Alright, so I'll start with the positive:
This game looks beautiful. Absolutely top notch on that score.
The basic idea of the MC being on the prowl for a harem of submissive slaves that he can pimp out to create an income is a solid base for an incredible smut game. TinWoodman is sitting on a fucking goldmine with this game if he can get it on track. Much more has been done with much less in this genre.
Now the disclaimer:
A host of problems with this game - hopefully - orbit around the fact that English is a second language to him. At points, the dialogue is just incomprehensible, but you get that with non-native speakers (English, as a language, is a bizarre mishmash of a bunch of other languages and makes little internal sense). You get that in spades if you're using software for the translation.
And now the negatives:
Even allowing for the language barrier, the progression of relationships within the game makes no sense. I mean, it doesn't have to make sense IRL, but it needs to make sense within the fiction of the game. It currently doesn't. Even supposing that the MC is locating submissive chicks with a deep need to be dominated, it just doesn't feel right.
The MC constantly loses control of his emotions. This is actually a real red flag for someone who has no business being a dom. The entire point of the dom/sub relationship is the dom is in control. Not out of control. To be fair though, this may be a case where the disclaimer applies: TinWoodsman simply doesn't understand that there is a difference between calling someone a "Naughty, naughty girl." and screaming, "FUCKING SLUT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!" at them.
Dude. There's a difference.
And of course, the problem that this doesn't actually appear to be a game. There's really no way to lose, none of the "decisions" the player makes have any consequences. There's no alternate routes to be explored; just spam the "next day" button until you have enough cash to select the only option available then select it. You could completely cut out the whole pseudo-economic "game" bit and just have a visual novel.
The constructive suggestion:
Look up a guy going by the name "Nimja". Not a mispelling, he goes by "Nimja". He's a hypnodom who - IMHO of course - has the voice your MC should have. Calm. Sure of himself. Deeply, deeply kinky. Check it out.
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