By porn game standards, the story is pretty original, lots of possibilities by not being constrained to a few locations and the positive father figure and good friends are always a win in my book.
The writing, however, leaves a lot to be desired, I see bad punctuation and grammar at places, over-reliance on narration instead of dialogues and overall, just too much happening too fast. That's especially noticeable with the side characters that don't even get to talk or interact and instead just are have their actions told by the MC before moving on.
The option to name people also felt out of place considering they all have names and relationships pre-established.
The UI also needs work, loose words across the screen don't work at all, at places it's not even possible to read because there's a white font on white BG, you need proper buttons or least add effects (shadow, stroke, maybe a gradient) to add more contrast in different colors of background.