100% needs the NTR tag. Christina is MC's girlfriend in all but name that cheats on him with two dudes at the same time and MC is gutted by it. She even sees him and doesn't care enough to stop. You do not get more textbook NTR than that.
At some point there is a timeskip. Anna goes from being a model in a relationship with black guy Steve, to getting her heart broken, gaining weight and working in a bar. This is NOT clear on first reading and things like that need to be clearly explained to avoid confusion.
There are a number of spelling and grammar errors, as well as name mix ups (Steve = Stive; Anna = Amanda, Anya)
Renders of chubby Anna are pretty good, though! MC does, however, have the smallest cock in the game if that matters to you.
MC then moves to another city (?) and moves in with Kate, his mother's brother's 4th wife, and Dana, who is MC's actual cousin (his uncle's daughter). So for Anna and Dana seem to be setting up as the main LIs.
The main plot seems to revolve around making MC a better man so that he can help his uncle with his business.
Unavoidable sex scene between MC's Uncle and Kate where MC is not present, so that's a hit to immersion players. Also Kate is being billed as a main antagonist working with someone else to sabotage her husband.
All in all, this needs quite a bit of polishing before it'll be considered good. The basic story of a luckless virgin who gets taken under the wing of a successful relative in order to turn him into an alpha man is a decent enough plot, but the writing and pacing need to be shored up a lot.
Good luck to the Dev.
