VN Ren'Py Abandoned Taste of Hatred [v0.5] [Cute Rachel]

[Vrijgeest]

Ok for a first try. Heavy in the macho department. The Engrish is terrible and takes away a lot from the story. The renders are ok but very Asian and I assume that is intensional.

 

[ZagorTeNay]

Is it me or all the chicks have really large heads?

 

[Zephea]

Is it me or all the chicks have really large heads?

They look pretty normal to me, at least on my system.

 

[QaliberDK]

It has potential but the story feels similar to others i've played. It's still early enough in development to create a unique and interesting story, though. For a 0.4 release, it has very little to offer, story/content wise but it's not necessarily a bad thing. I guess time will tell. My two main issues with this story is the english and the characters and their behavior/personality, especially the MC.

The characters seem, for a lack of better words, simpleminded and juvenile in their thoughts and behavior. Especially the MC is acting like a child with a grudge and it's a kind of off putting to play as a manchild.

The english is pretty bad, i don't think that there's a nicer way to word it. I assume that english is not the developers first language and that's fine, but if this is (or will be) a serious project, a proofreader is needed. Currently, some dialogue is nonsensical or just very poorly worded and a proofreader would hugely improve the experience.

That being said, i do wish the developer good luck with the project

 

[asakura14]

it's kinda fresh to have a game where the MC is the one that doesn't return the love at star, I like it

 

[MuffinManWantsPregnancy]

I'll be honest. I enjoy being a dick to Kara. Usually, if you give me the option in a game to be a straight-up asshole, then I'm gonna do it. Not a bad game so far, definitely could use a proofreader, but I'm enjoying it.

 

[botc76]

Engrish improved in any way?

 

[chickenwangs]

its a pretty good game where you can be the bad guy... but there arent any fulfilling scenes with either the step mom or Kara yet so the game still feels a bit empty

 

[AL.d]

4 mins and couldn't stand that edgy bitch of an MC. What an insufferable sperg.

It's fine to have a revenge a story but a) have it directed towards the right fucking person, b) dont make the character so irredeemably annoying that we stop feeling he needs any revenge.

edit: Forced myself to continue and he is kinda more fleshed out as the game goes on. The choices at least make it seem like he's attempting to act like a human. And it explains him acting like a deranged schizo because...he is one. Still needs an editor though.

 

[Tkoyama]

Thank you

 

[Khayon]

Don't like the game because MC, he hates everyone, he is just a jerk. Hate the person just because she is the daughter of the woman, who betrayed your father is realy stupid. She did nothing to you. MC is just schizoid.

 

[TripleZ]

Really slow progress compared to the frequency of updates.

 

[JenusKudo]

Downloaded the Android version 0.5. File was named 0.5.......but the app is 0.1....i hope it's just a naming mistake from the dev

 

[leloil]

You know what i like?
I like that you keep the size of the game to a minimum

 

[Matt_88]

Tried the game because it was 0.5 (halfway done, in my mind) but the content for it was short more like V0.05.

My thought on the game: it can be a descend game if you get a proofreader. Eng is bad and missing a lot of contexts.
Why did she leave, when was this....
Remembering your dad sad she studied hard in college, a few days further it is sad she is in high school?

I wish you the best of luck in the future

 

[Arrdvark]

I kept waiting for the MC to show some change based on my choices, and nothing was happening. I took a look at the code, and there are no points or variables tracked. The only thing your choices do is alter the text a bit and maybe give you an extra image or two. This might as well be a kinetic novel...

 

[Ty4Sharing]

Er, cinnamon's not bitter, bud.

 

[jhustrue]

Er, cinnamon's not bitter, bud.

It's very subtle depending on the type of cinnamon, but it definitely has some bitterness.

 

[Incog Ninja]

The English grammar definitely needs some work, but overall a good start! And the models are hot, except the MC, he looks like your typical run-of-the-mill HoneySelect MC you see in other games.


But yeah, this one has totally caught my attention.

 

[Osamabeenfappin]

Did this MC ever chill?

Dude was way to intense last time I played