I have good news.
I see here and there that people is not really annoyed by the language. Sadly I'm a bit of a grammar nazi, so I am. Or, I'd better say, I was.
I'm not here to criticize, I love the game, its story, its humor and everything else, but probably because I'm not a native English speaker I find it really difficult to read with all these orthography and punctuation errors. It breaks the rhythm. Attached is a corrected version, it's not 100% perfect and I may have inadvertently slipped some mistakes myself into the document, but it should be much better nonetheless. I know how hard it is to write in a foreign language, so I'm happy if I managed to help. Also, the frequency of mistakes decreased sensibly in the latest release, and that has to be recognized.
There is one problem that may need some attention. The narrator starts with the present tense and uses it for almost all the game, except at the end, mostly in the new content, where he uses alternatively present and past tenses. I corrected most of them, but I'm sure there are still sentences in the wrong tense scattered around.
I had to change a few things. The player won't notice much (hopefully), but the author will find most of the events in a different order. I had the idea of writing a walkthrough while correcting the game, but I don't have the time for something like that again, and the game is simple enough and the choices are often equivalent, that it should not be needed. The new order should have helped me writing the walkthrough, and even after I realized I couldn't write it, I kept reordering everything. I'm also a bit obsessive-compulsive, sorry.
I corrected a few code errors, mostly wrong references to images, missing character boxes and missing/too many tags. There were also two events that were ready, but weren't referenced anywhere: one had to do with the first encounter with nurse Alison, the other with Grandma and Riley. I saw they were complete, so I added them to the game.
The code needs some improvement, but I didn't have the time to do this too. I saw a lot of duplicate code where there are various possibilities depending on previous choices. This means mistakes were copied and pasted multiple times, but they were corrected only once, occasionally. Eliminating the duplicates, or at least reducing them to the few sentences where there is an actual difference, can reduce the weight of the file and, more importantly, the amount of code you'll need to maintain. I may do it in the future, but it will require some time and I feared I would not be able to release it before the new bugfix was released.
I also looked for the bug in Tessa's corruption, but I couldn't find where it happens. I would have tried to fix it, but sadly it's still there.
Finally, I checked all the files. I had to move them one by one to check those in use, those with a wrong name (usually just capitalization, so it's only a problem for Mac and Linux players) and those not in use. Here's a short list of all the changes:
To rename (everybody):
pics/people/dominopresley/sandrag1.gif --> pics/people/dominopresley/sandrag01.gif
pics/people/laurenp/bjg1.gif --> pics/people/laurenp/bjg01.gif
To rename (Linux and Mac):
pics/location/lab.JPG --> pics/location/lab.jpg
pics/locicon/lab.JPG --> pics/locicon/lab.jpg
pics/locicon/megan.JPG --> pics/locicon/megan.jpg
pics/people/brianabanks/Alison5.jpg --> pics/people/brianabanks/alison5.jpg
pics/people/dakota/Anna1.jpg --> pics/people/dakota/anna1.jpg
pics/people/Hitomi/ --> pics/people/hitomi/
pics/people/lisaann/Kara.jpg --> pics/people/lisaann/kara.jpg
pics/people/objects/plc.JPG --> pics/people/obects/plc.jpg
pics/people/siri/Siri.jpg --> pics/people/siri/siri.jpg
pics/portrait/Alexis.jpg --> pics/portrait/alexis.jpg
pics/portrait/Dakota.jpg --> pics/portrait/dakota.jpg
pics/portrait/Hitomi.jpg --> pics/portrait/hitomi.jpg
pics/portrait/Kara.jpg --> pics/portrait/kara.jpg
pics/portrait/Lily.jpg --> pics/portrait/lily.jpg
pics/portrait/Lisa.jpg --> pics/portrait/lisa.jpg
pics/portrait/Mia.jpg --> pics/portrait/mia.jpg
Missing:
pics/portrait/mfiggs.jpg
Unused: see attached file, they are too many to list them here. All together it's about 0.5 GB, so it may be a good idea to remove them or use them in future releases. Most of them can already be integrated into the game as random alternatives to other scenes, but since I didn't know what the author's intension are about them, I didn't insert them in the game.
About the files that need renaming: it's not really necessary to rename the ones marked for Mac and Linux for Windows users, but I suggest the author renames them in future releases, so that we don't have to. And it will be useful if you ever plan to have an online version one day, since most of the servers are Linux-based and require the correct capitalization or won't find the image.
I have to say I wasn't able to test my version. If anyone wants to look for bugs I may have accidentally inserted, I'll be happy to correct them.
About the map issue, I'm not really sure in which map it happens, but I can say in the first one I see the links where they should be. I'm using a 24' screen, 1920x1080. I wanted to integrate the map corrections, but I changed my mind once I saw it works perfectly.
That's all, and probably too much to read.
Grazie per il tuo ottimo lavoro,
@Rmaximus!