Actually, I've been meaning to ask you sth.The monologue would not need to be long (just 1 sentence really, so maybe monologue was not the proper word; there are other MC's thoughts, so something like that), but it is not something that important either; just seemed weird to me that he mentions it once but not when he actually loses it.
I found all the issues you mentioned and fixed them, except for the 'being a virgin' one. Can you remember where it was?