VN Ren'Py Secret Island [v0.11] [NocturnalDev]

alphari · Jan 3, 2024

Heyo, I'm assuming English isn't your first language? I don't mean that it's particularly bad, but one very common mistake non-native speakers make is using contractions at the end of sentences. It's not 100% universally forbidden, but if you play it safe and make sure your sentences don't end in contractions, you'll avoid the biggest thing that sounds unnatural in your writing at the moment.

("Will you be there tomorrow?" "Yes, I'll." -> "Yes, I will." OR "Yes, I'll be there." etc.)

NocturnalDev · Jan 3, 2024

alphari said:
Heyo, I'm assuming English isn't your first language? I don't mean that it's particularly bad, but one very common mistake non-native speakers make is using contractions at the end of sentences. It's not 100% universally forbidden, but if you play it safe and make sure your sentences don't end in contractions, you'll avoid the biggest thing that sounds unnatural in your writing at the moment.

("Will you be there tomorrow?" "Yes, I'll." -> "Yes, I will." OR "Yes, I'll be there." etc.)

Thanks for the feedback.
I'll put that on my spellcheck/grammar check list.

TigerWolfe · Jan 3, 2024

NocturnalDev said:
Thanks for the feedback.
I'll put that on my spellcheck/grammar check list.

It's one of those weird rules we don't even get taught, unless you're in like collegiate level English or linguistics classes, but that we all just kinda pickup subconsciously growing up using the language. Like the order of adjectives, or order force as it's called.

NocturnalDev · Jan 3, 2024

TigerWolfe said:
It's one of those weird rules we don't even get taught, unless you're in like collegiate level English or linguistics classes, but that we all just kinda pickup subconsciously growing up using the language. Like the order of adjectives, or order force as it's called.

Yeah, I get it. There is something like that for the order you use adjectives.
I lived in an English-speaking country for some time to get my degree, but it wasn't in linguistics (obviously). Even then, there are things I didn't pick up living there.

TigerWolfe · Jan 3, 2024

NocturnalDev said:
Yeah, I get it. There is something like that for the order you use adjectives.
I lived in an English-speaking country for some time to get my degree, but it wasn't in linguistics (obviously). Even then, there are things I didn't pick up living there.

I'd never dream of trying to write a story in my second language, so you're much braver than I am.

ghostch15 · Jan 25, 2024

first off i enjoy this game, so i'm just offering some feedback not complaining .. but the first sex scene with mc and laura in the storage room, she says "yes. i'm sensible but you can keep doing it" sensible should be replaced with sensitive. and the narration in the same scene as well uses sensible instead of sensitive

NocturnalDev · Jan 26, 2024

ghostch15 said:
first off i enjoy this game, so i'm just offering some feedback not complaining .. but the first sex scene with mc and laura in the storage room, she says "yes. i'm sensible but you can keep doing it" sensible should be replaced with sensitive. and the narration in the same scene as well uses sensible instead of sensitive

Thanks for the feedback, I appreciate it.
Doesn't matter how many checks we do, these things always escape. No problem, fixed.

tacosnap123 · Jan 28, 2024

so for the update just a tiny thing i noticed when

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also intrestng update nice bit of bonding for everyone

NocturnalDev · Jan 28, 2024

tacosnap123 said:
so for the update just a tiny thing i noticed when

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also intrestng update nice bit of bonding for everyone

Hey, thanks for reporting that. I'll fix it. Well spotted.

Danv · Jan 28, 2024

my english suck, but those two lines really don't sound right, first line probably need some rephrasing and second missing some words

mc "It has a minimum output. So, we shouldn't be able to use it just between us."
mc "I plan to let this thing with the casino gang, in exchange they will let it power the whole city."

NocturnalDev · Jan 28, 2024

Danv said:
my english suck, but those two lines really don't sound right, first line probably need some rephrasing and second missing some words

mc "It has a minimum output. So, we shouldn't be able to use it just between us."
mc "I plan to let this thing with the casino gang, in exchange they will let it power the whole city."

Thanks, I'll check those.

Bob69 · Jan 28, 2024

Secret Island [v0.6.8] [NocturnalDev] - Compressed

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