First of all,good update,as Toshi became my nr1 and she got a route as well.I'll say other 3 things.
1.A typo,when the giant slime attack again-there is an incomplete talk with Hannah. It should be, 'I dont want to be rude to you,but I'll be if I have to' -it misses 1 or 2 words,it's BE/WILL BE, it goes sluggish in 'but I if I have to'.
2.A possible misunderstanding,in a Beren with MC chat.It goes like 'no one needs to do anything,much less like me'.I took it for a long time like-much less like me(like I do things, in my way of doing things),but the correct logic is,most likely>much less like me(much less favore me,view me in a positive light).
So yeah,another wording could be helpful,just saying, the LIKE word could be replaced maybe,'much less like I do things' vs. 'much less favore me'.
3.The most important-a suggestion for future updates.It should be exclusive to a full harem route,as it would make sense and be more interesting.
A mini-event,in the form of a meeting,where all the girls gather and ask the MC who are his favorite girls.Should be 3 girls or less-for me it would be Toshi,Jemma and maybe Beren,and all the girls should be available-so no more new girls to appear,but it could be managed even if more girls would appear in future updates,and Koriso&Kym would be missing but maybe the girls would be aware of their existence.Kinda like a weekly competition maybe,with updated top3 and the lucky 3 to have more sex and/or more privileges,it could work nice as well not like a 1-time event but like a regular meeting,with various reactions,from cheerful up to sad/dissapointed for not being in the tops.
And a word of advice regarding Toshi>it's quite clear her hands are greyish-darkish so no gloves in there,since her route is now available and it's quite logic the sex will come as well,I'd like to see a big portion,if not all her body,in that alluring greyish color,privates included of course.Definitely not white.
P. S.A miswording in the walkthrough mod-instead of being 'stops Tahlia route' it goes for 'stops Kym route', so totally wrong and no sense-if you dont go to Tahlia.I went yes,I may have my favs but I'm 100% for a full harem adventure.