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AnubisMRM

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Couldn't be easier. No need to bother the Dev.

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I didn't see the font options in the game. Thanks.
 

Uncle Loco

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I didn't see the font options in the game. Thanks.
I will either change the font or add options next chapter. This is a simple change that has no impact on the story, and if I remember correctly it doesn't involve much extra work on my part.
 
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Uncle Loco

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Okay so I do like this game and where it's suddenly going, but the narration scenes ruin the immersion immensely whether I can skip them or not. That's all the feedback I got. Small nitpick I know, but it's always there, lurking like a silent fart every chapter.
Thank you for the feedback. The recap and wrap-up scenes seem to be a 50/50 split with most people that play. Personally they are some of my favorite parts to write, but the main reason I added them was to get Kelly involved earlier in the story. She is my favorite character to write for, but she had no reason to be added to the story yet.

Earlier feedback from my tester teams was split on this too. I made the compromise and put in the skip options so the players can avoid it if they don't want to read them. I know I forced the very long narration in chapter 1, but I really wanted to set expectations early on for the players.

While the narrations are there to remind players what is going on, they also give me a chance to explore my poor humor in the game. There are a lot of dark moments, and mental health struggles in the story and I wanted a way to lighten that up a little bit too.

I have been cutting down the dialog a little bit from the written script to the final product you guys see here with each chapter I release. While I do not plan to remove it from this story I will probably not add it for my future planned projects.

This is my first attempt at making anything like this. I wanted to try a lot of things out the I have not seen before or have seen very little of. I want my story to feel unique and different, which is not easy to do. I also want to add clues as of things to come, and a lot of that is hidden in the dialog or a background image.

I pointed it out before but there is an interesting thing you can find if you look hard enough during the poker back alley scene. If you look for it you might find a similar clue in every chapter too. I will at some point recap a lot of these little hidden clues, but to me it is more fun to see if anyone can find them and figure out what it means.

Thank you everyone who has tried my game and the feedback. I read everything you guys write. I get a lot of good feedback and plenty of negative and neutral stuff too. All of it helps me see the areas I can improve in my writing, coding, or Daz skills. While I don't agree with some of the feedback I still read it and take it into consideration.
 

BeoWoolF

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Thank you everyone who has tried my game and the feedback. I read everything you guys write. I get a lot of good feedback and plenty of negative and neutral stuff too. All of it helps me see the areas I can improve in my writing, coding, or Daz skills. While I don't agree with some of the feedback I still read it and take it into consideration.
At the end of the day you can only write and create how you envision it, as you are writing your story, not ghostwriting.
Feedback is valuable and a treasure trove for fine tuning, find mistakes you have not thought of or missed, get new ideas and improvements even if those are for the next project.

Depending on how "relying" you are on your supporter, I guess in this case it is "not at all", it is a bad idea to go after every whim and whimsy coming from the community. It will twist your idea and creation into something you never envisioned it to be, in the end it will be the same thing that does exist for a few hundred times already.

You never can cater to all tastes and interests so, in my opinion, best option is to stay authentic.
Your story, your idea, your art, your style, your way to play it out.

Keep at it, I am looking forward to see how this will play out.
 

TigerWolfe

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I disagree that there are any narrative gaps, it clearly covers him getting normal training from the twins. And the 4th chapter was supposed to be a milk run, which went tits up... That's a pretty common narrative device.

"daddy" also wasn't pleased that the twins damaged MC.
 

Uncle Loco

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The goal of the first 3 chapters is to show the MC past life (chapter 1), recover from his injuries and get healthy (chapter 2). Chapter 3 focuses on getting the MC ready for the line of work he is going to be in with Tactical driving, hand-to-hand combat, and firearms training. There is also a valuable lesson he needed to learn about not judging a book by its cover with the twins. Don't forget in the beginning of chapter 3 the MC was kicking Madison's ass very easily as he seems to pick up new skills very easily for some unexplained reason, and he needed to realize fights won't always be that easy.

While you may interrupt it that he is beaten within an inch of his life that is not the case, and over time he improves and actually starts learning how to handle someone that is stronger, faster, and more experienced than he is. Yes, the twins are insane, that is part of their personality (which we will learn more about later), they are also very childlike at times too and do not understand things the same way as a normal sane person would (their minds are broken, more on this in future chapters). Chapter 4 shows the MC being brought into a world he was not fully prepared for as things can go wrong very quickly another valuable lesson for the MC. Chapter 5 will explain that world and the mistakes Alexis made, as well as expand the storyline. Keep in mind Chapter 4 is only a part of the day Chapter 5 will finish off that day. Whereas other chapters like 2 and 3 were months of time with you only seeing parts of it.
 
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WastedTalent

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I don't mind the questions, feedback, or requests.

I did rush to select the font last minute so a change-up is not a huge deal. I just need to find something that fits the theme of the story. I am open to suggestions for a good font.
lol people are actually picky about fonts in porn? Is that even legal? :ROFLMAO: :ROFLMAO: :ROFLMAO: :ROFLMAO:
 
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Uncle Loco

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t story is not upto the mark so are some of the renders and animations
Thanks for the feedback. As I have stated this is my first time doing anything like this. Some renders and animations are not up to par yet, but I am still learning Daz. I feel I have made some great progress from Chapter 1 to Chapter 4. Hopefully, I can still improve. Sorry the story is not up to your standards, but thank you for the feedback.
 
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snakeplisskin

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Hey uncle Loco just wanted to say i really enjoy your game so far. The story is engaging and i am enjoying the mystery so far. I am really liking your chararcters and say that you can see your improvement with each chapter im terms of graphics.

Keep up the great work!
 

Uncle Loco

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Hey uncle Loco just wanted to say i really enjoy your game so far. The story is engaging and i am enjoying the mystery so far. I am really liking your chararcters and say that you can see your improvement with each chapter im terms of graphics.

Keep up the great work!
Thanks. I really appreciate the comments. The story is the most important part for me I spent a little over a year working on it before I made a single render for the game. I will say some of the big questions will be answered in Chapter 5 when we get that much-needed conversation with Alexis. I hope you and everyone else likes the direction of things to come.

Lighting and animations are still two big hurdles for me, and while I have improved a bit from Chapter 1's release I still have a long way to go.

I am working hard on chapter 5 now and hopefully can make some good progress quickly to make up for some desperately needed vacation in a few weeks that will set me back about a week. I will release a teaser here later in the week.
 

WheresLucifer

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Thanks. I really appreciate the comments. The story is the most important part for me I spent a little over a year working on it before I made a single render for the game. I will say some of the big questions will be answered in Chapter 5 when we get that much-needed conversation with Alexis. I hope you and everyone else likes the direction of things to come.

Lighting and animations are still two big hurdles for me, and while I have improved a bit from Chapter 1's release I still have a long way to go.

I am working hard on chapter 5 now and hopefully can make some good progress quickly to make up for some desperately needed vacation in a few weeks that will set me back about a week. I will release a teaser here later in the week.
Most people deserve a break/vacation for refresher. I wouldn't worry too much if your break/vacation is a week long. You have done reasonable well doing your VN as part-time and for fun while you have other important things to do in real life.

Have a great day and be safe... (y)
 

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So, instead of taking other peoples words for this, like I did. I decided to give it a go and make up my own mind about this. As I'm not a pro at writing proper reviews, here are my thoughts.

The story is well written. However, it really needs some proofreading. Lots of 'your' when it should be 'you're'. A few typos here and there, but nothing major. Add in a few other things in the writing that I can't remember right now.

This whole "Daddy" thing with the twins was explained from others as being overly used. I did not get that feeling. I just hope that our girls are as lively about us, as the twins are about TKA.

As for the twins and TKA characters, I did not get the same feeling as a couple others posted. That TKA was being an ass and looking down on us. For me, that wasn't the case.

The sparring sessions with the twins is up next. People were saying that it was abusive. Don't remember the words that were used now. It doesn't matter. I didn't feel BB took it too far. Being in my fifties, I remember training when I was younger and the teachers actually taught us pretty much the same way. They didn't coddle us. I couldn't tell you how many times I was knocked tf out during a training session back then.

Plus, a few nitpicks here and there. Some clipping with the clothes and hair issues. I'm also not a fan of the color blue and felt the Shelby GT500 should've been red. Personal preference there. So not a big deal.

Animations are ok, but they are pretty janky at times. Also not a big deal as I don 't judge a game by the animations. Static renders are ok.

Now, for the big issue with this and why I said the renders just 'ok'. The eyes. They either make the characters look like they're blind or dead. Totally lifeless. When the characters talk with each other, they are looking into space not at each other. Hence the feeling I get that they're all blind.

With all that said, I do have a huge gripe. Why tf does TKA get the really batshit crazy girls and we don't? I'm not saying we need twins, which would be nice. But at least give us 1 girl, just one, that is as batshit crazy as they are. You could make her/them optional like you did Lily for the people who believe "Never stick your dick in crazy."

Ok. Am done now. Can't wait for the next update.
 

Uncle Loco

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So, instead of taking other peoples words for this, like I did. I decided to give it a go and make up my own mind about this. As I'm not a pro at writing proper reviews, here are my thoughts.

The story is well written. However, it really needs some proofreading. Lots of 'your' when it should be 'you're'. A few typos here and there, but nothing major. Add in a few other things in the writing that I can't remember right now.

This whole "Daddy" thing with the twins was explained from others as being overly used. I did not get that feeling. I just hope that our girls are as lively about us, as the twins are about TKA.

As for the twins and TKA characters, I did not get the same feeling as a couple others posted. That TKA was being an ass and looking down on us. For me, that wasn't the case.

The sparring sessions with the twins is up next. People were saying that it was abusive. Don't remember the words that were used now. It doesn't matter. I didn't feel BB took it too far. Being in my fifties, I remember training when I was younger and the teachers actually taught us pretty much the same way. They didn't coddle us. I couldn't tell you how many times I was knocked tf out during a training session back then.

Plus, a few nitpicks here and there. Some clipping with the clothes and hair issues. I'm also not a fan of the color blue and felt the Shelby GT500 should've been red. Personal preference there. So not a big deal.

Animations are ok, but they are pretty janky at times. Also not a big deal as I don 't judge a game by the animations. Static renders are ok.

Now, for the big issue with this and why I said the renders just 'ok'. The eyes. They either make the characters look like they're blind or dead. Totally lifeless. When the characters talk with each other, they are looking into space not at each other. Hence the feeling I get that they're all blind.

With all that said, I do have a huge gripe. Why tf does TKA get the really batshit crazy girls and we don't? I'm not saying we need twins, which would be nice. But at least give us 1 girl, just one, that is as batshit crazy as they are. You could make her/them optional like you did Lily for the people who believe "Never stick your dick in crazy."

Ok. Am done now. Can't wait for the next update.

Thanks for the feedback, and for giving my story a chance.

I know my writing is not the best which is why I have a bunch friends test and proof read each chapter before release and even with all that we still miss stuff. They do this for free so I can't blame them if they miss stuff.

As for a crazy girl don't worry Kelly is coming she will make her grand appearance in chapter 5. She won't be as violent as the twins are but she will always try to protect the mc and do a lot of the other stuff the twins like too. You will also have Charlotte who is pretty crazy too, she is optional, unlike Kelly who is in the harem automatically. There are still a few other characters yet to come or yet to be officially introduced too.

I have been working on getting the eye focal point better, but it still needs some work. Hard part is when I want you as the player to see multiple expressions at the same time (both or several people in the conversation). I will try to get better with this going forward.

Sorry the blue mustang stays as is. That is my dream car.

Animations and over all renders is something I am trying to improve a little bit each chapter. I got some tips and so far things are looking a little better. Daz is still new to me and I am still learning. I do need to pay better attention to smaller details with clipping. Some of the hair is a pain in the ass to work with (Kelly's is the worst so far). 99% of the renders have no post work done to them. They are just rendered straight from Daz with no touch up work.

Again thank you for all the feedback I appreciate it.
 
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