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Denz0 said:
God, wish I could fast forward the time dang it.
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They made a movie about that, it ends up not being fun at all.
Antera said:
Anyone know anything similar with good MC and great story?
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Outside the multiple others recommended, i would also recommend:
Retrieving the Past (bad ass MC)
PineFalls (writer gets stuck)
SandStorm (Egypt=cool)
Snowstorm (as one would guess from the same team that did SandStorm, Vikings=Cool)
Element 174 (future depends on yo dick)
Hardtimes(poor to mafia)
 
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actually after writting it i kind of felt bad about it!

it does not work on a fundamental basis! i am considering deleting it!

even if i was to work and make it a better woven story the fundamental basis of a non consensual brutal 3 way rape does not vibe well with me! i would need to remove Bella crying which is one of the things that makes me cringe and work better on a few other aspects but even then its too much NTR for those who are into Bella...

you are probably right this fanfiction is shit indeed, there are a few aspects that are funny or that could be better worked to make them more comedic but at the basis its not a fun story but a traumatic event!

most of my other fanfiction even the brutal rapes that were done by the MC are kind of consentual in terms of Bella wanting to get close to him and enduring bad treatment... like if she choose to do it, in this specific one as her freedom of choice is removed it becomes a totally non consentual thing!

even the end of the clif hanger she being forced to have no revenge for it as a way to protect her mothers good name makes it all too realistic!

actually several parts of this story are parts of biographies of what can go wrong when working as a male in the sex industry!

there are hundreds of funny stories like people getting adresses wrong, VD´s, wrong idenTITTIES husbands trying to furfill wife´s fantasies and all going to shit,

So to those that felt wronged by this story... i was the 1st one to feel wronged by it its a crude and baddly done attempt at funny possibility that does not work... fuck i doubt it even works for people who enjoy NTR or even rape roleplay!

my apologies!


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for instance blaming it all on a senile old man, when he admited that he used to work just based on pictures means he would have done it on purpose!
So a no go!
it would it would also poke fun at the inter race marriages and relationships in the united states since this specific family would be one of the most progressive one´s since when the kids where born society saw these types of relationships as non acceptable thus the white grandafther married an hispanic woman (or raped her...) when it was badly seen and his sort of hispanic son did the same with a black woman when such relationships where badly seen!

the joke would be on the contrast of a typical religious and conservative family as the religious names indicate against the actions that they took in life which would place them at the forefront of what progressive ideals stand for in terms of individual freedom of choice to engage with whomever you so wish to!

even their entire idea of every relationship equating to rape is quite progressive actually!

there is also a few other aspects of how race relationships kids and what a family stands for in today´s society based on their class or perceived class!
their income would be top tier, but their work attire puts them at the lowest ranks of society!
reminds me of a friend of mine that works in a bank as to wear suit and tie everyday, while the really rich people just use shirts or sweaters and do not give a crap! and yet for society the sucefull one´s are the suit and tie and not the sweater and baggy trousers dudes who only work for fun!
this is extandable to a certain degree in the cars they drive and their "work" vehicule contrast, meaning that all work enviroment professional and ethics is performative and does specifically indicates a persons ethics!

in many ways we know this as people who work in the serviçe industry are either the most carefree in the world or the total opposite with the darkest shadow one can imagine! for instance the example of nurses who when they are good its rarely down to their professional skills but their extreme soft skills in caring for others and yet amongst the worst criminals in the world are the nurses known as the dark angels, psychopats that take out their pacients just because they can find excuses in the dosages or because they can steal parts of very expensive medication to sell on the black market turning a profit on the literal pain of those who are unable to defend themselves!

please do not confuse the dark angels with the white angels (and no this is not a racist perjurative observation) since the white angels do indeed also kill their pacientes, but they do so in clinical situations where the pacient of their own free will and in full capacity of their menthal abilities ask them for help to comit euthanasia/suicide!

its all in this text i created and yet it fails on the fundamental aspect of even if it jokes with current stigmas the basis of it is still wrong!

so as you can see behind such a simple text there is a vast array of knowledge that is put into it ... but as the comunist economical theory of value is a bust so does a text that as all these underlines and so much background fails in the simple fact that it does not add value due to a fundamental flaw!

could i recover it? probably but the work needed would not justify the end result, all the best jokes are done all it would achieve would make it more tolerable without adding anything new! could others do it? that is the reason why i have not removed it yet! there are some good quips and some jokes underneath the surface on the subtext that can be used on other works!

so the text fails but we can scuffle it for parts since parts of it are actually brilliant!


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the most stupid part in all of this is... it took 3 and half hours to writte it down!

all my other fanfiction took me beteween 5 minutes and half an hour, so basically i wasted 3.5 hours to write shit when normally and in an organic way i can writte far better shit in 1/7 of the time!
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I knew something ese was put behind those huge chunk of dialogues mate...there always is. It might come across as 'Warscarred's hatred or projection towards Bella' for some here but it actually isn't.

Your next fan fiction must include Sasha 'cause it's staring to seem like you don't have that much deeper connection with her like you always makin' it there is...you don't write things about Sasha, good or bad, 'cause you have nothing to say about her or TO her. Even your stupid love poem of her doesn't even define her, it can well be suited for any other characters mate. Yeah I know you're gonna chicken out like always by shitting something like ' I have nothing to prove..blah..blah..blah..'...whatever.

The thing about the nurses though, I've never learnt of those dark or white angels. I know those specific sweet nurses are often called angels of death or mercy but never heard of them being referred to as dark or white angels.
 
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Antera said:
Anyone know anything similar with good MC and great story?
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If I may put my two cents in:
MatrixHearts - great renders, good written dialogues, funny MC and a bit of good humor.
The Bite - yet another vampire story. If you like the "Rebirth" - you could like it too.
Life Happened - the dark story of a boy becoming the criminal boss.
A Man For All - a typical AVN story (the university, the girls, the challenge, the rivals), but very well done.
 
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I knew something ese was put behind those huge chunk of dialogues mate...there always is. It might come across as 'Warscarred's hatred or projection towards Bella' for some here but it actually isn't.

Your next fan fiction must include Sasha 'cause it's staring to seem like you don't have that much deeper connection with her like you always makin' it there is...you don't write things about Sasha, good or bad, 'cause you have nothing to say about her or TO her. Even your stupid love poem of her doesn't even define her, it can well be suited for any other characters mate. Yeah I know you're gonna chicken out like always by shitting something like ' I have nothing to prove..blah..blah..blah..'...whatever.

The thing about the nurses though, I've never learnt of those dark or white angels. I know those specific sweet nurses are often called angels of death or mercy but never heard of them being referred to as dark or white angels.
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I DO NOT NEED TO PROVE ANYTHING TO YOU OR ANYONE ELSE!

as stated i write in my imagination hundreds of stories about Sasha, guess what, not that funny and although interesting the 1st time they hold hands, the 1st time they lock eyes, the 1st time they smile at each other is it any good for the 100th time?

All happy endings are the same dude, there is no story to be told! that is how perfect Sasha trully is!

Anyway i deleted the story! if you want it you can have it from Ahx quote, i still got it stored but its just wrong!
 
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Ahx as you can see not that interesting!


Sasha: Hey MC, what are you doing?
MC: wtf, how did you got in?
Sasha: Nojiko let me in, did you not heard me ring the door?
MC: Sorry babe, i was busy with this game!
Sasha: what is it?
MC: i am the king and i gotta make decisions to strive!
Sasha: Boring....
Sasha: just shut it down and lets talk... and perhaps make out?
MC: MOTHERFUCKER HE JUST TOOK OUT ONE OF MY ARMIES, I WILL RAPE YOUR WIFE YOU CUNT!
Sasha: hey babe, calm down!
MC: fuck i dumb fucked hardcore, these asshole´s Munso´s are too strong for my Danish warriors!
Sasha: so you messed with someone stronger then you? smart...
MC: need time to gather my Norwegian levies and call my Pomeranian Slavic levies!
Sasha: how are you gonna do that?
MC: time to set up a revolt in his finish possessions!
Sasha: what? are you even listening to me?
MC: Sure love, love you, whatever you say!
Sasha: i know we are not there yet but... want a blowjob?
MC: i love you too my love, now that i got breathing space lets use our Sjalander mariner raiders to Burgholm!
Sasha: you know i am willing to swallow your cum!
MC: yes you´re right baby, totally agree with you! now raze those temples and burn those towns mwuahahahahahha
Sasha: what are you doing? are you even listening to me?
MC: ofc babe, love you so much! here see my raiders are butchering the children and spiking and impaling them on tree their men are already dead and their womenfolk have ben put in their places as broodmare whores for my brilliant and brave warriors,
Sasha: that is so sexy i am getting wet!
MC. sure we had 2000 warriors and they only mustered 200 but fuck it they totally outplayed me when their 3000 men army destroyed my 4000 army... my king the great Podrolf of Denmark with his 21 martial skills was totally outplayed by that Sigurd ring cunt and his son Ragnar with their respective 35 and 28 martial skills!
Sasha: take what´s your baby, make me your woman!
MC: i shall, HAVE MY REVENGE!
MC: shit they crushed their revolt and they are coming for me!
MC: just got a message from them. the rape of Burgholm will be avenged... perhaps i fucked up?
Sasha: i love on how concentrated you can get playing games!
MC: ok i know what i have to do, run to alfheim where i can gather my Norwegian vassal armies!
Sasha: you think my titties too small sweety?
MC: love you so much Sasha, so yes i always agree with you!
MC: ok my vardian marshal is gathering my Slavic levies, fortifying Sjaeland my capital!
Sasha: here let me remove my top and tell me what you think of my titties!
MC: yes baby, you´re perfect and wonderful! IDIOT SIGURD HE IS ATTACKING MY SJAELLANDer ARMY!
MC: he must land his troops on a fully garrisoned island his manpower advantage is irrelevant as as i keep receiving my Slavic warrior his advantage will soon fade!
Sasha: here let me remove my bra, you think my pink nipples too small my love?
MC: yes sweety, you´re so smart! FOR FUCK SAKE WHY DID YOU STUPID IDIOT VARDIAN LET MY LEFT FLANK FALL FFS! AND THAT PRUSSIAN CUNT IS GOING TROUGH HOLSTEIN INSTEAD OF GOING STRAIGHT TO SJAELAND WITH ALMOST 1500 WARRIORS! YOU CUNT, BAD VASSAL BAD VASSAL!
Sasha: you know when i pinch my nipples it kind of feels nice, wanna try?
MC: everything for you my love! MOVE YOUR ASSES NORWEGIAN IDIOTS GOTTA RUN TO SJAELAND BEFORE EVERYTHING IS LOST FUCK FUCK FUCK FUCK FUCK!
MC: hold hold hold ffs i can not loose this, hold that line! YES YOU BEAUTIFUL PRUSSIAN ASSHOLE YOU ARRIVED JUST IN TIME TO SAVE THE DAY!
Sasha: can i get under the desk and suck you off baby?
MC: love you too Sasha, OH SHIT FFS HOW CAN YOU WITH A LANDING ADVANTAGE AND 1.2 SOLDIER FOR EACH ONE OF THEM LOOSE THE CENTER, IDIOTS I AM SURROUNDED BY IDIOTS!
Sasha: let me just unzip your trousers!
MC: you´re the perfect girlfriend any man would ever wish for! RUN YOU ASSHOLE WE GOT 2 ORGANIZERS AND YOU STILL MOVE LIKE SLUGS!
Sasha: whoaaa you are hard ... that`s a 1st!
MC: oh yeahhhh now you be fucked you cunt Swedish asshole, calling my beautiful danes DIK`s in your other game and painting us as assholes just because of a raid or two!
Sasha: can you feel how i kiss your dick? you like it?
MC: yes baby you´re amazing and i love you no matter what! ffs bring down his flank, FUCK HIS FINISH LEVIES ARE COMING! HURRY THE FUCK UP AND CRUSH HIM! PLEASE ODIN AND THOR ONE TIME, ONE FUCKING TIME, I PROMISES I WILL SACRIFICE MY 1ST BORN! ok 1st born daughter lets not get over our heads!
Sasha: i kiss your dick and you do not even flinch...
MC: YES I RULE, FUCK YOU SWEDES I CAPTURED YOUR KING AND YOUR HEIR PRINCE! MAKE 145 GOLD OR... EXECUTE THEM KILL THEM ALL, FUCK YOU AV MUNSO!
Sasha: ouch, do not jump like that when i am under your desk, i hurt my head!
MC: YES YES YES NOW WE ALSO CRUSH THEIR ALLIES ARMIES! MWUAHAHAHAHAHAHA
Sasha: are you even listening to me!
MC: NOW GET MY NAVY OUT! THROUGH THE CONTROL OF THE SOUND, WE RULE THE STRAIGHT OF KATTEGAT AND ITS WEALTH, WHEREVER THE SEA CAN BE HEARD, WE SHALL PREY ON THE SHORES, WE RULES THE SOUND, WE RULE THE WAVES, WE ARE THE SPEARDANES SHIELDDANES AND SWORDDANES AND THE VIKING AGE IS COMING FOR YOUR SOULS! MWUAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA TREMBLE YOU WEAKLINGS!
Sasha: that shit is so sexy, take me now!
MC: babe... what are you doing under the desk with your ... *blush* tidbits out *blush*
sasha: you did not even notice you got your dick out... annnnnnnnnnnnndddd your hard on is gone!
MC: oh, i am so sorry babe, i meant no disrespect to you, it must have jumped out of my shorts!
Sasha: shut up and kiss me already you dumb doofus!
MC: Yes, ofc baby!
Sasha: can you taste your pre-cum on my lips?
MC: What? *throws up*
Sasha: really? i do not even know why i care to visit you!
MC: because, and i hope, its because you love me as much as i love you?
Sasha: i suspect that i love you more then you love me!
MC: nahh i love you more!
Sasha: i will be happy if you love just half as much as you love your computer games!
-- Nojiko enter the room to see what`s going on--
Nojiko: WTF SASHA, get dressed, are you trying to corrupt my little boy? why did you threw up?
MC: Nojiko, knock before you enter!
Nojiko: its my house young one, i do as i please, and i am too young to be a grandmother!
Sasha: Yes you are nojiko!
Nojiko: Thanks, my beautiful peach!
Nojiko: i have no idea why you love this idiot son of mine, but i thank god everyday that someone as beautiful and cute as you do!
MC: perhaps i am irresistible?
Sasha&Nojiko: MWUAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA OMG!
Nojiko: Must be his sense of humour!
Sasha: i do not know, but its part of it for sure!
 
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Ahx as you can see not that interesting!
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Well....I suppose it's because neither you nor anyone else knows who Sasha is really...I mean, we had like five minutes of playthrough of her... Nothing significant about her was mentioned, not even a little bit of her backstory, if that hadn't been the case, we could have conjured up something that would resemble somewhat of her personality.

What we DO know about her is that she loves books, yoga, Jujutsu, a little taekwondo, Robin, her ridiculous earring, and something that's supposed to be pure white.
 
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Ahx said:
Well....I suppose it's because neither you nor anyone else knows who Sasha is really...I mean, we had like five minutes of playthrough of her... Nothing significant about her was mentioned, not even a little bit of her backstory, if that hadn't been the case, we could have conjured up something that would resemble somewhat of her personality.

What we DO know about her is that she loves books, yoga, Jujutsu, a little taekwondo, Robin, her ridiculous earring, and something that's supposed to be pure white.
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and that she hates weakness, only the strong survive!

anyway i have dozens of stories like the one i just described in my imagination but seriously except for me i do not see the interest in that!

i was able to make that one interesting because it´s something that most young women can relate trying to get their boyfriends attention while they play video games!

but i had to make her far more sexually agressive and i had to dumb down the MC to a level we know he does not have... or never shows to even make the story palatable!

the original story was they debating strategy on how to beat a more numerous better organized and better lead enemy... so a shitload of very dry shit except for nerds who like military history or strategy games!
 
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Well....I suppose it's because neither you nor anyone else knows who Sasha is really...I mean, we had like five minutes of playthrough of her... Nothing significant about her was mentioned, not even a little bit of her backstory, if that hadn't been the case, we could have conjured up something that would resemble somewhat of her personality.

What we DO know about her is that she loves books, yoga, Jujutsu, a little taekwondo, Robin, her ridiculous earring, and something that's supposed to be pure white.
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I agree that we don't know much about Sasha to evaluate her in any way. But I'm toying with the idea that Sasha is the icy equivalent of the fiery Nami. Where Nami is impulsive, Sasha is calm. But both are strongly empathetic, especially to their friends.

Who of you wouldn't want to see a Warscared expression when it turns out that she kicks the asses of everyone who treats people ugly. Some guy insults Robin that she's a slut and a boom. Sasha kicks him in the stomach. This idea is based on the fact that Sasha acts as Robin's protector. That in itself is a little, but it suggests something.....

and it is Fire and Ice ladies who defend people from blueballing.
 
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Hello,

Welcome to the 9th Dev Log.

Progress on Chapter 4 has been good. I'm currently also writing a lot more again (Future chapters and changing/Polishing other chapters.)
As mentioned in the last log, today I will give a little more insight on how much is left.
I'm currently 1300 still renders in and I'm around 200 to 300 renders away from finishing the "normal" part of the update. The one that isn't in the Tabletop session.
So the normal part of the update (excluded cinematics) is pretty much 85% done.
The Tabletop part is 45% done.

A few more details about the last two weeks and what I did there... I was building a new environment for the real timeline and I was lacking some assets.
You need to know... I have almost zero experience at modeling stuff but I needed a damn floodlight and while I could've used a primitive plane or so as one, I wanted something with more quality.
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In the background, you can see the floodlight boy I created.

As you all know, I work alone. I do pretty much everything alone beside the coding. (Thanks Cursen, Eni and SLim.)
But pretty much 98% of my time is spent on creating the visuals. When I make the move to Blender after Season 1, I want to hire a freelancer who specializes in creating environments, etc.
A person passionate about it and not just in for the bucks. Cause it will show in the end product.
Chapter 4 will actually offer my first completely unique environment modeled by a freelancer. (Thanks Wibble!)
It will be previewed in the last dev log before the release.

Alright, let's get to some more visual previews.
I had some real trouble finding renders I could show without spoilering.
Here's a first sideboob peak of one of Nick's daughters.
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"Going in there would be a brilliant idea."
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"Cheeto Love."
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And at last, another sneaky peek on one of the daughters.
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4k res of all images attached.

So yeah, in the next Dev Log I will elaborate on my current work ethics and give some numbers about productivity... Now that I've located and tackled my biggest limiter.

- Ocean
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