VN Ren'Py The Builder [S2 Ep. 9.2] [LewdRobotics]

[SeveredRealms]

He can stop all this back and forth and do what he planned with a MC/Harem with only a few edits to the prologue. "which he supposedly did something but its hidden behind a paywall" Also now being silent here is not helping stop whats going on in the thread. Change some of the dialog not show some questionable scenes and it can go right back to the original premise of the MC impregnating every girl. As it stand now what is posted for download is going to keep this back and forth going.

 

[BTLD]

I gotta give it to the dev, he's one of a kind, he managed to ruin 3 LIs in 1 scene
1. LI is the woman who is pregnant with that douche's child
2. the one that gets fucked in the toilet (later on apparently dev changed his mind and said she won't be a LI anymore)
3. the LI that helps the douchebag fuck the 2nd chick

he is a master writer for Harem genre...

 

[sdna1]

I gotta give it to the dev, he's one of a kind, he managed to ruin 3 LIs in 1 scene
1. LI is the woman who is pregnant with that douche's child
2. the one that gets fucked in the toilet (later on apparently dev changed his mind and said she won't be a LI anymore)
3. the LI that helps the douchebag fuck the 2nd chick

he is a master writer for Harem genre...

wow, to only think that i wanted to try it before it get ntr tag...

 

[GypsyBastard]

Interesting premise but the prologue is a little bit wonky. You're introduced to a woman who kept the MC as a potential backup partner while she went off and got herself pregnant by a cheating asshole and a little afterwards we see that same asshole fuck a random chick in bathroom stall.

Now apparently both these women are going to be potential LI's but the way they are introduced is going to make a lot of people skip out on courting them, including me. I mean who genuinely wants to be in a relationship with a women who got pregnant by a cheating asshole or a random slut who fucked previous mentioned douch because of a drunken bet.

The only viable route I can think of for the MC's previous obsession is a revenge/dom path where you just hate fuck the ever loving shit out of her and leave her behind when you're done. As for the slut we saw in the bathroom, you could keep her around for some easy non committal sex scenes, no relationship just easy dicking. Will be personally skipping out on both these characters though.

On the plus side the other women who are introduced are all pretty varied in appearance/personality and I would love to see how their storylines unfold.

 

[jxd]

Do we or do we NTR? will we have the chance to fuck? or just hallucinate and stare? out there I don't like ntr, but I can cope if the mc also has a lot of action, but if we are only going to see how they fuck it would not be a game for me. Hopefully someone can clarify for me, thanks for your time and good luck to the developer.

 

[jxd]

Interesting premise but the prologue is a little bit wonky. You're introduced to a woman who kept the MC as a potential backup partner while she went off and got herself pregnant by a cheating asshole and a little afterwards we see that same asshole fuck a random chick in bathroom stall.

Now apparently both these women are going to be potential LI's but the way they are introduced is going to make a lot of people skip out on courting them, including me. I mean who genuinely wants to be in a relationship with a women who got pregnant by a cheating asshole or a random slut who fucked previous mentioned douch because of a drunken bet.

The only viable route I can think of for the MC's previous obsession is a revenge/dom path where you just hate fuck the ever loving shit out of her and leave her behind when you're done. As for the slut we saw in the bathroom, you could keep her around for some easy non committal sex scenes, no relationship just easy dicking. Will be personally skipping out on both these characters though.

On the plus side the other women who are introduced are all pretty varied in appearance/personality and I would love to see how their storylines unfold.

I'll wait a couple more chapters, but what you have described at the end gives me hope that there is a bit of variety in the characters and not that they are all like the first ones ...

 

[EnTeeArrr]

Oh NTR? Now I'm in.

 

[Cirdon]

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[Cirdon]

Plot is very weak. No builder ever signs up for a job without seeing the plans for what he/she is supposed to build, let alone a contract with penalty clauses. I'm not sure why you think you need that veil between the story and your readers/players but it's immensely unbelievable.

The MC is supposed to build this multistory wood structure that's going to house an auditorium and permanent exhibition.
The builder will work alone and use only local materials. This will all be completed within a calendar year, or there will be a penalty in payment.



The developer is obviously not trying to be in anyway realistic about the profession.

 

[Spfjolietjake]

As is, this is kind of a mess... I prefer non virgin lis however having one of the main Lis (if not the main the li) spend years putting you in the friendzone as back up is quite fucking cuck behavior.

Also never a good idea having a beautiful character introduce the vn and then show her having sex on a public toilet with your rival. Some ntr fans may like that I guess but it's rather tame by ntr standards and sours the character with everyone else

Imo pick a lane. Whether it's ntr or non ntr is fine but these hybrids never work unless you make a truly dual storyline vn

Right now this vn doesn't seem to know what the hell it wants to be. I will check on it later and see if it finds its direction, which I hope it does because I love the models and kink listed...

 

[mrttao]

Such a ~gentlement~ MC. You see a girl get fucked hard, and you have the option to give her torn panties after the CHAD (who is not the MC) cums and dumbs her. The scene was more comedic than anything else I have seen and I almost drowned on my own saliva from laughing. Thanks dev

Wow, I am genuinely impressed at how amazingly creative this author is in finding ways to make the MC come off as a cuck.
Literally the only thing I can think of that is more cucked than that is licking your rival's jizz out of her pussy when he is done with her.
Oh, and this is one of the sample pictures. See picture 5 where the MC is handing her the used panties.

 

[The ArcKnight]

I'll say what I said in the survey:

The bill of goods shown by the OP and what we got in the demo was drastically different.
If you wanted to have sex in the demo, and show Gry was easy, you could of easily had Gry lose the bet and have to fuck MC in the bathroom instead. Having the mascot of the game (she is shown in the intro and outtro) fuck the antagonist sets a VERY specific tone. Definitely not the "MC impregnates a town of women" tone, either. It ruins Gry for a large portion of the audience, which, as your mascot, not a smart thing.

The whole Carla situation is weird.
She kept MC as a backup for years, he's not thrilled to see her again and when MC acts less then enthused to see her she tells him, "Quit playing the martyr" Uhhh... how are we the audience suppose to feel any sort of sympathy or love for this character when you set her up as such a shitty person? If you want her to be redeemable, the dialog needs to be reworked to make her come off as less shitty and more conflicted.

Overall, you make the main character come off as someone who not only suffered a major break up, but really spinless.
He took a vow of celibacy to get over Carla. He admits, even after she's SUPER shitty to him, he still loves her and they have a "Special connection." He just seems like a complete fool when he needs to seem like an underdog you want to root for, not a spinless wimp while Paul is fucking everyone in site.

My suggestion:
Take out the sex scenes with Paul and Gry.
Rewrite the dialog for the interactions with Carla, make her more conflicted and less manipulative bitch.
If you plan to make this a "MC impregnates a town of hotties" game, take out sex scenes involving other men.
Those who will want to play that type of game, probably wont want to see other people fucking the love interests.

The models are good, and I love the idea of a MC getting to impregnate as town of stocking clad hotties.
If you course correct now, this could be fun as hell, just keep the other dicks away from the love interests.
But that's just like, my opinion, Man.

 

[sevendustkorn1008]

There was a link to a poll here and there was a question - Do you want Paul to come back to fuck some women. So, I wouldn't get my hopes up that Paul is gone.

I'm not pulling for one thing or another. I don't get aneurisms at the mere thought of NTR. If Paul shows up, the game might become interesting with a real threat present.

You mean the very first character we meet in the game who greets us is having sex with the MC's nemesis, yes, definitely not NTR.

You mean the girl who the MC has never met before in his life, and until that scene, I thought she wasn't even in the game, just some generated girl for the introduction? Yea, seeing as the MC has 0 relationship with the girl, and only introduced himself to her after the scene (if you chose to), than I will empathically say that is 100% not NTR.

What has been seen cannot be useen It will be very hard to forget that she was fucked and creampied by this jerk in the toilet.

If someone screams NTR, but no one is around to hear it, is it truly NTR? If a LI has had sex with another man before the events of the game, is the MC being cucked? Is the mere existence of men other than the MC in an adult game, not in itself NTR?

We can wax philosophically about stupid shit that doesn't matter all we want. But blacklisting a game because someone, other than the dev, leaked an unfinished product, is pretty petty. There's no reason why a game in it's infancy like this shouldn't be given a 2nd chance just because your brain can't get the image of some random girl getting fucked in the toilet. I barely remember the scene already. You'll survive this trauma. Trust me.

 

[sevendustkorn1008]

3. the LI that helps the douchebag fuck the 2nd chick

Who is that referring to? I don't seem to remember that scene.

 

[BTLD]

I'm not pulling for one thing or another. I don't get aneurisms at the mere thought of NTR. If Paul shows up, the game might become interesting with a real threat present.


You mean the girl who the MC has never met before in his life, and until that scene, I thought she wasn't even in the game, just some generated girl for the introduction? Yea, seeing as the MC has 0 relationship with the girl, and only introduced himself to her after the scene (if you chose to), than I will empathically say that is 100% not NTR.


If someone screams NTR, but no one is around to hear it, is it truly NTR? If a LI has had sex with another man before the events of the game, is the MC being cucked? Is the mere existence of men other than the MC in an adult game, not in itself NTR?

We can wax philosophically about stupid shit that doesn't matter all we want. But blacklisting a game because someone, other than the dev, leaked an unfinished product, is pretty petty. There's no reason why a game in it's infancy like this shouldn't be given a 2nd chance just because your brain can't get the image of some random girl getting fucked in the toilet. I barely remember the scene already. You'll survive this trauma. Trust me.

we get it ... you like NTR content..
I could even go and say NTR content is probably your favorite type of content since your signature is a full on NTR game

1. Harem game has nothing to do with "threats" , try to play some harem games... 99% of harem games don;'t have threats and what not...
2.You mean the girl that was supposed to be a LI but because of the backlash the dev received she won't be a LI anymore? again I point out .. she was planned as a LI...
3. Again the point of all these debates has flown over your head and you don't want to understand what is the main issue
Main issue here is that this game was advertised as a HAREM not a NTR CUCK FEST ... where in 1 scene 3 LI are ruined...
EDIT : also this is not kink-shaming , or anything like that , just how I see things
I'm fine with dev making a NTR game, I won't play it , only thing is the advertisement , should have been properly advertised

 

[sevendustkorn1008]

we get it ... you like NTR content..
I could even go and say NTR content is probably your favorite type of content since your signature is a full on NTR game

1. Harem game has nothing to do with "threats" , try to play some harem games... 99% of harem games don;'t have threats and what not...
2.You mean the girl that was supposed to be a LI but because of the backlash the dev received she won't be a LI anymore? again I point out .. she was planned as a LI...
3. Again the point of all these debates has flown over your head and you don't want to understand what is the main issue
Main issue here is that this game was advertised as a HAREM not a NTR CUCK FEST ... where in 1 scene 3 LI are ruined...

Not really. Straight up NTR games tend to get boring, and they lack originality. The premise is always, "beta Mc never speaks up and watches his LIs get stolen". It gets really annoying and frustrating to see the same story recycled. That's actually why I like My Virgin Bride. It has fresh, interesting takes on NTR and corruption. And I still think Being a DIK is the best adult game I've played on this site, and there is 0 NTR in that game (and never will have NTR). Nice assumptions, though.

I know what harem games are. I've played quite a few. I'm just pointing out that, in my opinion (since that needs to be stated nowadays to clarify), harem games that don't have a well thought out story (like Being a DIK), tend to get stale because there's no real urgency. It's just women falling into the MC's lap with no real care. I might as well just watch porn at that point.

And I understand the complaint. I just think it's funny. And since the biggest complaint is being addressed and changed, the least one can do is give the game a 2nd chance, especially if you're one of the ones kicking up a storm. Otherwise, you're complaining about a fix that is going to happen, and that's not constructive in the least.

P.S.: Can you answer the post I quoted of yours? I'm truly stumped about what you're talking about, and my inquisitive mind won't let it go until I know the answer.

 

[Look-see]

with a synopsis like that i didnt think i'd regret trying this game...what a fool i was

 

[BTLD]

Not really. Straight up NTR games tend to get boring, and they lack originality. The premise is always, "beta Mc never speaks up and watches his LIs get stolen". It get's really annoying and frustrating to see the same story recycled. That's actually why I like My Virgin Bride. It has fresh, interesting takes on NTR and corruption. And I still think Being a DIK is the best adult game I've played on this site, and there is 0 NTR in that game (and never will have NTR). Nice assumptions, though.

I know what harem games are. I've played quite a few. I'm just pointing out that, in my opinion (since that needs to be stated nowadays to clarify), harem games that don't have a well thought out stories (like Being a DIK), tend to get stale because there's no real urgency. It's just women falling into the MC's lap with no real care. I might as well just watch porn at that point.

And I understand the complaint. I just think it's funny. And since the biggest complaint is being addressed and changed, the least one can do is give the game a 2nd chance, especially if you're one of the ones kicking up a storm. Otherwise, you're complaining about a fix that is going to happen, and that's not constructive in the least.

not here to talk about what vns you enjoy the most and anyone would reach the same conclusion as mine based on your latest comments where you defend the NTR (which is fine , if it's your kink then I'm glad for you) and the fact that your only signature is a NTR game.. so these nice assumptions I can bet anyone would have them at first , granted they would probably change after you talked to them but that would be the first impression. Also what I assumed was not in bad faith... since you seem to have taken it that way, so.. let me say I didn't meant it as a insult.

Hate to burst your bubble but BaDIK is not a harem game...so not the best example I would say.

Nobody is saying they need to fall for MC at the first sight but having again I say 3 LIs ruined with 1 scene in a HAREM game... is ..well there's no other word for it .. shit.
Also a harem game where main LI friendzoned MC and then went and got pregnant with a douchebag .. where the main point of the game is to get women pregnant.. yea.. thanks but no thanks.

So in the end the problem is as I stated the game was poorly advertised , no harem player would touch the game if it was advertised with NTR and saying "hey in the first chapter you get to see 3 LIs ruined because.. plot things..something..yea"

I'm fine with the dev writing his own story , I encourage him to write whatever he wants, full on Cuck MC and whatnot go for it, just .. say so be honest and open about what you want to do with your game , nobody wants to go to see the latest horror movie and end up seeing actually little people hardcore pregnant porn... I mean I came for the horror not for the porn.. that's what happened here , people came for the harem and the awesome idea (since I gotta be honest I don't really remember playing a game where the sole purpose was getting women pregnant) of getting women pregnant and ended up with a douchebag ruining 3 LIs

sevendustkorn1008 The scene I'm referring to 3 LIs getting ruined is the toilet scene basically since
1. of the LI is the one getting fucked
2.2nd LI is the one that made the bet with the one thats getting fucked
3.3rd LI is douchebags g/f whatever she is the one that friendzoned MC and kept him as a backup or some shit.

 

[sevendustkorn1008]

not here to talk about what vns you enjoy the most and anyone would reach the same conclusion as mine based on your latest comments where you defend the NTR (which is fine , if it's your kink then I'm glad for you) and the fact that your only signature is a NTR game.. so these nice assumptions I can bet anyone would have them at first , granted they would probably change after you talked to them but that would be the first impression. Also what I assumed was not in bad faith... since you seem to have taken it that way, so.. let me say I didn't meant it as a insult.

Hate to burst your bubble but BaDIK is not a harem game...so not the best example I would say.

Nobody is saying they need to fall for MC at the first sight but having again I say 3 LIs ruined with 1 scene in a HAREM game... is ..well there's no other word for it .. shit.
Also a harem game where main LI friendzoned MC and then went and got pregnant with a douchebag .. where the main point of the game is to get women pregnant.. yea.. thanks but no thanks.

So in the end the problem is as I stated the game was poorly advertised , no harem player would touch the game if it was advertised with NTR and saying "hey in the first chapter you get to see 3 LIs ruined because.. plot things..something..yea"

I'm fine with the dev writing his own story , I encourage him to write whatever he wants, full on Cuck MC and whatnot go for it, just .. say so be honest and open about what you want to do with your game , nobody wants to go to see the latest horror movie and end up seeing actually little people hardcore pregnant porn... I mean I came for the horror not for the porn.. that's what happened here , people came for the harem and the awesome idea (since I gotta be honest I don't really remember playing a game where the sole purpose was getting women pregnant) of getting women pregnant and ended up with a douchebag ruining 3 LIs

I'm still genuinely curious as to who you're referring to as the 3rd LI ruined. I can't seem to recall that scenario. You answered it. Thanks.

BaDIK may as well be a harem game. I know it's not truly a harem game since there's no ending where the MC gets every girl. But the MC can have multiple women at the same time, for large chunks of the game. And the MC shows 0 signs of voyeurism, or being a cuck. It may as well be a harem game, but I digress.

On to the topic of this game, I've seen multiple people call that Carla woman the "main LI". I simply don't see it, and I don't know why anyone thinks she's the main LI. She is a woman from the MC's past who basically fucked him over. Her introduction in this game seemed like it was more like a way of mentioning his past trauma without wordy exposition. I'm sure she'll play a role later in the game (when she inevitably discovers Paul is still cheating on her). But at that point (if the dev wasn't discouraged and is still making the game), I imagine the MC will have a plethora of women to choose from, and Carla would be a distant memory. I'm leaning more toward Thea being the "main" LI, but if this follows the harem formula (which I have no reason to believe it won't), then there won't really be a "main" LI.

 

[paust.alex]

The problem can be solved very simply by adding few scenes to the story. It's like with the stick and carrot, so far the author has shown us only the stick - the whore LI's, and the carrot - the virgin LI's, he decided to leave for the next versions. That's why the game was met negatively, simply because of the lack of any alternatives. Yes, the LI's may look and behave differently, but in the end they are all sluts.

I think that whores are quite useful for a harem game. They will matter if the MC wants a ffm threesome with the active f-f action, or if he wants to double-penetrate one of them. Or he might want to try some other really fucked-up kink, like leg fisting or shitting during sex. The modest and decent girl will 100% refuse.

For example, Carla, when she realises how stupid she was and runs to the MC, because she sees in him a safe and quiet haven in which she can spend her quiet and peaceful family life raising her child from another man and take a break from the wild and turbulent youth that the MC has nothing to do with. He might say - You know I've always wanted to try a threesome, find a girl and come back. And then, the girl puts on a strap-on and you decide where you want to fuck her.