VN Ren'Py Abandoned Sinister Chronicle [v0.2] [Flylupus]

[flylupus1980]

does anybody know that this is second release, and this game is only renamed? :-D

Sorry for the renamed things, the HDD where the Ren'py project was crashed. Let's hope (for me) I won't happen again.

 

[laeg]

Sorry for the renamed things, the HDD where the Ren'py project was crashed. Let's hope (for me) I won't happen again.

no problem, hope that he will stay intact

 

[flylupus1980]

I played it and it has quite good content being chapter 1, the renders are not bad but there are some lighting problems in few, the sister looks hot and thats as far as the only good thing right now...saying the english is bad is an understatement cuz i almost gave up 5 mins in and i played further only cuz the story kept me intriguing at that point, the dev has an idea and story to tell which is good, but he badly needs a scriptwriter the way the scenes are structured is poor, and it does lot of bad to the game than good. For example, i could tell that the Dev wanna try to portray the MC as a "Trying to do good" kinda guy but at the same time he comes off as some kinda psychopath and emotionless asshole, there is also repetition of scenes which maybe boring, and also auto playing some scenes are too fast and frankly i would like to click to progress the scene and the white background in text is annoying transparent text box could be better...though there are some issues i dont wanna nitpick too much since its his first game and the story seems good till this point especially the love-hate relationship with the sister and the broken Kohana girl situation, i would suggest atleast getting the dialogues fixed and coherent for the next release since i think this could be good if the dev is willing to continue the project....

And about the crying over the rape scene is unbelievable, its like saying rape victims should never be a LI and are somehow dirty and destined to be alone forever, srsly what the hell is wrong with people... its literally "rape" not some fantasy or JAV kinda rape, actual rape and its not shown in a sexual way and not meant to be sexualized, and though there are people who who dont wanna see rape in adult games, its happening in the real world around us and should not be ignored and let the dev tell the story, also theres only one render of the actual act being shown and its necessary for a plot point (for the sister to drink MC's blood) also from what i've seen the MC is the Alpha kinda type and u can bet he's not gonna let anyone touch his Harem so rest easy...


I thought that was a solid way to Bite and feed her blood unintentionally of course, it was well done actually, as for the render itself it gets the point across so i didn't think too much about it but like i said the lighting in some H scenes could be better, good luck!

Thanks for your feedback.

I found someone to proofread the script. (today)
I try to cut short the repeating scene. But since it's part of their life, life have some boring moment. Like sleeping, wake up, have breakfast/lunch/diner. That kind of time when people have the time to think about what happen, or casually speak about their life. I try to modify a bit of the render to made them look different.

auto playing some scenes are too fast and frankly i would like to click to progress the scene

I can work on it.

the white background in text is annoying transparent text box could be better.

I wanted to change background color and text, so the reader can identify who is speaking quickly. Almost every character have a unique combination of color. (when I navigate with a lot of Character, you need to identify them easily, I guess)

i could tell that the Dev wanna try to portray the MC as a "Trying to do good" kinda guy but at the same time he comes off as some kinda psychopath and emotionless asshole

Almost, he isn't emotionless. He just loses every kind of feeling he could have for his stepfamily.

 

[iloveyou2much]

can i have a gdrive link please

 

[flylupus1980]

can i have a gdrive link please

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[caxhub]

Sinister Chronicle [Chapter 01] APK -

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[Punto]

Futa - Gay

 

[myuhinny]

Futa is the Japanese word for hermaphadite trans is not futa.

 

[flylupus1980]

Just so you know, I finally finish revamp my scene, need to render, check every pic, correct as mush as I can. Final number of picture 518. (I already render the 123) I hope my computer allows me to render correctly. A bit hot right now. Seem CPU don't like hot weather.

 

[pilgrim2003]

Just so you know, I finally finish revamp my scene, need to render, check every pic, correct as mush as I can. Final number of picture 518. (I already render the 123) I hope my computer allows me to render correctly. A bit hot right now. Seem CPU don't like hot weather.

Ice cream?

 

[flylupus1980]

Almost finish my chapter, will need proofreading for my english.

 

[pilgrim2003]

Almost finish my chapter, will need proofreading for my english.

Splendid. Unfortunately, I am not native-speaker, however google, MSWord and others can help a lot

 

[Allan Trumbull]

HTML & kinetic novel ?? I am out of here!!

 

[flylupus1980]

HTML & kinetic novel ?? I am out of here!!

I understand for the Kinetic novel, but HTML? There are 4 platforms, Ren'py windows, ren'py MAC, Ren'py HTML or Ren'py android. (I edit the html version because it can be read offline almost everywhere)

 

[rance4747]

*He WILL sleep with not only girls but with men and trans as well.

WILL huh. Not may? Not an option? If i understand this bit correctly, just like that you are loosing both straight, gay, and those bisexuals that don't like trans or futa in one fell swoop.
To be clear, I'm not hating on you, to each their own, but like it or not, most people usually look at MC as some sort of self insert, and you are kinda relying on the minority inside minority to be your main client base here.

 

[myuhinny]

flylupus1980

HTML isn't a operating system a operating system is windows - MAC - linux. HTML is a game engine.

 

[ShamanLab]

Sorry, don't want to be cinical but...

Veins varicosis??

 

[flylupus1980]

flylupus1980

HTML isn't a operating system a operating system is windows - MAC - linux. HTML is a game engine.

Since you so into it, you should know HTML isn't a game engine, but a programming language used for internet, intranet, or ... game engine. HTML only need an internet Browser to be reed, so it's a multiplatform and a multi OS game engine.

but again, it's up to you to read it or not and use the engine you like.

 

[flylupus1980]

Sorry, don't want to be cinical but...

Veins varicosis??

Nope, you'll need to read the novel to understand why the veins can be seen

 

[Jarod Russell]

*He WILL sleep with not only girls but with men and trans as well.

WILL huh. Not may? Not an option? If i understand this bit correctly, just like that you are loosing both straight, gay, and those bisexuals that don't like trans or futa in one fell swoop.
To be clear, I'm not hating on you, to each their own, but like it or not, most people usually look at MC as some sort of self insert, and you are kinda relying on the minority inside minority to be your main client base here.

While "WILL" can mean inevitably happen as in your example, it can also be used to express capability. An example: "The car will hold three passengers." That doesn't mean that if you buy that car you're going to be driving three people around everywhere, just that it is possible.

We'll have to wait and see which it ends up being.