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We still have a ways to go, we're nowhere near the end of the story ;-)I hope we could "influence" both Ange and Emma in the future.
We still have a ways to go, we're nowhere near the end of the story ;-)I hope we could "influence" both Ange and Emma in the future.
"hell I'm sure I can write a better story then (sic) this"I remember playing this game but couldn't remember for the life of me what it was about. So I decided to start again, just to get me up to speed. It didn't take long to realize why I completely forgot what the story was.
The writing is terrible, hell I'm sure I can write a better story then this. It's unfortunate, because with some tweaking this game could go from average to excellent in a heartbeat. It has the right elements in place, character progression => MC needs to become the man of the house and become an adult. Has some mystery involving his father and the science he was doing. Hot lady's everywhere. I would take a different approach to the whole mindcontrol thing, it's been done numerous times and it gets old super quick. The build up between the family members needs to be slower.
For example: The science stuff the MC has to do makes him horny all the time. This is fine, however the fainting and basically making the people around him to satisfy him so he wouldn't faint again is bad.
Instead, they should notice his erections, maybe even think to themselves that he has a nice cock or something along those lines but that's it, at first. After through the actions of the MC who takes care of his friends and family and by becoming more mature, they get closer and closer to him.
The science could have alternative side effects, like for example the MC is able to tell when a woman gets aroused. That would give him the idea of pursuing his familymembers, because during one of his many erections, they got moised. Same could be done for any other character. Or being unable to lie for a period of time when he does these experiments, this could make up for some very funny interactions where characters like mom or sis would find out about his true emotions. These are just some thought on the top of my head but alrdy I feel these elements would make the game so much more in depth..
I still sorta like this game cause im a sucker for incest, but it could be sooooooo much better... Best of luck to you dev
Look im sorry I didnt mean to offend, but surely you realise the dialogue between characters isnt good. I'm only talking about the story, not the whole game. Thats why I also said it has the right elements in it, it just needs some tweaking. Not a big overhaul. Yes I know making a game is very time consuming. And if you want, I'm willing to proofread and give suggestions to you for the story, I'm not good at programming so I cant help with that. Dont even have to pay me or anything"hell I'm sure I can write a better story then (sic) this"
Be my / our guest
And make sure you let us know about your oeuvre when you're done so we can take a look and learn how it's done.
I think quite a lot of ppl (not only you, no insult intended!) do not realize how much effort goes into a game such as this.
Can it be improved upon? Yes, certainly! However this is a hobby project and if we tried to accomplish all that we would like to see included we'd almost never finish an update.
The writing is terrible, hell I'm sure I can write a better story then this.
We're all waiting for your game, genius. Opinions are fine, criticisms too, but start saying "The writing is terrible" and "I can do better" is really harsh, selfish and certainly, very umcomprobable.I would take a different approach to the whole mindcontrol thing, it's been done numerous times and it gets old super quick. The build up between the family members needs to be slower.
Is it really that harsh? Youre basically insulting me now by saying this. Do you actually feel the dialogue and story is that good that you can defend it? I understand, I came over as rude. Doesnt mean what I said isn't any less true. The writing is in fact bad, the reason I called it terrible is because it cant be that long ago that I played this game, and like I said I couldnt remember a single thing of it.We're all waiting for your game, genius. Opinions are fine, criticisms too, but start saying "The writing is terrible" and "I can do better" is really harsh, selfish and certainly, very umcomprobable.
I don't think you should ask him for help"hell I'm sure I can write a better story then (sic) this"
Ok, my apologies to the dev and who else I offended by this.
In thruth I feel some of you should grow a thicker skin. I don't feel I bashed the dev that hard, yes maybe I was rude and I couldve refrained from being arrogant. But actually the whole: "hell even I could do better than this" was an exaggeration to make a point. People took it waay to literal and I end up having to defend myself, over this.
His "apologies"Maybe I went wrong here by saying, yes I was rude but I actually think I could do better.
Wow, I feel like im trying to defend myself against a toddler. I PM'd you in which I informed you the first part of my post was being defensive and second part was being sincere. The actual apology is at the bottom of my post. Not saying its the greatest apology, IT IS STILL ONE. GET OVER IT.His "apologies"
It's a false positive. I had the same issues aswell as some other members, there's no trojan in there.Does anyone get this by their Anti Virus? I've installed at least 100 Ren Py games and this is the only one.
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ehm not sure if this will work but:can i get link for game this i cant find original link only get pach ch5 help
(Edit: Actually this response refers back to comments on earlier pages regarding the quality of English in this game.)
Still better than the ideas you had.Look im sorry I didnt mean to offend, but surely you realise the dialogue between characters isnt good
The request was for playboy44 to compress FlirtyF as well, but FlirtyF is a unity engine game. XD
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how da fak i m suppsoed to know they talk about another game ?