- Jan 22, 2021
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Hello Oliz,
Thank you so much for this feedback. I will answer when I can![Smile :) :)](data:image/gif;base64,R0lGODlhAQABAIAAAAAAAP///yH5BAEAAAAALAAAAAABAAEAAAIBRAA7)
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But each time I try to improve. I started several months ago with the tool, it's my best for now
Regarding Mat's face, well, I like how he is so I guess I love zombies hehe ![Smile :) :)](data:image/gif;base64,R0lGODlhAQABAIAAAAAAAP///yH5BAEAAAAALAAAAAABAAEAAAIBRAA7)
and thanks again for the time you spent to provide your feedback.
Thank you so much for this feedback. I will answer when I can
It's the begining, I hope I'll be able to extend it soon. But it was also the purpose - being in the middle of nowhere, in a small areaThe worldbuilding is limited but well done.
The characters are few but well described.
The story is still short but easy to understand.
The sperm is complicatedI'm less sure about the sperm that looks like plaster. Mathew's face makes me think too much of a zombie.
I want Steven to be straightfoward. Regarding his expressions, I completely agree with that, I need to redo them and I will in one of the next update.The uncle is too straightforward, he lacks subtlety. During the camp, when talking with Mathew, his facial expressions were ugly, sorry to say it like this. He was correct at the house though.
LoLYou shouldn't have ended on that cliffhanger...
Good continuation.