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Bro if u have a android link for Max's life and lucky mark????
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Ha, that's true what you told your brothers. And I'm sure there will be something similar in the future to mine.ok, I believe you.
I used to tell my little brothers when we were kids and something really unlikely happened : "the chances of something unlikely happening at one point or another a very likely"
oh, and here's the two banners so you get a quick view :
Haha, feel free to take it. I learned my lesson.I think this could have work with two MCs. Switching between the two or one update we follow one twin and the next the other. Shame I liked the idea. I might have to steal it(joking btw)
It's mentioned in the story a few times how the MC remained close with all the girls, and the story even starts out with a phone call with Norah, so I'm sorry you didn't feel the closeness. And when the MC is shown at the house, it's 2 weeks and he even goes into detail of all the problems he's seen while he's there. That's why he has seen them fight 5 times in those 2 weeks.
I get what you did, though the story is meant for brother, sister, mom, etc. Only have to define relationships because of silly Patreon.I accidentally hit enter as I was originally writing that post so I edited and finished my post after your quote.
I realize that was your intention, but for fun I tried something different since it didn't mention the two girls were related.
I did uncle for eldest male, cousin for youngest, sister for the 23 year old so MC is her brother, and aunt as Norah. Bimbo was bimbo. The MC is the son of the twin that went missing,
Ah, I had tweaked her age and made her too young. My apologies! Norah did have them young though and dad was born rich, so no Mcdonalds Lol. Thanks for pointing that outSuperWriter
Hey can you change Nora's age little bit. She's 36 and oldest daughter is 23 so she got her at age 13 and that most likely means she got pregnant at age 12. What made me think was the “landlord” also a child or a pedophile. If he was a kid back then, then I find it hard to believe that now he run a successful company. When the youngest daughter is 19 that means they got 4 children before they turn 18. In that case I think he has to drop out school to work mcdonalds or something to support his family, there is no time to study and build a company. And if he was not a minor then, he should be in jail.
So if you could make Norah 42 or something that would be much better, unless you have a story behind that she is 36.
Lol Glad you like the new version
I just checked the links and they seem to be ok. Can you try again?
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Lucky mark unity game so no android port (only Dev make I think)
Max life I don't know
https://f95zone.to/threads/the66s-android-port-requests.18259/
Go request , maybe you got a solution.
I have a question i apologies in advance if already mentioned in the game.
but how old is Autumn ?
but how old is Autumn ?
She was in the first version 18 and i think she has the same age in the newer version too
Zoe, at breakfast, is still referring to the MC as her relationship to him. She keeps calling the MC her sister.
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The MC's picture doesn't show up at the beginning. It only asks to me to give him a name. If I named him brother, wouldn't everyone, including the mother and father, call him that?
It might be an issue with the android port, I'll try it on my pc when I get home from work.
not when you can give the mc his name.When you can wrote for the girls itself.It should be.First mc name.Second : dad. 3: sister. 4: brother. 5: stepmom. 6:mom. 7:mom. 8:aunt. 9: Family
That was the problem. I didn't notice with Zoe it asked a different question. I put sister in there.
Thanks
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I'll wait for it! And I will replay the game before leaving a review.
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hmmm saw a list of your books. personally im interested if "The Ward" might get a vn? seemed interesting cuz every other vn where MC meets his daughter they're pretty happy/naive about it so seeing someone angry would be new. (for me at least). also "Why are you Running"
Aside from that i like the game so far
Aside from that i like the game so far
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So I played through the reworked, non twin version by request.
Here's my take: It works well. The plot was a little easy to see, though there are few flaws in the delivery that I'll get to. The opening joke about the previous twin storyline is a nice little poke, but eventually it's not going to make sense to anyone.
Characters:
Mom: She's got a nice little southern twist to her, but don't make her seem like too much of an idiot. She's also a little too flirty with her own son, maybe?
Elder Sister: I love how serious of a character she is without coming across as the bitchy one. She definitely seems like the most normal person in the story. I look forward to a lot more scenes with her.
Middle Sister: Not really a lot of character interaction with her. Her sense of humor and overacting come through, but since most of her time is spent clutching the porcelain throne and making veiled sexual comments, her character seems a little 2D. I hope there is more to her than "Drunk Party Girl".
Younger sister: Closet Lesbian or Bisexual, who can tell right now. Though if I had to guess, when you ask her how kissing a girl is compared to kissing a boy and she gets flustered, it's because she's never kissed a boy before. So if that's true, I can see what the plot line will be like with her. "Teaching moments" and such. It should also be noted that you never actually introduce her as a sister until she's talking to him in the woods. As I sat there watching them fight in front of the mother I had questions if she was some childhood friend of his.
Step Mom: Gold Digging Cunt. No other factors shown. I can only hope you can find some way to blackmail her later to get her to shut the fuck up.
Dad: Power hungry jackass. No other factors shown.
So far it's not bad for a first release. The story could become compelling so long as it doesn't just become another "I have to fuck all of them." story without any outside plot.
Here's my take: It works well. The plot was a little easy to see, though there are few flaws in the delivery that I'll get to. The opening joke about the previous twin storyline is a nice little poke, but eventually it's not going to make sense to anyone.
Characters:
Mom: She's got a nice little southern twist to her, but don't make her seem like too much of an idiot. She's also a little too flirty with her own son, maybe?
Elder Sister: I love how serious of a character she is without coming across as the bitchy one. She definitely seems like the most normal person in the story. I look forward to a lot more scenes with her.
Middle Sister: Not really a lot of character interaction with her. Her sense of humor and overacting come through, but since most of her time is spent clutching the porcelain throne and making veiled sexual comments, her character seems a little 2D. I hope there is more to her than "Drunk Party Girl".
Younger sister: Closet Lesbian or Bisexual, who can tell right now. Though if I had to guess, when you ask her how kissing a girl is compared to kissing a boy and she gets flustered, it's because she's never kissed a boy before. So if that's true, I can see what the plot line will be like with her. "Teaching moments" and such. It should also be noted that you never actually introduce her as a sister until she's talking to him in the woods. As I sat there watching them fight in front of the mother I had questions if she was some childhood friend of his.
Step Mom: Gold Digging Cunt. No other factors shown. I can only hope you can find some way to blackmail her later to get her to shut the fuck up.
Dad: Power hungry jackass. No other factors shown.
So far it's not bad for a first release. The story could become compelling so long as it doesn't just become another "I have to fuck all of them." story without any outside plot.
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SuperWriter
Going for a "define your own relation with the characters", why not (even if, see below). But please, can MC's roommates/sisters stop using the same variable than him ?
When it's "roommate" it works, even if sentences like, "I don't know how I feel about my own roommate saying that [...]" make few sense. But at least they make more sense than, "I don't know how I feel about my own sister saying that [...]", when the said "sister" is the male MC !
There's many ways to bypass Patreon ban, but this one never failed to prove that it's the worst.
Going for a "define your own relation with the characters", why not (even if, see below). But please, can MC's roommates/sisters stop using the same variable than him ?
When it's "roommate" it works, even if sentences like, "I don't know how I feel about my own roommate saying that [...]" make few sense. But at least they make more sense than, "I don't know how I feel about my own sister saying that [...]", when the said "sister" is the male MC !
There's many ways to bypass Patreon ban, but this one never failed to prove that it's the worst.
I think you made the same mistake as the guy on page 7 : when the game asks for the relationships, for one girl it says "who is she to the mc ?" or for the other "who is the mc to her ?". So for the 1st you need to answer sister, and for the 2nd, brother.
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Niennunb is right. Sorry about the confusion and thanks for explaining