VN Ren'Py The Abyss [v0.1.3] [Black Pearl Game]

[motodevo]

What an incredibly stupid premise. Also really bad form to give us an intro chapter with no choices other than a game over. Submission and blackmail is not hot unless there is a chance of resisting it. This is akin to having put a gun to her head and pulling the trigger if she declines to drink.

I agree completly what a waste of time to offer a choice for game over.
Where is the follow up for retribution for the greedy dickhead and the so called friends.
For the Uncle who after killing her parents came up with this stupid plan.
See you later.

 

[IL PIRATA]

I renew my best wishes for the holidays and respond in one message to the negative comments on ‘The Abyss’.
I often find them extremely helpful, they lead me to reflect on possible changes, but above all on the method to be used on other projects in development.
I emphasise the fact that I do other things in life and this will remain a hobby.
It must remain something I enjoy and not create pressure.

 

[Ashanyra]

I think, this is a promising story and a great start .
I like the story and i‘m really curious if the next updates.
Are you plan to use the corruption for the friends too?
Cause, there actions can be more mean or cruel if the corruptoin rises.
Or stay true to the mc's corruptiont?
Maybe that there is an option.. which leads to different (bad / good) endings for her
Are there ideas of:
Exhibitionism, Maid, petplay, bondage for future?

i wish good luck and wait for updates.

 

[Emma Nuelle]

Game looks promising. It needs proof reading badly.
Apparently, the difference between he and she is not entirely clear.

 

[IL PIRATA]

I think, this is a promising story and a great start .
I like the story and i‘m really curious if the next updates.
Are you plan to use the corruption for the friends too?
Cause, there actions can be more mean or cruel if the corruptoin rises.
Or stay true to the mc's corruptiont?
Maybe that there is an option.. which leads to different (bad / good) endings for her
Are there ideas of:
Exhibitionism, Maid, petplay, bondage for future?

i wish good luck and wait for updates.

I have no idea... or rather... I have several, when I write a story I only know that I have to go from point A to point F, passing through points B, C, D, E.
What happens in between them depends on how I develop the story as I write.
I can anticipate that this game will intersect with a second one, the demo of which will be released soon on Patreon and later on F95.

 

[IL PIRATA]

Il gioco sembra promettente. Ha bisogno di una correzione di bozze.
A quanto pare, la differenza tra lui e lei non è del tutto chiara.
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You are right, I will try to translate the text better, my language is Italian and when I write I naturally use that.

 

[Merandor]

I guess if you are into women being raped you will enjoy this. Otherwise a hard pass. Renders are nice but the story is horrible.

 

[PickerLewd]

I just started and played until you were forced to drink the first "antidote".

I noticed many typos, especially the use of "He" when it should be "She" or vice versa, or Elizabeth sometimes appearing as Elisabeth with the Z changed to the S.

The main character is gorgeous, but it's true that with friends like that, why would you want enemies? .

I'm more interested in the old man who makes the phone call at the beginning than in the three idiots who are supposed to be "friends".

 

[Geko1711]

I noticed many typos, especially the use of "He" when it should be "She" or vice versa, or Elizabeth sometimes appearing as Elisabeth with the Z changed to the S.

Usually in English it is written Lisa (woman's name) and I have never seen it written Liza? It's just my curiosity.

 

[PickerLewd]

Usually in English it is written Lisa (woman's name) and I have never seen it written Liza? It's just my curiosity.

Correct, but in this case the name of her traitorous friend is Elizabeth, so it has nothing to do with Lisa (another good game, by the way).

 

[Geko1711]

Correct, but in this case the name of her traitorous friend is Elizabeth, so it has nothing to do with Lisa (another good game, by the way).

It is also likely that one name is derived from the other, it is just a matter of putting an E in front, but this, does not explain the difference in writing, because the pronunciation is the same. I agree about the great game, as you can see from my signature.

 

[phdusa1]

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[Maxus_mudo]

I played this thinking that there would be some 'female domination' in it, but clearly when you have three males using the threat of death to coerce a woman into sexual acts, you can see who's in the driving seat and it isn't any female.

Maybe in future use the correct tags so potential players know what they're getting into before they download it. Likewise, nice funny with the 'No NTR route' ... I can't even imagine how that could even apply in this story ... is the MC supposed to get upset over one of her rapists having sex with someone else? it's too stupid to even think about.

I'm hoping that by the end of the story the MC has the men bound, gagged, and being milked like farm animals before being dispatched at the end of the 14 days, while the other two girls are already slowly rotting in the backyard.

 

[Muareb]

First of all, my compliments to the author. Compared to the version available 7-8 months ago, the rendering quality has definitely improved. Keep it up.

More attention should be paid to the choices. For example, why can't the MC challenge Malik and refuse to call him "Master"? Maybe the right amount of submissions would have been needed to agree, and maybe more corruption would have guaranteed a way to avoid the possible punishment. You should have more fun exploring the different scenarios.

The plot, on the other hand, is a bit of a... mystery. I'm not one of those who expects an Oscar for best screenplay for erotic games (unlike some commenters on F95, lol), but I have to admit that the whole "yeah, let's make our friend, just poisoned with a deadly serum, our sex slave" thing doesn't work very well.
Maybe you could...
a) Make the group more money hungry. Everyone is in financial trouble for different reasons and is more inclined to sacrifice the MC for themselves. (assuming the cabin is a gift from the 'benefactor')
b) Make the sex slavery issue an explicit request from the 'benefactor'.
c) Put the group on bad terms with the MC
d) Make the group unknown to the MC (assuming the MC goes to the cabin with another character who is then forced to leave for reason X)