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HypnoKitten

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Feb 14, 2018
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Gave it a quick try... I would suggest maybe looking more into the background vs letters, it is very hard to read anything without selecting around it.
The sis part where she's asking you about what's up also seems to have left-over text at the top from a previous draft?
And yea, the clicking around, especially w/ buttons being so far apart, and without much happening.. I'd try to catch attention and interest way sooner in the story
 

Trasher2018

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Aug 21, 2018
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Ok. Right from the start - pls change the background color. White on pink? In general most of the text is hard to read.
Then, why are the links spaced out .. you always have to scroll for no reason.

Thats not great for a more or less pure text game.
And maybe add nameplates so that it easier to understand who is talking.

I wish you good look.
 

Content_Consumer

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Dec 24, 2019
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As a person trying to learn QSP and Twine. I wish you all the best in your development journey.
I aspire to make a game as well but never got to it.

Maybe its probably because I would have to put my time to watch so much p***.
Just to fit some scenes into the narrative.
Or even do some background mathematics/calculation for the simulations.
But who knows maybe someday I'll get to it.
Please don't learn QSP.
It's a horrible interface.
Just stick to sugarcube twine.
 

OrgansMissing

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Dec 3, 2022
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I agree heartily on your intention. Interested in seeing where you go with it and seeing your skill with twine improve.

... but yeah you gotta give me a dark mode or something, man, I cannot handle the pink, my eyes are shit and this looks awful and is barely legible to me. I greatly prefer the typical dark gray and black with white text of these HTML games. Pink and white text is like, the worst combination in my eyes. White and black text is bad enough. The blue links are also hard to read.

Early bug I've noticed is your sister failing to read your present gender correctly.
 
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fetishgirl

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Jan 13, 2019
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Played it. Get's way too repetitive for me, and after seeing latest changelog it's on my ignore list now.
Agree with this what is there is good but its an old game at this point been around years and you can't even have a proper relationship with any character in the game. Like adding the ability to watch movies instead of relationship progression is just stupid. I would suggest the QSP game Clean slate instead it also has cheats to make the game less grindy. The actually plot doesn't progress and there is no actual progression in the game. Also most of the interesting content is in the mods for the game.
 

CatsFootIronClaw

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Jul 3, 2019
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Yo, my bad everyone. Growing pains of a new dev I guess. V0.0.2 is out, with better readability and fewer gaps between all the links. Bear with me, I will make this a playable game!
 
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SporkWitch

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Jul 13, 2019
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The current download links go to a single screen of an admittedly attractive woman, one button for bedroom. On the next screen, you have "computer" and "sleep"; computer has no options, just return to bedroom, and sleep just increments the day. Not even a proof of concept, but from the other messages in thread, it sounds like just a mistake with updating the links and the update was a hotfix, NOT a complete download. Tried both pixeldrain and mediafire, both have same issue.
 

DrPoods

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The current download links go to a single screen of an admittedly attractive woman, one button for bedroom. On the next screen, you have "computer" and "sleep"; computer has no options, just return to bedroom, and sleep just increments the day. Not even a proof of concept, but from the other messages in thread, it sounds like just a mistake with updating the links and the update was a hotfix, NOT a complete download. Tried both pixeldrain and mediafire, both have same issue.
Same here
 
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Laughingfox

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Apr 2, 2017
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Alrighty! Another potential Gender Bender romp. Lessee, you want honesty, and thus honesty ye shall have.

First off, it's wonderful that you're giving creating a game a go, to begin. It's not easy by any stretch. You seem keen on retaining a bit of light humor and fun to the overall vibe, and that's wonderful.

And now to nitpick things in no particular order.

First off, if the Asian gal is supposed to represent our protagonist that's been gender bent, that seems way shorter than 5'6". And not that it's a huge matter, but the sister is clearly a blonde, so if that's indeed our pov, then it means for a mixed household or adoption.

... Which isn't the worst thing, as there are legion beautiful Asian adult actresses and such that could be the mom, for example, which would be another way for your game to stand out from the pack.

If you go 'submissive' dealing with the sister, you have this longish scene of coming clean just for her to use you, and then tell you to get your boyfriend to buy you nicer clothes. What. Is this mixing the scenario as a 'dom' where you are pretending to be the girlfriend, or something?

The interactions with the best friend seem like a fun gateway into potential scenes, which makes absorbing the gem almost unfortunate if that's the end of Rory's misadventures.

One style or element for this sort of setting (A gender bender game), while tricky to write and is thus sadly, terribly, horribly absent most of the while is:

The best friend angle where *both* characters end up changed, and dealing with the world as they mess around. If you are establishing the logic that the protagonist can shift between male, female, or in even in between (the first change) along with the caveat that the world is now behaving with what is essentially porn logic, and the protagonist and / or friends are at the center of it, then my not so humble suggestion is roll with it.

Maybe give yourself some wiggle room or plot armor that when things get frisky there is a potential out or a way to mess with others memories to a point. Especially if the appearance of the MC is 'fixed' as they are exploring their sexuality.

But for example. Let's say the protagonist can shift, and using the power of the gem that has merged with them, they can change up their best friendo too, because that's way more fun. Maybe just for a little while at a time, but it grows longer and more stable the more you do it (and they enjoy it). They lamented that the change was based off of lust, but clearly the answer is to get them sexed up. Or maybe it's easier to change them because they also were 'attuned' to it early on with the experiments.

Anyway. Why not play with a setting where both characters, discovering they are now a pair of knock out beauties, are still very much horny lizard brained young adults and start doing everything they 'think' a duo of sexy gals should do, often with hilarious or unfortunate results? (Because again, porn logic.) Dressing up in slutty outfits "paying" for them or suggesting a discount, going to clubs and parties without waiting in line (only to end up needing to flash their tits or suck the doorman off), pizza gets delivered only for it to be by a AAA hottie or hunk, yada yada. Have them attend school, but events constantly conspire to get one or both of them banged by the school and faculty.

Maybe make some sort of impressive cash goal, where the protagonist, friend, or even the sister (or all of the above) decide to break out into streaming or whatever to raise the money necessary. Really, the sky is the limit.

Last little bit, as I see you have a dom sub split. Why not have an option where you come clean to the sister, but you don't act like a delicate little flower? Like, other you (the female one) seemed pretty happy and confident. The (somewhat) tired trope of 'oh no, don't tell anybody, I'll do anything you want' is fine, but why have a alternative of simply saying something along the lines of "... There's no way in hell you'd do that, I know for a fact you'd never hurt me. If you wanna bang, just say so, 'sis'."

So, sister starts getting lewd, and the PC just rolls with it, as stupid a plan as that might seem. Hormones are stronk. You meet the siblings charge head on, and before they know it, both 'sisters' are lost in a tangle of fingers, tongues and whatnot. Sister mutters you may have just ruined her on other girls.

Another story beat that seems to be rarely done is the protagonist just *enjoying themselves* in this sort of game. Why not have the sister offer to show her the ropes on how to girl (tm), often with lewd or surprising results?

But in the end of the day, these are just suggestions. Remember to have fun, and if you can, explore whatever gets your motor running, yeah? That tends to be where the best inspiration is laying dormant. Best of luck!
 
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Oliz82

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Hello.

The summary made me come. And the result is too short to really assess it.

The worldbuilding is limited.
The characters are very few and different.
The plot could be interesting.
The photos are well chosen.

After an accident, the protagonist encounter his other part and can change gender at will.
The flow of events with Rory seems correct, though maybe repetitive. There's not much to do outside the transformation (watching TV is just for passing time and working isn't better since money has no use yet, the computer isn't even implemented). Being locked into dom or sub content is a little sadening (I would prefer playing as a switch but I understand it's difficult to track every possibilities).
The characters are fine but they could be described better.
The artistic side is correct. Different colors for each character. Depending on what you want your game to be, there's not enough images of actions, locations, portraits, items. The pink font is difficult on the eyes but you said you've fixed it with the patch (and green is clearly better).

Overall, it could be a good game depending on what you include.

Do you intend to go as far as including gay content? I just ask because I'm always wondering in that type of game how the experience in a female body could influence the male one (is he disgusted, curious, intrigued). It could be the perfect scenario to have a bi path.

An error during the third meeting with the best friend :
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Also that [FIX THIS] is strange.
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The fixed version is actually unplayable (with a previous save, it works though, depending at what point it has been made).

Good continuation.
 

Panonon

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More like non-existent. Every TF game around here is about a doormat sissy that bends over for anything that moves and unable to even properly speak.
Always wanted to play some transformation game where mc is the one who decides what to do.
I've got hope for this one, let's see where it goes.
I personally like the psychological aspect of it. I like the resistance and how it messes with the protagonists head.

That's what I attempted to do in my own game for the gender-bent scenario. I don't claim to be perfect at it, it's my first time writing gender bender. But I have enjoyed exploring the psychological parts.

But I think when it comes to smut games, people are after the NSFW scenes so devs (including myself) focus on giving players what they want right away. Something I hope to do better if I do another gender bent game.


Side note, is this shapeshifter game supposed to start off in the middle or did I download a wrong file? It seems like I started the game skipping all the introductory parts.

Edit:
CatsFootIronClaw You accidentally moved the start button. Fixed it for you. Attached.
 
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crystal64

Newbie
Mar 19, 2019
18
15
just edit this part to start the game at the right place using notepad++ or any other pad:


<tw-storydata name="Untitled GB Game" startnode="31" creator="Twine" creator-version="2.8.1" format="SugarCube" format-version="2.36.1" ifid="BEAD9146-5573-44E0-A9A6-A09E8E02AE74" options="" tags="" zoom="0.6" hidden><style role="stylesheet" id="twine-user-stylesheet" type="text/twine-css">html {


change the startnode to be 2, so it would be:

<tw-storydata name="Untitled GB Game" startnode="2" creator="Twine" creator-version="2.8.1" format="SugarCube" format-version="2.36.1" ifid="BEAD9146-5573-44E0-A9A6-A09E8E02AE74" options="" tags="" zoom="0.6" hidden><style role="stylesheet" id="twine-user-stylesheet" type="text/twine-css">html {
 

babaicheg

Newbie
Mar 7, 2019
30
26
Game start. Only 1 button available - Bedroom. Inside bedroom 2 buttons available: Computer and Sleep until morning. Clicking Computer goes into blank screen and Bedroom button only. Clicking Sleep until morning adds one text row: You have a school today. No more buttons. Thats all. What am I doing wrong?
 
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