Good start; nice art and storytelling. But the spelling and grammar errors are very distracting. Just one example that's a pet peeve of mine: The word "too" in the phrase "too much" or "too many" or "me too" has two "o"s; it means "excessively" or "also." The preposition "to", by contrast, means "until" or "toward" and has one o.
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I like the art style... which makes the 4th screenshot rather concerning. Are all the lewd scenes using photos or are they drawn? Just popping in photos in a VN feels like a bait and switch. You're building up to this point with the girls shown and then you get some random picture to fap to instead.
I am actually extremely surprised that dev hasn't been called out more often regarding... well, state of the game. It's buggy as hell. That's only one of the problems, yes, there is no way to continue. Also I believe that one of the "back" buttons in the menu is not actually working. You have to exit the game, can't get back from the settings screen.
The language is... I don't know... I can't tell whether dev is native English speaker or not. I assume that dev is watching a lot of American movies. I didn't think I would ever give this advice but... use google translate. Google translate + manual check would get rid of many of the issues. Also try put all the text in Word and check all words that are underlined. Use something like this
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Geez! There is one place I actually had to write it down... it was something about having had history lesson together and then : "such a insane elective". What?
I was expecting a lot of similar posts in this thread but probably not many people played the game.
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Hey! thanks for your critic and input! yeah there seems to be a lot of UI issues this is my first time programming but i'm not gonna use that as an excuse. Fixing the bugs is my first priority so I'm gonna do an overhaul on the UI for the next update. Thanks again for your feedback!
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I'm pretty interested in this. How far are fetishes gonna go? Also the thing about grammar concerns me, I am glad you are taking an active approach to fixing bugs, but grammar/story is super important in a dating sim.
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Hey yeah my overall writing skills aren't the best, I"m definitely more of an artist than a writer but I will try my best to make it more manageable.
As for fetishes I'm putting as many as I can. Mind you it's gonna have kinks that I also have some personal interest in. Like forced fem, body worship, ballbusting, beatdown, mixed fights, puppy play, chastity play, pegging, boot and feet worship, physical domination and a bunch more.
The main girls, Lauren, Becky, Ivy, Nikki each cater to specific types of kinks. Right now the story will go to girl to girl but eventually down the line I plan on branching the story to multiple paths, so If you have a specific type of fetish you like you can go for that girl path.
I think your being to harsh dude bugs will always pop up and who cares about spelling it's a porn game lol. Keep up the work dude can't wait for the next update.
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you had me at pegging o7 yup, I'm interested in this project ^_^
Hard disagree. There is a point (and I've encountered it and seen it myself several times), where it gets way to distracting and it really breaks the immersion/setting. Like you can have pretty art and everything, but if you're reading and trying to get into it, an error here/there is okay, but if its a constant thing, it absolutely can ruin an experience. Not everyone is the same type of person, you're probably a visual or aural person, so the story is secondary to you, since you probably fill any gaps you want with images or your own head cannon. Thats great for you, but story and words are important to some people as well, for them the words and story fill in the information needed to enjoy the scene.
Look I get that mindset, but I think you and the other guy need to understand that at least in this case this is a one man job for this game and a free one at that.
I agree for games you would have to pay for and games with a pretty big team behind it, but in this case where its a single dev you need to put your expectations down a bit.
I just think you guys are being to harsh on a small solo project. Idc about "grammar" in this type of game the art is good the story is good the girls are good, it's a totally diffrennt story if this game had a bigger team or if I payed for the product.
This game has a lot of good stuff going for it for a guy who's doing all the work him or her self.
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uhhh, I've been nothing but supportive. I'm saying grammar DOES make a big difference. Also you're making an awful lot of assumptions about me. Look, I am not saying anything about the story, you're right in porn you don't need big plots or stories, but if you are using erotica/written content, you do need to at least use right words and spelling. I haven't criticized this guy, at most I said I've been concerned with the grammar.
Mm, I think Becky and Nikki are definitely shaping up to be my favorites. With Becky I almost wish we had more time before signing the contract, having her manipulate and subtly train us was the best part. But I suppose just because we signed a contract doesn't mean we don't still require training... Looking forward to seeing her path.
And Nikki... Well, just keep her dominant and keep her ass on the MC. Have her sit on our face, our back, our chest, our groin, the side of our head... Anywhere, the longer we get to spend under her butt, the better the game will be! Like, if the game was just renamed to "The Life and Times of Nikki's Chair" I wouldn't even complain...
I like the others too, but those two are definitely my favorites so far...
And Nikki... Well, just keep her dominant and keep her ass on the MC. Have her sit on our face, our back, our chest, our groin, the side of our head... Anywhere, the longer we get to spend under her butt, the better the game will be! Like, if the game was just renamed to "The Life and Times of Nikki's Chair" I wouldn't even complain...
I like the others too, but those two are definitely my favorites so far...
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It looks like its rpg maker, so you can't (or if someone knows differently, let me know too, cus I have never found it). I think this game would be better in renpy for that reason, since you have a lot of art that gets covered, and some images with written details that are hidden by the UI
edit: some side notes, there are some places where the wrong names are displayed with who is talking, there is times lauren's pants change colors (from black to white), the "narrator" voice should probably either not be there at all, and just convey story without a "spoken box". Just a few things noted.
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