VN Ren'Py The Nature of Magic [Ch.1] [Slate Interactive]

[Rayne]

Somebody port to Android please. The world building seems interesting.

Download JoiPlay, the game works great on it.

 

[VirsagoX]

Thought I put planned tags under the genre bit, but maybe I borked it. Anyway, here they are:

Ahegao, Vaginal Sex, Creampie, Male domination, Female Domination, Group Sex, Groping, Lesbian, Masturbation, Milf, Pregnancy, Sex Toys, Titfuck, Virgin

Great choices to add for the planned tags, i feel it will fit right in with the harem of this and the story for the modern magic feels like a great hit to add up the reasons behind it all. Can't wait for more to come.

 

[Ogre]

It's kind of hard for me to imagine a harem without some lesbian fun.
I mean, if you have 6 sexy horny babes that share you, that means 1) they only get 1/6th of the action that other women get and 2) they not only know about each other but they approve of the others, they need to get along, and they need to be satisfied as part of the group. Harems are already unrealistic, but it seems particularly unrealistic to have a bunch of horny women together happy to be sharing one man without being interested in at least playing around with each other.

Thing is, it doesn't matter what I think. I don't own the game and I don't own the definitive definition of a harem, and the developer should make the game that makes them happy.

 

[Steinchen]

That's a good note on the pranks, I don't think I did a great job articulating that that's how MC and Cerys have always been with each other. It's certainly that way in my head and I may have just not put into text properly. There was no dosing, magic or otherwise. Chapter Two turns the tables a bit, so that will hopefully address your concern in part. Should also be pretty quick to add some extra dialogue in Chap 1 to flesh out that part of their relationship better as part of the Chapter Two release. There's one line in particular that should do the trick now that I think on it. Thanks for pointing this out, I absolutely don't want it to seem like Cerys is just tormenting the player character.

Pregnancy/impregnation stuff is optional, that might be another case of me just not wording things well.

I'm open to allowing the player to choose Anwen's nickname.

Chapter One was mostly focused on introductions and the arrival of the wards. There'll definitely be more to come with both Anwen and Áine in Chapter Two.

Honestly try to tone it down a bit with Cerys will you???

it really looks like the MC is constantly being humilliated by her and you may see it as banter between two best friends,but some of it crosses a line.
Cerys and the MC are going to be Married and seeing how this chapter was seems like the MC got himself a mistress.

and what makes the MC so Special when he teaches everyone "the weave" at some point and gets disgraced by Cerys in an trainings fight so easily???

i don´t get it because now it only looks like it gets down to a path where the MC is going to be a plaything for everybody involved,and he just takes it and moves on like a good puppy.
Then the most important part is he is always on the receiving end with the pranks,and he does not fight back with pranks himself.

it is one thing if two best friends throwing banters at each other,but pranks when more persons are around that ends in the MC being humilliated often,where he is supposed to be someone special is another matter.

that probably just shows everybody that the so "special" MC is nothing but a Special Doormat.

but on other matters your first chapter was pretty good except the few flaws here and there.

 

[sisco1986]

I also think that you need to tone down cerys a little BUT some of the responses are equally bad, they want your mc to basically be The Terminator and that once he fucks a girl they go back into a closet until the mc needs to fuck them again. Having a mc with a thick skin and the rest of the cast being playful with him it's not bad at all, i swear that some people here only play games where the mc it's a hyperqualified alpha male killing machine

 

[Sterkh90]

they want your mc to basically be The Terminator and that once he fucks a girl they go back into a closet until the mc needs to fuck them again

i swear that some people here only play games where the mc it's a hyperqualified alpha male killing machine

and will there be any downsides?

 

[Steinchen]

I also think that you need to tone down cerys a little BUT some of the responses are equally bad, they want your mc to basically be The Terminator and that once he fucks a girl they go back into a closet until the mc needs to fuck them again. Having a mc with a thick skin and the rest of the cast being playful with him it's not bad at all, i swear that some people here only play games where the mc it's a hyperqualified alpha male killing machine

beeing playfull with each other is one thing buuuut....

1. When the MC is Always on the receiving end????
2. it more or less always ends in the MC get Humilliated with other persons around??

that has nothing to do with beeing playfull anymore because MC beeing "special" and all that.
that just shows he is a better doormat for everybody.

 

[Juerhullycin]

here only play games where the mc it's a hyperqualified alpha male killing machine

jokes on you there are maybe five that would qualify for that on the entire side.

as a whole i liked the start very much,
BUT from what we get told MC basically had luck that he is still alive and the whole "The Deamon" thing is basically a joke and he is slightly more dangerous that a dealer with an .38er

 

[Steinchen]

I absolutely don't want it to seem like Cerys is just tormenting the player character.

well in a way it is just like that.
there are many scenes where the MC gets literaly humilliated and he takes it like it is a normal thing that happens every day.
and the most worse part of that is in some scenes that happens with other persons around them so how does that look in other persons eyes???
i would say that goes way above some teasing or bantering among friends that goes way overboard what normal "besties" and a soon to be married person would do to to his fiancée.

think about abit please.

would a "special" person be treated that way?
how would he look like and seen in other peoples eyes especially when other family members are coming to be warded and he seems to be training them at some point then and they are maybe expected to get impregnated by such a "doormat" ??

 

[MadMoonMan69]

Please keep writing the story you want & don't change for a few whiners!

Absolutely nothing wrong with those pranks and he is very smart not to retaliate too strongly, as he is the one who abandoned her for 5 years!
All of the family are obviously much more powerful than the MC, because of education & training, he is humble (not weak) enough to recognise this. He is still an accomplished warrior!
I can't believe how sensitive some people get because the MC doesn't treat everyone woman like dogshit. I personally like a slightly toned down version of "treat them like a Princess in the streets and a whore between the sheets."

Great story, I can't wait for more!!

 

[Lady Lydia]

well in a way it is just like that.
there are many scenes where the MC gets literaly humilliated and he takes it like it is a normal thing that happens every day.
and the most worse part of that is in some scenes that happens with other persons around them so how does that look in other persons eyes???
i would say that goes way above some teasing or bantering among friends that goes way overboard what normal "besties" and a soon to be married person would do to to his fiancée.

think about abit please.

would a "special" person be treated that way?
how would he look like and seen in other peoples eyes especially when other family members are coming to be warded and he seems to be training them at some point then and they are maybe expected to get impregnated by such a "doormat" ??

The thing is the situation is complicated, he cut all contact with her and she obviously worried like crazy thinking even he might be dead, and training to the point she became one of the best diviners around likely to try to find out about him, now in exchange she has been pranking the Hell out of him, and he doesn't take it because he is a doormat, he take it because he is fully aware he fucked up and that this is his penance. Also most of the humiliation has been in private or in front of her family members, while the one thing done in front of one of the wards is when he woke up outside naked, and the goal of that wasn't humiliation, its a bait for Leela, dangling him in front of her naked to get her attention.

Like someone else mentioned too many people here have issues if the male MC isn't either a absolute alpha chad or an absolute beta cuck, with no flexibility in between. The thing about the whole Daemon is that he was a vigilante merc fighting largely some random scum, but enough of them to be noticed, also here is the thing, the Families are magical power houses, he might have fought some random magic users, but not magical power houses that were trained at the highest level possible at the earliest possible, so yea he might be a match capable of beating most people, but someone like Cerys is literally in the top ten most powerful humans around, with only elder members of longer lasting races being able to match her, she is the Kakashi Hatake of this story, while the MC is Naruto, yea right now at the start she owns him, but he has a gift, give him enough time and he'll surpass her after learning all the stuff he hasn't yet learned due to a lack of a formal magical education, but right now, yea she owns him.

Their is that little thing called character development, some people should really learn about that, and that isn't just a measure of emotional & psychological development, but power development, a character doesn't start with a god-like level of power, they have to get there. Even so called 'Chosen One' in stories don't start at the top they have to climb up to the top, its part of the story, so maybe people should be bitching less about how in CHAPTER 1 the character isn't an unbeatable god-like, and maybe give the MC time to get there by the end of the story.

 

[Steinchen]

The thing is the situation is complicated, he cut all contact with her and she obviously worried like crazy thinking even he might be dead, and training to the point she became one of the best diviners around likely to try to find out about him, now in exchange she has been pranking the Hell out of him, and he doesn't take it because he is a doormat, he take it because he is fully aware he fucked up and that this is his penance. Also most of the humiliation has been in private or in front of her family members, while the one thing done in front of one of the wards is when he woke up outside naked, and the goal of that wasn't humiliation, its a bait for Leela, dangling him in front of her naked to get her attention.

Like someone else mentioned too many people here have issues if the male MC isn't either a absolute alpha chad or an absolute beta cuck, with no flexibility in between. The thing about the whole Daemon is that he was a vigilante merc fighting largely some random scum, but enough of them to be noticed, also here is the thing, the Families are magical power houses, he might have fought some random magic users, but not magical power houses that were trained at the highest level possible at the earliest possible, so yea he might be a match capable of beating most people, but someone like Cerys is literally in the top ten most powerful humans around, with only elder members of longer lasting races being able to match her, she is the Kakashi Hatake of this story, while the MC is Naruto, yea right now at the start she owns him, but he has a gift, give him enough time and he'll surpass her after learning all the stuff he hasn't yet learned due to a lack of a formal magical education, but right now, yea she owns him.

Their is that little thing called character development, some people should really learn about that, and that isn't just a measure of emotional & psychological development, but power development, a character doesn't start with a god-like level of power, they have to get there. Even so called 'Chosen One' in stories don't start at the top they have to climb up to the top, its part of the story, so maybe people should be bitching less about how in CHAPTER 1 the character isn't an unbeatable god-like, and maybe give the MC time to get there by the end of the story.

ahhhh so that is why the MC is called "special" all the way why didn´t you say so from the beginning....
always there to take it whenever his SOON TO BE WIFE feels like pranking him to a degree when it is not normal "bestie" banter anymore wow...

of course it is normal pranking too to wake up in shorts in the grass outside,or going to breakfast to the kitchen naked,and for him strangers are there where is the harm.....
and all the other things that happened when Cerys family was present.....

everything for character development okayyyy ......

i understand all that banter and pranking to a degree,but more only makes him look like a puppy that is at the mercy of his mistress...

i played many games but to put THAT under the roof of Character Development thats new...
you need to make a hell of a plottwist to change that,and i don´t think that will change the behaviour of Cerys because that was mentioned at the beginning already that Cerys and the MC where always like this.
so the pranking is not justified because he was gone for 5 years and cut all ties.

and don´t get me wrong i like this first chapter and just wrote to maybe turn it down a litte with Cerys.

 

[Juerhullycin]

yall need a fucking refresher what the fuck banter means.


See the word exchange in both definitions?
it denotes a back and forth, something that goes both ways. (bonus points if you also saw the words good-humored, playfull and friendly)

In this game nothing goes both ways, MC is constantly shit on.

All of the family are obviously much more powerful than the MC, because of education & training, he is humble (not weak) enough to recognise this.

were i am from we call the constant hackling of someone weaker than you bullying. To justify that with their noble status makes it look worse not better.

while the one thing done in front of one of the wards is when he woke up outside naked, and the goal of that wasn't humiliation, its a bait for Leela, dangling him in front of her naked to get her attention.

you mean the one were he strolled naked into the kitchen because of a prank in front of all of them doesnt count?

The thing about the whole Daemon is that he was a vigilante merc fighting largely some random scum, but enough of them to be noticed, also here is the thing, the Families are magical power houses, he might have fought some random magic users, but not magical power houses that were trained at the highest level possible at the earliest possible, so yea he might be a match capable of beating most people, but someone like Cerys is literally in the top ten most powerful humans around, with only elder members of longer lasting races being able to match her

I have no grief that he gets bested by Cerys because its like you described it, but he learned nothing in five years? even fighting street mages and scum he should have learned something.

like i said he survived by dumb luck and his demon persona, while hyped up by everyone, is in reality like congratulating a toddler for his first unaided step. We have a legendary Cop of the super special delta ultra elite force fawning over MC for something any other mage could do with the flic of their wrist.

It sounds like MCs speciality is knifing enemies in the back while they are distracted. But somehow he gets praised for it like he battered down some castle gate and stormed it all by him self.

 

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