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Fixed! Left "Mghh~! Fuck!" and "I can't hold back any longer!" as is. Anything with "moaning", like "Mghh~" always get verbalized (people generally don't think sex sounds). Similar with the last line, Morty can't help himself, he has to tell the world when he cums!Day 29: Space Mold
The following lines are all missing the (Thoughts) tag.
- "It's stretching me so much, it feels incredible!"
- "My body is responding to every small movement."
- "I can't hold my moans back."
- "At this rate I'll end up finishing before him."
- "She's so tight! I don't know how long I can last like this."
- "Mghh~! Fuck!"
- "I can't hold back any longer!"
- "I have a condom on so I don't need to pull out!"
- "I'm not wearing a condom, what should I do?"
- "She said I should pull out, but what should I do?!"
Fixed! Stupid fucking "your/you're"! I should just switch them all to "yor" for all of them, that certainly won't annoy anyone Usually I double check them, but I was mostly listening to this with the built in text to speech during review, and they sound the same.Day 39: Vindication
- "You're turn! Ask me something!" should be "Your turn! Ask me something!"
- "If there is a hot chick involved, your gonna get to have sex with her!" should be "If there is a hot chick involved, you're gonna get to have sex with her!"
- "S-so, what's going on? W-whats the emergency?" should be "S-so, what's going on? W-what's the emergency?"
Meant to include it and it just got lost in the shuffle. Have put in a new small back and forth about Planetina.Suggestion: When Morty says "She's a superhero there's no way she'd let me-" I think Morticia should mention how he fucked Planetina.
Fixed!Day 39: Ninja Skills
- "Damn Katanas tits looked so nice and perky." should be "Damn Katana's tits looked so nice and perky."
Still considering doing a deeper dive into part 6 (or not, (I don't know how many people care about how the sausage is made)), but for that moment in particular, it used to be Incest Morty getting shot on stage, mainly in service to a gag. Part 6 went through a lot of iterations, and while there is always room for improvement, I think it came out fine. I am glad to not be working on it anymore and can re- WHAT?! I have to work on Part 7 now... fuck...The line about incest morty's life getting spared really got me in particular.
No spoilersAlso, Morty and Space Beth better actually get that talk after mentioning it so many times.
Thank you again for the corrections!