story, in order to have a pure cuckquean path.

 

[Bollagus]

How about an option to rename Carter, or will there be another male "MC" in the future?

 

[Bloodguard]

How about an option to rename Carter, or will there be another male "MC" in the future?

I don't think there will be a male MC at all. Bee seems to be the MC. Lockheart usually lets us rename the MC, but since Carter technically is not the MC, I'm not sure if that will be an option here. Good question.

 

[sigvar]

Man, the cuckquean kink is in desperate need of more games (as the main kink). The only real cuckquean game that I have found (and loved) was "What's Mine Is Yours" and that sadly got abandoned.

Yeah, I haven't found another one quite like "What's Mine Is Yours". I don't even think there is a cuckquean tag. It at least wasn't used for that game which was a straight up cuckquean game. Really under-served kink in AVNs. Had hopes when I came to this thread, but was disappointed by a female MC. WMV MC's main girlfriend is a cuckquean, but there are a lot of issues with that game, so can't say it qualifies as a peer to WMiY.

 

[save8lot]

Seraphina Patel in Quean Bee
2 days ago

This is the first concept art I've made for Seraphina, the Indian / American roommate also living with Carter. She is much more curvy and bodacious than Bee. She'll have an upbeat and positive personality, and be hopelessly flirtatious with Carter.

As Bee and Sera become more friendly with each other, they'll start plotting ways to seduce and / or corrupt Carter into seeing them as more than just wounded animals to take care of. We'll also learn about her father who owns a string of hotels and believes Sera needs to go out into the world and build her own career from scratch, which will have had a profound impact on her.

These are all early ideas and things have been changing as I've toiled the story around in my head. The first Chapter could see significant changes to the story and characters.

Let me know what you all think about Sera so far.

Thanks for the support!

 

[Idontplay]

I like the new title.

 

[MikeyUK]

I quite like the look of Seraphina and that she and Bee will try to get the MC interested in them more than friends.
Too many games have a male MC seducing the girls, it's about time the tables are turned. Seems this should be a good game to play.

 

[Yngling]

Seraphina Patel in Quean Bee
2 days ago

This is the first concept art I've made for Seraphina, the Indian / American roommate also living with Carter. She is much more curvy and bodacious than Bee. She'll have an upbeat and positive personality, and be hopelessly flirtatious with Carter.

As Bee and Sera become more friendly with each other, they'll start plotting ways to seduce and / or corrupt Carter into seeing them as more than just wounded animals to take care of. We'll also learn about her father who owns a string of hotels and believes Sera needs to go out into the world and build her own career from scratch, which will have had a profound impact on her.

These are all early ideas and things have been changing as I've toiled the story around in my head. The first Chapter could see significant changes to the story and characters.

Let me know what you all think about Sera so far.

Thanks for the support!

Looks nice but for an Indian-American I would have expected a bit darker eyes and perhaps also a bit different skin tone.

Story wise looks good as well.