This is an excellent start to an adventure; your writing and dialogue are quite good, and the "set and setting" is just fantastic. The joke also gave me a sensible chuckle. I salute this and your further efforts!
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Thank you so much! That joke is the part of the story I am most proud (or least ashamed) of
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- Jul 30, 2017
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Nice writing and fetishes. Only thing I ask if you never migrate this game to QSP or Twine, they suck for compatibility and honestly the user-interface sucks.
- Jul 26, 2017
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QSP is cancer all out. Twine tho i disagree about twine interface, it's quite nice.
- Jul 26, 2017
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Nefail is the best girl!
Can MC have her babies?!
Otherwise liked Ch2 a lot.
Like the dynamic between characters a lot. It's rare to see a love dom type relationships in these type of games(atleast i havent seen much of it), instead most porn games devolve into some form "EAT DICK YOU WHORE" abusive dom.
Bit of a spoiler question:
Can we skip giving Matron MC virginity and have Nefail take it? It's most appropriate and logical and wholesome direction to go(i might be biased)
Can MC have her babies?!
Otherwise liked Ch2 a lot.
Like the dynamic between characters a lot. It's rare to see a love dom type relationships in these type of games(atleast i havent seen much of it), instead most porn games devolve into some form "EAT DICK YOU WHORE" abusive dom.
Bit of a spoiler question:
Can we skip giving Matron MC virginity and have Nefail take it? It's most appropriate and logical and wholesome direction to go(i might be biased)
- Apr 27, 2017
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the game desperately need PARAGRAPHS
otherwise
my eyes
bleed
otherwise
my eyes
bleed
coc is futa's dogshit
Liking this but honestly, gotta say some of the longer pages could do with being broken up into a couple different pages, gives the text more room to breath.
- Jun 2, 2018
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You gotta love a story with some actual passion behind it. I'll give it a shot later. Hope it's good. But not too good. Hate to be left waiting.
Very unlikely. It's really not for me and I would probably write it poorly. Male on futa on the other hand...
You are not the first reader that points that out. I'll see what I can do for chaper 3.
- May 1, 2021
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Love the way you weave words. I wish in the future you would add a glossary for those who are not familiar with Forgotten Realms. Wish you the best and will await for the next chapter!
- Jun 28, 2017
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Don't really see the value of writing a non-male society and when everything grows a dick and most scenes are hetero.
The writing is pretty alright, I dont like reading walls of text with those colors tho. The optimal way to experience the "game" is reading it on kindle.
The writing is pretty alright, I dont like reading walls of text with those colors tho. The optimal way to experience the "game" is reading it on kindle.
Not everything, on the contrary very few are admitted to novitiate, fewer still pass the ordeal.
I was actually thinking of implementing that directly in the game but opted not to. I've seen it done very well in videogames, such as Wrath of the Righteous, Pillars of Eternity or Tiranny, but I really don't like to interrupt the reading to check a note. I do my best to introduce unfamiliar elements slowly as the story goes along.
But if anyone can suggest me a less intrusive alternative, I'm open to suggestions
.Love the story so far and can't wait to read more of it ! Maryl is deliciously sweet (as sweet as honey, in fact) and needs to be protected at all costs !