VN Ren'Py Shattered Dreams: Redemption [v0.3] [Nebula Dreams]

[Nebula Dreams]

-Did MC and Mina work together along with Naomi, it is brought up a couple times, but never actually happened, so did it happen offscreen, are all the characters lying, or is it a possible error. Don't know if I should add this to my errors list, cause its confusing, so an explanation could come in handy.

If you're referring to this line: "I worked with him the other day when I was with Naomi. He was very responsive and professional." during Mina's request to Finlay to recruit the MC — it's not a mistake, Mina is simply lying to Finlay to avoid revealing that it was actually the MC who helped her escape the dinner with Robert.

As for Mina and the MC working with Naomi afterwards, yes — Naomi is part of Mina's staff (she has an assistant (MC), a stylist (Naomi), etc...). It's just not shown and happens off-screen.

And as Milton perfectly pointed out, her stage name is Mina, but her real first name is Min-hee.

Feel free to DM me the errors you find

 

[MagicMan753]

If you're referring to this line: "I worked with him the other day when I was with Naomi. He was very responsive and professional." during Mina's request to Finlay to recruit the MC — it's not a mistake, Mina is simply lying to Finlay to avoid revealing that it was actually the MC who helped her escape the dinner with Robert.

As for Mina and the MC working with Naomi afterwards, yes — Naomi is part of Mina's staff (she has an assistant (MC), a stylist (Naomi), etc...). It's just not shown and happens off-screen.

And as Milton perfectly pointed out, her stage name is Mina, but her real first name is Min-hee.

Feel free to DM me the errors you find

Yeah that helps, but there was also the line when we were talking to Lena while eating, and we say we worked on a topic together and she like my work, was that also a lie also? cause I thought she was lying the first time, but then this line came up too.

Also in the same convo with Finlay, she said we met last year(Just like she told Robert), and when telling Finaly, she said that wasn't a lie, about the year, but a year hasn't passed, only a month so figured I would ask about this one too, if it was a lie too, so I can decide whether to remove that one from the word document.

Thanks for the answers and the answers to these too.

And yeah I will shoot you a dm with errors, I am putting together a doc, Not sure if I should send all the errors in one huge go, or make it more maneagable for you and send it in a couple waves, I pretty much have ch.1 and probably parts of 2 done(there was no intro to ch.2 but am sure I crossed into it), but would you rather it all in one, or sending it in a couple waves?

 

[Nebula Dreams]

Yeah that helps, but there was also the line when we were talking to Lena while eating, and we say we worked on a topic together and she like my work, was that also a lie also? cause I thought she was lying the first time, but then this line came up too.

Also in the same convo with Finlay, she said we met last year(Just like she told Robert), and when telling Finaly, she said that wasn't a lie, about the year, but a year hasn't passed, only a month so figured I would ask about this one too, if it was a lie too, so I can decide whether to remove that one from the word document.

Characters don’t always tell the truth. When the MC tells Lena that Mina wanted to recruit him because they had worked together, he’s just lying to avoid revealing the real story of how they met (at the restaurant), as Mina asked him not to tell anyone.

Same for Mina — she says she met the MC a year ago to Finlay because that’s the version she gave to Robert, so she sticks to that story with Finlay to avoid raising any suspicion (as shown in the scenes, it was Finlay who arranged the meeting between Mina and Robert, so Mina knows that if she changes her story, Finlay will notice).

You can include points in the document if you think there’s an inconsistency, but if I know for sure there isn’t, I just won’t take it into account.
Feel free to send all the errors in one big file — I don’t mind if that’s easier for you.

 

[trauts]

don't mean to nit pick, but if i'm not mistaken, she the owner of the apartment (a.k.a. flat) and she is renting out the rooms, so that would make her landlady, not landlord

 

[MiltonPowers]

don't mean to nit pick, but if i'm not mistaken, she the owner of the apartment (a.k.a. flat) and she is renting out the rooms, so that would make her landlady, not landlord
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Landlord is actually a generic term that refers to the person renting out the property regardless of whether they are male or female. You can use landlady to refer a female, but in AVNs it's probably best not to give the wrong impression.

 

[AlexMpog]

Landlord is actually a generic term that refers to the person renting out the property regardless of whether they are male or female. You can use landlady to refer a female, but in AVNs it's probably best not to give the wrong impression.

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Yeah, I already can see some players be like - "there is a landlady here, why is an incest tag missing?", "can somebody make an ipatch?"

 

[Tomy75]

I thought the same of Lena in Episode 1, but I did a path for her anyway and she really started to grow on me and stop being so annoying during Episode 2 as she becomes more open with MC. She's still #5 for me, but she became much more likable for me during Episode 2.

Man, I tried, I really tried, I started a playthrough without rejecting her but she’s even more unbearable in 0.3 than before, thinking she’s irresistible and can get whatever she wants with her body, she acts like a slut who claims herself that she’s not interested in a relationship, she’s clearly playing with the MC like he’s her new toy, she even says that the only way to get to know her better is by playing her sexual games. It’s funny that she thinks she’s the most attractive girl in the world when she is, to me, one of the less attractive girls in this game. I don’t know what the endgame is with her, will she ever change? Is she hiding her true personality behind a shell? Anyway, I tried but I gave up one more time, I rejected her when she said that MC should stop here if he doesn’t want to play her little games.

 

[MiltonPowers]

Yeah, I already can see some players be like - "there is a landlady here, why is an incest tag missing?", "can somebody make an ipatch?"

What? I have to give my landlady money for rent?

 

[MiltonPowers]

Man, I tried, I really tried, I started a playthrough without rejecting her but she’s even more unbearable in 0.3 than before, thinking she’s irresistible and can get whatever she wants with her body, she acts like a slut who claims herself that she’s not interested in a relationship, she’s clearly playing with the MC like he’s her new toy, she even says that the only way to get to know her better is by playing her sexual games. It’s funny that she thinks she’s the most attractive girl in the world when she is, to me, one of the less attractive girls in this game. I don’t know what the endgame is with her, will she ever change? Is she hiding her true personality behind a shell? Anyway, I tried but I gave up one more time, I rejected her when she said that MC should stop here if he doesn’t want to play her little games.

I get that, she is #5 for me. Her line - "aren't you lucky someone like me is touching you" made me want to punch her. LOL. I don't like that type of girl, but lots of people do. Luckily for me, there's 4 other girls that I think are great.

 

[trauts]

Landlord is actually a generic term that refers to the person renting out the property regardless of whether they are male or female. You can use landlady to refer a female, but in AVNs it's probably best not to give the wrong impression.

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what should you be called? don't know, don't care. in english (cambridge dictionary), you know police women, police men, firemen, firewomen, being all pc maybe we should just go with landowner?

 

[PickerLewd]

I get that, she is #5 for me. Her line - "aren't you lucky someone like me is touching you" made me want to punch her. LOL. I don't like that type of girl, but lots of people do. Luckily for me, there's 4 other girls that I think are great.

No femdom tag only footjob, you are safe Milton ... .

 

[MiltonPowers]

No femdom tag only footjob, you are safe Milton ... .

Thanks for looking out for me PL.

 

[Raziel_8]

I get that, she is #5 for me. Her line - "aren't you lucky someone like me is touching you" made me want to punch her. LOL. I don't like that type of girl, but lots of people do. Luckily for me, there's 4 other girls that I think are great.

I already was tired of her crap, she's not the best in looks and her personality just sucks imo.
Yeah, really wanted to give her a good slap for that coment...
What made me finally say fuck it was as she said that going on nice dates is a no, also no pussy and when then only with rubber

 

[MiltonPowers]

I already was tired of her crap, she's not the best in looks and her personality just sucks imo.
What made me finally say fuck it was as she said that going on nice dates is a no, followed by no pussy and when then only with rubber

That's right, I'd forgotten the condom's only comment. Strike Three.

 

[Nebula Dreams]

Poor Lena...

 

[Tomy75]

Poor Lena...

Well, you created a big bitch that nobody wants as a LI, deal with it

 

[Dessolos]

Lena isn't my favorite but I still like her. I dislike the FWB a little more I forget why without a fresh replay. I think might have to do with the pacing of the FWB character as I still need to get to know her a little more I forget.

( I still need to play the update)

 

[AlexMpog]

Well, you created a big bitch that nobody wants as a LI, deal with it

That's a bit much I'd say.
While I'm not a huge fan of Lena, especially after 3rd update, I don't think she is lost cause, not yet at least
It's just the beginning anyways, we'll see how it goes. Surely Lena'll gather her fanbase

 

[PickerLewd]

I dislike the FWB a little more I forget why without a fresh replay.

If you are referring to Maddison , then you are a heathen .

 

[Raziel_8]

That's a bit much I'd say.
While I'm not a huge fan of Lena, especially after 3rd update, I don't think she is lost cause, not yet at least
It's just the beginning anyways, we'll see how it goes. Surely Lena'll gather her fanbase

I mean, there are also enough who like bitchy/full on bitch LI's.
Personaly i don't particular care if she's a lost cause or not, she's my least liked of all the girls.

And i'm picky, rejecting half the LI's, even in a harem game, is pretty normal for me. I really don't see a problem if i don't like a LI, not like one needs to like every girl.

As for the dev, good update and really, don't get discouraged because some of us don't like a LI, or do a bit shit talking here