Yeah nah that was disgusting.
Didn't need to read the encyclopedia about Emiliys spanking adventures. And don't want to be anywhere near that used-up pussy.
Forced LI, not a virgin, completely unnecessary.
The monologues of the MC are endless.
And how the hell is he dumb enough to believe this atrocious suicide-bs?
Dev: it's early enough.
Your LIs look awesome. The story is jarring but serves the purpose well enough.
Since you fucked up so bad with the dialogue: make them virgins.
Neighbour waited for MC, Emily was grossed out of men because of the father, Brighton is young and eager to experiment.
Cut about 80% of the monologues and focus on actual events with pictures. Talk about the abuse of Emily? Don't call it spanking, he hit her, she had enough, she fled. Done.
Just my suggestions tho, it is your game. But I see abandoned-signs all over it.