Really pleasantly surprised ! didn't expect much, but it ended being a great story with great writing and English quality compared to the norm here.
even expected it to be generic, but the dev dives in the football side and the sport science, it's really interesting.
MC spends much more time with the side girls than the LI though. So I guess we're in for very slow burns for more than half of them.
the easiest examples : Chloe is so prominently featured that I thought she was the last LI and it was an oversight from the dev that her name didn't appear in the profile screen, while Orla has barely any scene or interaction with MC and suddenly she gets the last profile out of nowhere.
MC is quite a bit naive and passive. probably a way for the author to create safety, comfort and trust for the girls. but there is character growth that we can already see. very lacking in confidence at the start, MC builds a lot of it very quickly. he is still unsure, but at least he is bold and wants to try a few things and take risks with the girls.
Penny's ultimatum felt quite a bit forced and underhanded, especially over the phone. You would expect something like that to be done face to face.
Jasmine's playful side seems to have been downgraded to childish and juvenile instead
, especially with the confession scene in 0.8 which was quite a bit underwhelming after all the build up
Hana's scenes, in comparison
, especially the last one in 0.8, felt much better.
Even though we see much more of Jasmine, it feels like Hana's character is much more fleshed out. Jasmine's personality, qualities and nuances are described and told to us by MC instead of being shown. While Hana is the opposite. Everything is shown and nothing is told.
It seems that every LI in MC's work are made to be "experienced" as is, while the ones outside are explicitly over explained. assigning them qualities that the player doesn't see in their scenes. funny contrast and separation.
I think I saw somewhere that some LI will be mutually exclusive, even though it's a harem game. from how the latest update went, I'm guessing it's going to be Ivy vs Leah. or an interesting twist to the ultimatum could be Penny vs Harem. there is a small chance for Ivy vs Hana, because of the rules, but I don't see that happening.
having the signing of Kiki and Hester as a player choice could be a ton of work later for the dev xD when the revenge match happen, they are likely to be featured on the side the player decided.
I thought MC would try to be a little cheeky towards Ivy when telling her he managed to sign them both. Telling her that one of the condition would be to get special massages from him, especially after all the build up she did for that, would have been a sweet little revenge for having been sent on that quest.
It was a bit disappointing that Addy and Kalila were teased at the beginning but there was no follow up to that relationship
, especially during what potentially happens to Addy at the end, there should have been some kind of stronger reaction from Kalila, while Anya reacting to Dina makes sense..
After the prologue, we really some action in a real match. MC's influence should begin to show
