@PixelsLab
Making an ongoing list of small stuff I saw while playing.
Where Inanna hugs Alice she says: But you has come as a huge surprise for me.
Should probably be: But you have come as a huge surprise for me.
At the police scene Green still has a Cyrillic name at one place.
David and the MC in front of the police: Torturing? Seriously?
should probably be: Torture? Seriously? (somebody who didn't learn English by himself may explain why)
At the same scene: If you really has been following me, you should now that I can't leave.
Should be: If you really have been following me, you should know that I can't leave.
When going to the car: Humility's never been your strong suit.
Should be: Humility has never been your strong suit.
In the car: Give me your phone before I ripped it from your arms attached.
Should be: Give me your phone before I ripped it from your arms.
Or needs a total rework. Currently it makes no sense as a sentence.
So, besides that - cool renders, you have a real eye for scenes - angles, framing, lights... really good. I don't think I have mentioned that before.
I do wonder, tho... will this be a game or just a novel? The story is interesting enough to keep me interested even if there is no game attached to it - I'm just curious.