Well, content-wise this is nothing we haven't seen before. I'll leave critiquing that for others.
The English translation leaves a lot to be desired. While I don't think I've seen anything misspelled, the script is in dire need of more commas, and more importantly, a better translation of some parts.
For example, I still have no idea what's going on with the MC's part-time job situation. Here's the excerpt:
I remembered that I asked my father to give me a part-time job.
That was to have some extra money for any emergency, and he agreed.
I hoped he didn't find out which is why I woke up very late this day and will probably be late for my first day at university.
The way this is written, it seems like MC asked his dad for a part-time job, which his dad gave him, but he wants to keep it secret from his dad? This is so confusing!
Though, reading through it again just now, I think I figured it out. The "which" in the last line should be "this" or "that", and now it makes sense. Of course, it also changes the entire meaning, but at least it makes sense. Though with the quality of the translation overall, I still half-expect MC to not actually have a job at his dad's company (or whatever) even though that explanation implies it.
My point is, because most of the script contains little mistakes like this, I always expect for some small detail to be wrongly translated, leading to massive changes in meaning.
Finally, the situation with some of the choices. A couple of times, you get a choice where to spend some time before doing the next thing (like going to class for example). But those always have some options that the MC just won't do. Want MC to go directly to his classroom? Nope, gotta make sure to use every moment of the day productively, I guess. Want to go to the bathroom? Sure, but the only option you get once there is to leave again, and then we gotta pick a location again. Why give us options we can't pick? Heck, the other instance of this is even stupider. Before leaving college to go home, we must wait for Lucy, who still has something to do. Fine. Wait for her at the exit? Nope, gotta use our time; just standing around is not allowed. Go to the cafeteria? Why would you, you were just there. (I agree, but why is it an option?) In fact, there is only one place you can actually go (other than poking your head into the library and saying hi to Angie), but we can click through four other options before that, for absolutely no reason. And you probably will click on the right answer last, because why the heck would you want to go to the principal's office unless you have business there?
