VN Ren'Py The Motel [Dec 2023] [DDfunlol]

[SteelyDan14]

Thanks exter and SpyderArachnid. I feel a bit better now. Lol.

With all the good VNs/Games out there now, I need a decent story. Doesn't have to be amazing, but it needs to be there. This one is disappointing because the dev has rendering skills and I love the overall setup, but the story seems to be almost gibberish in places.

 

[ddfunlol]

I say them several times, this is my first game on Renpy!
I don't have a "checker - a person who checks the story! " with me!
So yes, it is possible that I made mistakes and forgot to set conditions in some places in the game!
A nice gesture on your part that takes a minute is to write me and tell me the problem!

Otherwise yes, for a first game with multiple routes and choices, I am extremely proud of myself!
My work methods are improving and this should never happen again!

Take care of yourself and the people you love!

 

[Canto Forte]

The point of the game is not being a depressed loner who gets sloppy thirds from easy ghost fucked coke heads.
The overview is nonsense about no forced scenes when this plays like a kinetic novel where scenes are there with
your wife and all the assholes demanding her be their meat glove.
That disgusting scenes where the asshole staff member manhadles her and they do not fire the molester.

What is the point? Gamers having to take being treated like dirt by this game?

Why would anyone play? To feel like the idiot any and all assholes shit on because this is the game?

Telling players there is no forced content then going forward to stuff all assholes shitting on MC down the throats?

Just call it kitnetic: MC watching hopelessly as a fkking ghost fucks his wife and all his gueasts,
because this is the game, apparently.

Just tried this, and it seems there are a lot of inconsistencies in the story. It's like the story continues on it's own path, regardless of the choices you made, leading to a lot of stuff not making sense.

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Just a lot of inconsistencies that don't make sense. Like the game is railroaded on it's own path and your choices have no affect on that path whatsoever. Even if something didn't happen (via your choices), the story tells you it did happen.

The game is interesting still, just doesn't seem like any of your choices make a difference as the story plays out it's own way regardless of what you pick. Which just ends up leading to a bunch of inconsistencies in the story.

I'll check the next update to see if anything changes/fixes it, but otherwise I think this just won't be for me. Thanks for your work regardless.

Thanks for the feedback, I will look at where the roads cross or not!
Because of the many roads, it is possible that I made a mistake somewhere!

PS :
Statistics:
The game contains 8,535 dialogue blocks, containing 69,330 words and 342,236
characters, for an average of 8.1 words and 40 characters per block.

Being alone, I think the error is tolerable!
Take care of yourself!
DD

The Dad is alive and apparently having sex with his wife.

For many this is unacceptable. A deal breaker.

I say them several times, this is my first game on Renpy!
I don't have a "checker - a person who checks the story! " with me!
So yes, it is possible that I made mistakes and forgot to set conditions in some places in the game!
A nice gesture on your part that takes a minute is to write me and tell me the problem!

Otherwise yes, for a first game with multiple routes and choices, I am extremely proud of myself!
My work methods are improving and this should never happen again!

Take care of yourself and the people you love!

 

[SteelyDan14]

I say them several times, this is my first game on Renpy!
I don't have a "checker - a person who checks the story! " with me!
So yes, it is possible that I made mistakes and forgot to set conditions in some places in the game!
A nice gesture on your part that takes a minute is to write me and tell me the problem!

Otherwise yes, for a first game with multiple routes and choices, I am extremely proud of myself!
My work methods are improving and this should never happen again!

Take care of yourself and the people you love!

I know developing a game is hard... in fact I failed at it myself... but I am not sure I can give you any specifics as it is the English and sentence construction that are the problem. I didn't play it enough to really see any condition problems, but I can say that the game looks great and you have a good setup so you should be proud of yourself. It's just hard to write dialogue and story when English is not your native language. My only suggestion would be to get someone you can trust to get in there and edit the text; they can keep your story and intent the same but make the story work better.

 

[Canto Forte]

The dialogues are never going to work as this is hard NTR with no choice. Assholes are there to fkk you girls.
Period. You want a real game where MC has any agency, play the jeff games.
There we can actually direct some of the action. Sure, the assholes dev wants to drop pussy on to shit on MC
are still there, no plot, no explanation, no nothing - they appaer and fkk your girls.
Welcome to a pretend game where you get shit on by assholes for no reason no plot no tension,

 

[exter]

The dialogues are never going to work as this is hard NTR with no choice. Assholes are there to fkk you girls.
Period. You want a real game where MC has any agency, play the jeff games.
There we can actually direct some of the action. Sure, the assholes dev wants to drop pussy on to shit on MC
are still there, no plot, no explanation, no nothing - they appaer and fkk your girls.
Welcome to a pretend game where you get shit on by assholes for no reason no plot no tension,

You get way to worked up over a porn game

 

[ddfunlol]

SteelyDan14 , One person helps me with the proofreading ( Correction of badly written English! ) and thanks to him the quality is much better!
I am waiting and when I can, I will ask for a professional who speaks and writes slang! ( English commonly used!)
For several months, I have been looking for a professional tester and reader to tell me exactly where the problems and inconsistencies are, but still no answers!
After, I have my own style of game, some love rainbow ponies, others like goblins...personally I do in the simplicity and the easy sex!


In any case, I take note of your remarks!
I wish you the best and success in your project!

For the gamers :
You can search for the right porn game for months and never find it, because sex is a daily need and not a finality!

Take care of yourself and the people you love!

 

[mc loving VI]

LINK of the March Update ??

 

[Deleted member 4786446]

LINK of the March Update ??

we need a hero

 

[patrickB]

Are we all playing the same game? It's an incoherent mess. Yeah, the girls are hot and the scenes are good, but I have no idea what's going on in this game. Is it better in a different language or something? What am I missing?

I think you need to be in the 'zone' to play a DDfunlol game
He operates in a very specific universe with his dialogues, and his goofy English and peculiar sentences ...
If you want a deep emotional story to play out, you won't find it here, probably, or maybe, but the characters he has created are lighthearted and charming and funny, and the women are super sexy
And that's all a good porn game needs imo

 

[peterpan02]

20$ for update on release day is WAY too much m8.
im actually looking forward to this update and for a better price i probably would have subscribed.
this isnt a high quality game and you need to open your eyes and realise that.

 

[ddfunlol]

20$ for update on release day is WAY too much m8.
im actually looking forward to this update and for a better price i probably would have subscribed.
this isnt a high quality game and you need to open your eyes and realise that.

In your opinion, how much does 100 to 200 hours of work cost ?
Not to mention all the other expenses...
Many people think that creating a game is free and that there are only benefits but this is totally wrong !
Open your eyes, creating a game is not free!

Moreover, there is not one game, for 2 or 20 € you get almost 10 games!
So yes, it's really not expensive!

But I don't ask anything, people are free to do what they want, support me or download my games on pirate sites!

Take care of yourself and the people you love!

 

[patrickB]

20$ for update on release day is WAY too much m8.
im actually looking forward to this update and for a better price i probably would have subscribed.
this isnt a high quality game and you need to open your eyes and realise that.

I can only say this about your post :

https://f95zone.to/threads/the-motel-november-ddfunlol.88489/post-7192803

 

[SlayerEternal]

March update gonna release at here sometime?

 

[Dopplyn]

March update gonna release at here sometime?

At the end of the month, if I'm not mistaken.

 

[RedWyne007]

Damn the scene with the wife and black dude in the pool was hot(the creampie scene without actual sex),as for the people who complains about story...Did you actually read the story of this game lol for me i stopped reading when i saw there is no way to stop the wife interact with others

 

[sabu6]

Update?

 

[SlayerEternal]

March update pls!!

 

[beastreyiz]

March update any time soon? Looking forward to it.

 

[Swooosh]

March update any time soon? Looking forward to it.