VN - Ren'Py - Completed - The Entrepreneur [Complete Edition] [MisterMaya]

So, I've just wrapped up this VN, and decided to go ahead and leave a review.

If you want to skip the length, just know that I'm giving this 4 stars... almost entirely off of the story itself (and it's winding path depending on how you play with the others) and the graphics/renders. I take away a star for a weak ending. Details included if you read the spoiler; it's near the end of the review.

Now that you have the rating (plus it's in the upper-right corner; you really can't miss it), I'll give you my complete take. I'll spoiler it off to prevent it from making the already long reviews page annoyingly long. Enjoy!

The Entrepreneur is a unique AVN. Story is captivating and an interesting one among the others. It has the most ''mature'' approach to the character development, story-building and relationships among similiar AVN's.

My problem with this game is, since It's AVN, lewd scenes are far less than expected. I can see the devs intentions and why he decided that but still I think there should be a different approach to this subject.

Even though I gave 3/5 stars; This game is great and unique story-wise. This is in my must-play games. Try it and see it for yourself.

Decent effort from a first time Dev. Girls are gorgeous, story is decent, lewds leave a lot to be desired. Worth a play I say.

The Good

Renders are great from the start and just get better as the game goes on. You can tell who the Devs favorite model is, as she gets used multiple times, but for the most part the girls are gorgeous and varied.
Story is pretty heavily influenced by some other popular AVNs but is still well executed, and the writing is solid.
Music and background sounds are pretty well done.
MC is pretty passive, but at least is not annoying or a super creepy perv. Would have been nice if his hair wasn't clipping in almost every scene, but I've seen worse.

The Not so Good

Hope you are not playing for the porn because there isn't much to enjoy here.
A real shame, as the girls are very attractive, but there are far too few sex scenes, and they are not very well executed.
Needs sexy sounds in the lewd scenes.
Needs more angles and more renders and positions. Lewd animations range from terrible to decent by the end of the game, but they are not long enough.
Some of the main girls only have one real sex scene.
Bunch of random girls, but that's better than nothing I suppose.
Biggest flaw by far, is the endings.
There aren't real endings. A few silent slides for each ending, and no sexy time at all.
You can tell it was a rush job and the Dev just wanted to be done with the game, but it would still be nice if we got some kind of proper endings at some point.

Game has some issues, but it is not super long, and the beautiful ladies and decent story make it worth a look.
Hopefully the Dev can step up his lewd skills for his next game.

Just completed the game. In my opinion It's a 7.5 /10. I liked the story (I would say it's focused more on romance and drama... so forget about Harem mode xD), I also liked music, animations and renders. However, there is something off, I feel like the relationships with the girls are not that well written, sometimes It all happens too fast and sometimes nothing happens (somewhat random). Then the most important choice in chapter 4 is scripted, of course, for the sake of the plot (that time when you have to play it cool). Sex scenes happen randomly as well, sometimes it feels off (funny at times, but remember... in a drama it feels a litle out of place). Also, about sex scenes, mmmm there was something off as well and I don't mean Animations (those were good), it's the "how to get to a sex scene satisfactorily" (anticipation)... that writing part needs a bit of improvement.

Overall it was a very good AVN and hey I liked those cat renders hahah (he was the funniest ).

One of the better VNs out there.

• Story plot is not unique but it was well executed and fairly logical
• The writing is above average and not filled with errors
• You cannot date every character at the same time the entire time
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• Nice to see a game where player actions actually impact future choice
• Good character models
• Even though its "only" 4 chapters, each chapter has substantial content
• Bonus points for this actually being completed AND in a reasonable time frame. You would be hard pressed to find a better VN that was finished in two years flat

For the cons. There are a couple renders missing towards the end for one of the characters, but its pretty much a single scene. One of the LI seems to have an impossible path ending with them, I haven't used a walkthrough but you should not need a walkthrough if you do a common sense run for a specific character

TL;DR 4,5/5. Amazing renders, animations. Thrilling and interesting story. Beautiful and likeable LIs and humor... Plus minor bugs.

First I must say that this was very exciting to watch unfold. I completely dived myself into the story and enjoyed it a lot.

The renders and animations are the best I have ever seen, at least, among the best render-wise and the best animations wise... The facial movements and other scenes were so natural and really added to the immersion of story.

Alexa best girl She was so cute, funny and with loveable personality. But that does not mean other girls weren´t close. This story would not be was it is without Valentine, Lucy and Laura... Hell, even Vincent, Tony, and Michael...

Another great factory I love about this AVN is music... There is a lot of differents songs and all are very tasteful and fitting into the scene.

Lastly, hence the 4,5 rating as definitive from me, is the inconsistency of few things. I do not care for misspelings and gramatical errors, those I saw, but they never much break the immersion... The problem was with few missings renders in "crucial" moment . And relationships nonsenses, like Lucy in kitchen and Valentine after stream, even though I pursuited only Alexa and her romance, no one other...
So this was a bit anticlimatic and dissapointing, but now that I am writing this and have finished both Main story, and Christmas special, I do not care about it that much...

What I care about is this AVN in general, I have immensfully enjoyed it and can happily recommend it to you all.

Also, thanks MisterMaya (for not making Alexa sit in Christmas special...)

PS. JK. The 4th wall break was great and funny AF ----------- Thank you.

This is one of the VNs of all time. The male-written romance novel... A handful of appropriately aged females with minor insecurities, you show up, give them some male validation, and they reward you with love. You can look on any erotic novel website online and find something far better.

It's the type of book that if I saw it in a bookstore it would be 0/5 and go straight into the trash. Very very poorly written and a waste of time to read. But because it's got pictures I guess we can lower the standards and give it 2/5.

So, let's talk about the game.
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I love the dev for his hard work, he really tried his best.
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Now to shed some light on his work I have some point to make.
First, the models were really well made but not really beautiful. They are like true to life bit not very beautiful like many other VNs have.

Secondly there were really a lot of unnecessary animations, like car moving, walking etx etc and also unnecessary background information and incident of unknown people. All of these works could have been directed at more sex scene or improved longer sex scenes then that hard work would have been justified. The sex scenes were not great even though the render quality was great. Close up ones sucked even worse. some of the shots felt like fucking a doll. No stretching pussy while fucking, seemed like fucking a dead hole.
The story was very good btw.❤❤
I think the dev has great future in this business if he could just make those adjustments. I mean seriously man, the models had so much detailed work on them. I really liked that. Now if the models were beautiful and hot as Treasure of Nadia, Freeloading Family then I would rate it a 5 stars and rank in my 5 most favorite VN even though this doesn't have incest or Harem. And I am a sucker for those 2 genres.
overal...

3.5 ⭐ for me.

Done on steam
- Character relationships with the 4 main girls are very well done,
- Short interlude with other girls are also nice even if somehow not needed for the story
- lot of effort in the "ambiance". many details not needed but that are nice
- Story is well paced.
- graphics are very goods, animation are good but not the best possible ( in fact some of them are good, some of them are less good).

Et puis, cool de voir un français

It's a little hard to rate this one, but I'm leaning towards a strong 3,5 stars (rounded up to 4). I like the MC's personality and motivation, I like the main girls and there is some fun and cute side characters as well.

The overall story is nice, but I feel it was really rushed towards the end. I feel like a more fleshed-out ending for each girl would be a huge plus, but the slides are better than nothing I guess.

I think writing is strong in general, but I really feel like there should have been more choices up to the player to separate different branches and not having them "leak into" one another. It feels like some choices are presented to you that later doesn't matter the MC makes other important decisions without our input that makes him come across as more of an asshole than he probably should.

Overall, I think it's nice - if not only for the fantastic renders and character designs. I am very curious to see more from this developer.

very good game, not the usual incomplete incest shit with ultra horny females who need foursome at the first sight. Nice story and well defined characters. One of the best adult VN I have ever played.

This game has a few decent moments that make it worth trying, but it has some major issues with the execution of its story and the scenes. Mainly, it seems like the creator just gave up after a while and wanted to end the game.

The story relies on some of the most nonsensical character motivations I've ever seen in a crime story. Firstly, there's no reason for the people that go after the MC to steal his bar or the building. They just want to make the MC's as miserable as possible. The bad people are simply bad. There's no more thought put into it.

Also, the MC's motivation to not get help or go to the cops when he's not a made man (or a criminal at all) makes no sense. People are trying to kill him and the killer face was seen by multiple witnesses but MC refuses to tell the cops his story--not even as a business owner.

Also, I find it hard to believe the main antagonist could be as dumb as his is and lead the successful, happy life until the MC came to town. I don't buy that his wife never suspected he was a desperate nut job that just somehow got involved with the mob.

There is some relationship development with the main LIs at the start, but it kind of unravels by the end of chapter 3 and 4 when the story sprints to an end. However, despite the rush, there's a long scene in chapter 4 where MC goes to see a comedian, and it felt like the creator just typed "hacky MAGA stand-up comedian routine" and then pasted the whole thing into the game. It's always great to stop part-way through building romantic tension between 2 characters to do a long Joe Rogan bit.

The game is basically a harem game (unless you outright reject any the girls) until the very end. Many of the love interests don't get scenes of any kind until the very end though. I was a fan of the models chosen for each LI. I really liked a few of the scenes, but most felt too short and showed only 1 or 2 positions.

Not a bad AVN overall, but it had a lot of promise that could have been fulfilled if more work was put into it.

Loved this game. The story is interesting and although sex is part of it, it is secondary to the story being told. The renders are lovely and you are thoroughly entertained.

Some people might say that game is on shorter side or sex scenes are not repeatable but I am glad that dev focused on the story and took only as much time, as needed to tell the story. 5 stars.

This is the best VN on this forum nowdays. The story is round, and deeply interesting from the beginning, till the end. The characters have their individuality, and they have their own mistery regarding their burden from their past. The girls are hot. The real technical virtue of the game are the animations, as they redeem the texts, like in the case of films. The music, the noises and the sighs, moans or the screams of the characters unfortunately are roughly outlined, but it doesn't spoil the experience of the novel.

I was pleasantly surprised to discover a game on this site with an engaging storyline. While the narrative may not reach novel-level standards, the genuine and captivating characters added a unique charm to the experience. Their depth made the game enjoyable, despite its limitations. It's refreshing to find a game that prioritizes character development, a rare departure from the norm.

In contrast to most games on the site, which have poor narratives that solely serve as a pretext for sex scenes, this game takes a different approach. However, I must admit that the sex scenes I unlocked felt rushed and lacked memorable positions or meaningful dialogue. They were not worth revisiting as they failed to leave a lasting impression. In particular, Laura's, which had significant build-up, felt disappointing and lacked the expected impact, also only one scene for her despite feeling like the main girl in the game.

Thankfully, the game made up for this with a satisfying closure, and the credit pictures provided a nice touch by revealing what happened after the story concluded. I appreciate that the developer took the time to wrap up the narrative properly, avoiding the rushed endings that often leave players wondering.

Despite its shortcomings in the sexual content department, the game managed to maintain its appeal due to the engaging characters and their evolving relationships. However, it's crucial for games of this nature to focus on improving their intimacy scenes, as they should be more engaging and significant elements rather than mere afterthoughts. As a result, I am deducting a point from my overall rating.

In conclusion, this game presented a refreshing departure from the typical adult games found on this site, emphasizing a captivating story and well-developed characters. While the intimate scenes fell short of expectations, the overall experience was enjoyable and memorable. With some improvements in sexual content, this game has the potential to become a standout.

Great game with good renders, compelling characters and a story that gets you hooked without being too complicated. The cast of love interests is also pretty varied so there's something for all tastes

I'm not happy about it but I have to be honest with myself.
I didn't enjoy this VN nearly as much as I thought I would.

There are three main reasons why my experience was not great.

1) The fact that relationships feel very artificial. Especially the way you drop out of paths by disappointing LIs or making a choice at their expense while basically being "Mr. Perfect" up until that point. The fact that LIs suddenly surprise you with expressions of love, all of them almost at the same time when it's convenient from a development point of view. It's like checklist romance.

It's not how you write a procedural or how relationships would evolve organically, it feels more like a way for a developer to enforce a certain path in order to be cost-efficient.

2) The plot is very generic. The main antagonist it depicted as a cunning man but his methods are simply uninspired and weak in their execution. Lucy just needs to walk around one night to expose his grand scheme for everyone to see, when he uses violence it's completely disproportionate and shows desperation to a degree that was never shown or hinted at up to that point.

3) The relationship between the MC and the LI is an utterly white knight fantasy where the MC gives and the LIs take. He is definitely a superchad, without flaws and solving all conflicts without major problems. The LIs are unable to solve anything on their own, their vision and perception revolves around the MC as their only hope to achieve anything of value in their lives.

I don't want to torpedo a VN by giving a bad review and clearly a lot of work went into this project. That is why it deserves three stars. But I have seen VNs with worse technical execution that I enjoyed much more because of better writing.

The Cons
The game is missing a lot of polish. Missing renders. Dialogue that reflects choices you didn't make. Characters you never met (from a path) appearing and acting like they know you. The wrong character saying lines.

The Pros.
Decent story. Quality models. Likeable characters. Some decent comedy. Could be a good game with more polish but in it's current state It's average to slightly above average.

Quite decent AVN, definitely better than the average. And I think this is the first one made by MisterMaya. Good start, I'd say. The story is decent and the characters' writing is OK too. There's nice humor pieces as well.

As for the girls found in the game, although beauty is in the eye of the beholder, my take is that the main girls are easy on the eye. Among the side girls, Lily and Paige are also very good looking, so much, that I would have liked for them to have her own endings.

Also, I'd like to mention that during some passages I felt the influence that the work of some well known and established AVN creator has had on this game.



Now I'm gonna speak about those aspects of the game that do not work too well in my experience.

For starters, some inconsistencies can be found in the writing. For example, the protagonist's age does not make much sense to me. At some point we read that he is twenty-four, like Valentine. Is that not a strange age for someone that has abandoned college studies before the due time?

I miss more build-up of the romance with the girls.

Getting Lucy's ending can be troublesome. It is not as straightforward as with the other girls. Also, I think it would have been nice if the player had had more saying in choosing his girl in the end.

The epilogue could also be better. During the game, the protagonist become real friends with the girls. And yet, in the end, once we get to see him with the chosen girl, it's like the other girls have stopped existing altogether. We don't get to know what's become of them at all. Again, some inconsistency in the narrative.

But all in all, and despite its problems, the game is really decent and I wish its creator good luck in his future projects.

Episodes were quite good, would give it 8/10 as there were a few things I think could have been done in a better way.

1) DRILLING THE TUNNELS: The sex scenes looked rushed especially in case of Valentine and Laura. In one moment they are blowing each other off and just one click you see them riding MC like a horse at a high speed, you could have added different positions or made the scenes a little more intimate especially with Laura. The scenes looks as if the dev was trying to end them as fast as he could.

2) ENDINGS: I hoped for a little better than just a few renders during credit scenes, like a proper marriage venue scenario with all the LI's and them saying the vows with MC or their honeymoon stuff or their vacation or whatever they did in future etc........ Putting 4-5 renders during credits was kinda .
While for the LI's not chosen a little bit about them too eg: If u chose Val in the end, you could have added some renders showing Alexa succeeding in her career, Lucy opening another chain of bar, Laura and Paige enjoying their time etc. So yeah endings were a huge let down.

These were some things I found lacking in the E4, rest was quite good.